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Earth - 585. Part IV. (X-Men: First Days, 1)

I've always liked how marvel did alternate realities (the Marvel Multiverse). I like seeing familiar heroes with small or big changes. So I decided to write an alternate reality of my own. Earth - 585!

Continued from Part I, Part II and Part III:

This is the fourth part of the series:

X-Men: First Days (Part 1):

“Welcome to the Xavier Institute for the Gifted!” Exclaimed Max as Bobby stepped out of the limo. Bobby gaped as he stared at mansion.

“And I thought the limo was nice! Speaking of which, can I use this whenever I want?”

Max laughed, “Please come in.”

Following Max into the school Bobby mumbled, “I was serious…”

Max and Bobby entered the mansion. In front of Bobby stood an enormous room with a large statue in the middle and a staircase on the left leading to the upper floor. The walls were covered with paintings.

“Pietro!” Max called out. A white haired boy zoomed into the grand hall from the next room, lines of color following him as he moved. He stopped right in front of them.

Max introduced them, “Pietro, this is Robert. Robert, this is my son, Pietro.”

“I prefer ‘Bobby’.” He corrected.

“It’s nice to meet you, Bobby,” said Pietro.

“Pietro is also a student here, and a member of the team,” said Max. “Dinner is at seven o` clock. The other students arrived yesterday, so classes will start first thing tomorrow morning.”

“Oh, and if you need anything, don’t be afraid to ask,” he added. “Pietro, please take Bobby’s bag and show him to his room.”

Pietro was already at the top of the nearby staircase, holding Bobby’s bag.

“Come on!” said Pietro, “I’m waiting!” He zoomed off into the hallway.

Bobby quickly ran to the top of the stairs. “Slow down, I can’t keep up!” He called out, not knowing where Pietro went. Pietro appeared at the end of the hallway, “Stop whining,” he said, and disappeared as quickly as he came.

“Stop running off like that!” Bobby yelled as he ran down the hall. After turning the corner and not seeing Pietro, he stopped to take a breath. Pietro zoomed back from the next corner, “Are you coming?!”

“I… said …” Bobby panted. He felt a familiar cold rush down his arm. “… Slow down!” A cold, pale blue beam shot out of Bobby’s hand and hit Pietro in the face.

Bobby felt a gust that forced his eyes closed. When he opened them he saw Pietro standing an inch away, staring at him. Pietro’s face was turning red where the ice blast hit him.

“That hurt!”

Suddenly they were both lifted into the air and moved apart.

“Pietro, stop harassing the new kid,” said a red-haired girl who had one hand at her temple and her other hand pointing up.

“Buheblastedme!” Pietro said too quickly.

“Slow down, I can’t understand you when you talk in super-speed,” said the girl.

Pietro took a deep breath. “I said that he started it.”

“What are you, five?!”

“Just put me down.”

“Do you promise to behave?”

“Fine!”

She put her hands down. Pietro fell to the floor, while Bobby floated down softly. Pietro zoomed off.

“It’s a pleasure to meet you, Bobby. My name is Jean Grey,” the girl introduced herself.

“Nice to… wait, how do you know my name?”

“Sorry, I’m telepathic, I accidentally read your mind,” Jean explained. ”I can’t really control it yet, but hey, that’s why we’re here, right?”

“If you’re telepathic how did you lift us earlier?” Bobby asked.

“Telepathy is only my secondary mutation. My main power is telekinesis, which I can control just fine,” Jean answered. “I’ll show you to your room if you want,” she offered lifting the bag telekinetically.

“Ya, that’ll be great!”

“I would offer to give you a tour, but this place is so big that I spent all day yesterday exploring, and I still haven’t seen the entire place.”

Bobby laughed.

“Oh, and… thanks,” said Jean.

“For what?”

“For thinking I’m pretty.”

Bobby blushed.

TO BE CONTINUED...

This is the first time I'm writing like this, so your reviews and comments are important!

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@frochez: Thanks for the advice. I agree about quicksilver's lines, i only wrote it because my brother wanted me too.

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I think you've got a good thing going here. It's nice to see an x-men/brotherhood team which isn't obsessed with characters like Wolverine and Cyclops (who are, in my opinion, REALLY over-rated). Also, I like the idea of a potential Phoenix plot which isn't focused on Jean- maybe she can stay alive for more than a few stories for once! I like your mix of mutants for the team- having it run by Magneto reminds me a bit of AoA, and having both Quicksilver and Scarlet Witch as x-men could also be really interesting. The only thing I'm not so sure about is the bit where you describe the lines of colour trailing behind Pietro when he moves- they use it in comics to emphasise his speed, and i'm not sure it translates too well within a text-based story. Maybe have him leave a blurred after image instead? Altogether this looks like a great story- keep it up!

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Thank you!

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this was nice i liked it keep it up