The Screwtape Murder...

Introductory...

Meet Adam,

A typical eight year old kid. A creature so pure and full of innocence. He suffered a lot of beating from his father. A man addicted to marijuana with a twisted brain. While his mother, a call center agent. He is an outcast amongst children his age. Because of his pure innocence, he is the least imperfect man during his times, a time when the world has been corrupted in evil...

Listen to the story of a kid who encounters the supernatural. Feel his suffering through-out the last week of his life. Join him as he ascends to an empty white room you can call purgatory.

I advise you to sit and read with much comfort. And I hope you enjoy the story I have for you.

The Last Seven Days...

I am Adam. And last night I died...

I don’t actually remember what happened all I know is my name, and now I am being sucked in this white light. It is so bright but is apparently not blinding me and this beautiful voice started to speak unto me... He sounded like thunder, very firm. But He did not give me a thing to be scared of I felt so assured--- then I realized I am talking to an omnipotent being that calls himself the God. My heart-beat stopped for a while till’ I realized I was already dead, then he spoke: Welcome my child I have been waiting. “me? You are waiting for me? “ I felt a little embarrassed when I realized it was just me talking to myself in a big white and empty room. Then the voice spoke: Oh! I see you don’t like to look like a silly person talking to himself? Then he laughed. A laugh that could possibly shake the earth. Then a body came in front of me, with a face that I cannot distinguish. He looked human but He did not seem to be like you or me, he was heavenly. Then trees began to sprout in the room and it was nothing like the nature here on earth it was just so beautiful that I felt like incinerating due to all the pureness and holiness of all of these wonders. Then I fainted.

I woke up in a bench... and I was there trying to recall what happened...

A man claiming to be the personification of death told me to see the last week of my life, the moments of my life which seemed to be most blurry. Then the beautiful park began to warp away giving me a headache and turned into a typical Hollywood cinema. Everything seemed more mundane than the park which gave me the sense of being at home. I was about to ask “mister-angel-of-death” a popcorn when he handed me a box of one. Then I began to capture what his face was (I didn’t got to check out his appearance because he was extremely tall). He had pitch black eyes but never looked insanely evil, he had a crooked nose and a mouth that looked as calm as the sea. He smiled as he handed me the popcorn and said that I should be prepared for what I was about to see. I don’t have an idea what is up with him.

I was shocked after the words last seven days flickered on the screen...

Then all of it came to me. I remembered it all...

DAY 1-July 27

I was having a beautiful day, not until the most horrific thing in the world happened...

It was six p.m. My father brought a fresh head. Our next door neighbour’s head, Mrs. Redd was up in front me body-less. I cried thinking that my father has totally gone psycho due to his pot addiction. But then that night he had a different aura, something evil is up on him. Then he sat down our front porch and sported out Mrs. Redd’s decapitated head out in front of our house smiling. I was so scared I was just behind the door crying. A couple of minutes later my mother got home and was shocked at the sight she saw. My momma ran around our street screaming for police while my father ran for the kitchen to get the butcher knife. Father grabbed my mother by her ponytail and dragged to the basement. I was so scared I cried so hard and then I heard her last words, my mother screaming: JESUS!!! I was so scared that I ran for my room and hid in the closet. Seconds turned into minutes and

I slept. I woke up with a blurry vision and everything was red. I was shocked.

Day 2-July 28

I lost my right eye...

I saw Daddy smiling in front me. But all I see are hues of red, it’s like washing myself in blood. Then it came to me. The kick. Excruciating pain was all over my head and blood was spewing out of my eye sockets, I wanted to cry but I can’t. Then our neighbour’s son Harden Redd was outside screaming.

“Now where’s my mother you bastard!” he shouted out at the face of my father. My father only laughed

He seemed so evil at that time. My father went to the fridge and got Mrs. Redd’s head, he threw it at Harden and the man was stunned seeing his mother body-less . I pity him. I am now sitting at the couch listening to my father and harden arguing. “too much crack Dan! Too much crack got you into this!” harden said. “Ooooh your momma’ feels so good as I entered her dead cold body... She gave me a case of necrophilia!!! HA Ha ha!” my father answered. I don’t know much about what they were talking about but they scared me... “This is not crack Harden! And I am not Dan anymore...” Father screamed.

“I am the Screwtape!!! Your mother will spawn me a breed of demons that will bring upon the doom of God! We will let Lucifer escape from the pits of hades and bring the end to mankind!!!” I was so scared that I ran to my bedroom and tried to sleep. Father just scared me... I was praying to God during those times... I was crying blood and tears... then I heard a scream outside my room... then I fell asleep...

Day 3-July 29

I saw Harden Hanging on our front door... Literally...

He was like a bearskin hanging on our front door. His left hand was holding his mother’s head... then I realized my father was not around our house... My eyes recovered from the pain I was feeling... and for the first time in two days I actually got the moment to eat... I did not enjoy my morning meal because the aura of the house seemed so dark with all of the negative energy surrounding the house... Then he entered the backdoor, Screwtape, a man who now holds my father’s body. “Oh hi there Kiddo! I was just digging out there at the backyard... That is where I let all hell break loose! Aha! Ha! Ha!” Screwtape said. “oh I see You already eaten your breakfast! Well you see kiddo I’ve been hungry digging the backyard! But since you ate the cereal, I’m gonna’ eat you then. My heart was thumping harder than what it normally is at the times I am scared. He then grabbed the butcher knife he used to kill Mrs. Redd.

