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#1  Edited By RedRobinTimDrake

Deadshot stands perched on a building with his goons on each side of a bank bank door. "Head in" Deadshot says in a low voice. Goons on top of the roof clip wires turning the alarms off. The rest of the goons head in the doors after picking the locks with Deadshot walking in behind them. Once the goons pack up all the money a cop passes by for a check up on the bank seeing that the doors to the bank were open. "The cops are hear get down" One of the goons says. "hello is any one in here!" The cop then walks over to the cashier counter and sees the cash register open. A goon then gets up shooting the cop in the back.

"Dumb ass why did you do that" Deadshot says with an angry voice. A child in a window looks down at the bank hearing the gun shot, the boy yells for his mom. The mom then calls the cops. A few seconds later the police surround the building. "come out with your hands in the air!" commissioner Gordon says through a speaker in a cop car. "stay down!" Deadshot grabs a rpg off one of the goons back and fires it at a cop car making it explode. "well be hear for a while" Deadshot says in a low tone.

THE end of this part of the story

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#2  Edited By DickGrayson

AMAZING! I loved it! Best one yet!

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#3  Edited By JediWaffles

@DickGrayson said:

AMAZING! I loved it! Best one yet!

My sarcasm senses are tingling...

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#4  Edited By DickGrayson

@JediWaffles: I meant best one he has made yet.

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#5  Edited By RedRobinTimDrake

what

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#6  Edited By batkevin74

@RedRobinTimDrake: Nice! Some minor grammar mistakes

@RedRobinTimDrake said:

"Dumb ass why did you do that" Deadshot says with an angry voice.

His sentence needs a question at the end. But good, keep it up

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#7  Edited By The Impersonator

A great shot. Although I would say it's short but a good headstart.

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#8  Edited By RedRobinTimDrake

I'm making a part two its just that i got tired when i was making it so i went to bed and thanks

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#9  Edited By JediWaffles

@ OP If you want, i could edit and proofread any further works you might want to post. Your works have some aesthetic issues, but nothing that can't be fixed. PM me if you need help!