He strapped me to the chair and covered my mouth with duct tape. I saw him strapping me with old sheets of cloth and strapped me another layer of duct tape around my body excluding my left arm. My heart was racing at a faster pace right now and as he grabbed my left arm he quickly rapped his butcher knife towards my wrist.” AAAAAARGH!!!!”I screamed. It probably was the loudest of all my screams...

And after that wail I collapsed and lost breath... I thought I was dead...

Day 4-July 30

I still managed to see the sunlight...

“why don’t you just kill me?” I said. “Oh kid you wouldn’t understand... All the sacrifice for Satan thingy...” Screwtape replied... “ You’re going to sacrifice me to Satan?” I said “ oh yeah Son... You lost your other eye and your left hand but you’re still fine as dandy.” I was a part of a bigger scheme.... I just realized that I could cause a greater harm to the human race... I cannot let Lucifer escape... “ why me?” I asked. “Why what?” Screwtape replied. “ why me who you would sacrifice?” I replied. “ two reasons kiddo, one, You are an easy target... Your daddy is a wasted man and two, You are the most innocent kid in your world as of now. Innocence a power every child has... oh such purity!” Screwtape stated. It kept me thinking until the time before sleep... Innocence how does a demon know a thing about this?

Day 5-July 31

I was evaluating all of this...

“Satan/Lucifer is having a jailbreak that will be led by Screwtape. He wants me to be sacrificed because I am full of innocence... But why did he bring Mrs. Redd’s decapitated head? I know he killed Harden because Harden pissed him off...” I whispered to myself. “ you bastard!” Screwtape said. He slapped me which was strong enough to send me flying across the living room. “did you call that priest?” Screwtape said it calmly this time. “ n-no... I said it still stuttering, Screwtape really scares me... “ he slapped me for the second time and sent me flying again across the living room to the kitchen, My back hurts as it hit the door. The so called priest came inside asking for some help. “ Hi Sir but I feel a really bad presence in your house... Need a help? The man said outside the house... Screwtape opened the door and dragged him, “ I am the bad presence idiot.” He grabbed the poor man by his collar and dragged him to the backyard and tossed him in that hole he’s been digging. “ Feast on that, master... for now... “ I saw flames sputter out that hole for a second which scared me... It was 6:00 pm and I need to get some sleep I passed the calendar and saw that the full moon is two days from now it gave me a chill but I ignored it because I felt like sleeping.

Day 6

I had this sudden realization...

Two days from now is full moon, Witches and demons celebrate, the moon probably has an effect. It hit me and It got me thinking...” I should get away from here before I get chopped into pieces...” I whispered to myself. “ hi kiddo read for the big day tomorrow? I was scared because my body was slowly dying...

Then the movie was cut...

“What Happened Mr. Death?” I said

“Well you did not actually reach the seventh day...” The angel of death answered...”

“what did you mean? the Title said Last seven days, I need to know what happened!” I said loudly.

“You did not die Adam” The angel of death replied.

Just then my heart thumped hard—

It thumped harder this time...

*Tooooot....

I woke up...

I was in a hospital bed….

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11 Comments
Posted by ARMIV2

Wow...kind of a dark story, but a good read nonetheless.

If I may offer some critique, I would advise tuning some of the details out just to make them clearer.

Posted by UnderDogs_OverBoard

@ARMIV2: Thanks dude hope you enjoyed it!

Posted by UnderDogs_OverBoard

BUMP!

Posted by Cozy_Da_Djed_Eye

This is crazy good, man.

Is this your RPG character or a random story blog?

Posted by UnderDogs_OverBoard

@CozyDaPrynce: Random...

But the epic wish of a geek named N31L was based on my character...

might add you in those...

i'll be making more spin-offs of it y'know?

Posted by Cozy_Da_Djed_Eye

Nice. Keep it up, duder. You can really write. I'm taking notes =]

Posted by Joygirl

Okay... I was solicited to read this, and I did -- well, I started to. I got a few paragraphs in before realizing this was not really the story for me. Not that it was too dark -- I like dark. But it needs some serious work. I'm not a professional critique person (whatever they are) but I can give you some pointers, starting off with the first thing I ever tell an aspiring writer: respect the comma. To a writer, punctuation should be your spouse, and commas should be your children. Be fruitful and fill the story with as many as it needs. When you type, say the lines aloud. Chances are you'll use inflections and pauses to express the story -- use commas to place those pauses, guiding your reader to hear the words as you write them. Without commas all your sentences sound like this and it gets really awkward to read them making you have to look back and make sure you read the whole thing correctly once you've finished the sentence and think you might have the gist of it. And you did use punctuation, just not quite enough. The story felt a bit rushed and clipped, and I'm hoping you'll take my advice to heart and see if you can give your tale an editing-over. Then I'll take another look. ^_^

Posted by MarbleDynamic

Wow...... Mind blown.....

Posted by wildvine

Creepy. But very good.

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Posted by UnderDogs_OverBoard

@wildvine: thanks miss wildvine!

^_^