You know that my review is always "Good chapter", so from now on I'll try to criticize, athough I'm bad at criticizing in general.
I am getting slightly annoyed from when they see any kind of sentinel, any kingd of past enemies,any reminder about their past lives, most of the kids think about "Oh my god! They killed my friends! We were so young, but now we are here! I'm so scared, but I must stand for myself!" It is getting old. Get more creative!:) At least you had a joke from Ben about grumpy X-men. Also, I forgot why Jean Grey's students went with Ariel. I thought at first they were looking for repowered mutants and they wind up Kaga's lair. What was the real purpose for their "field trip"? Then that dialogue between Rachel and Frost, and then Ororo. I figured out what was the point of their dialogue only after Ororo mentioned that the kids must stand out for themselves. Hope's intentions are difficult for me to understand. I got confused also about where is kaga's lair exactly. is it on asteroid or on the Moon. Why Megan says about Moon and then Hope says that they are going to the Sun? And when Josh says about shutting down the Sentinels, isn't it an equivalent of that country not getting destroyed because the Sentinels are goint to be shut down? When Ceccily says that Santo never ceases to amaze her, does she mean Santo's innocence that with all bad things that happened he haven't changed? Everything is so cryptic for me, most of the dialogues and actions, I an dumb so I need more explanations. I hope when the arc will be over most of the mysteries will be resolved.
Maybe it is just that you are writing in comic script format that confuses me, so my critique might be unfair. Anyway, good chapter! keep going!
PS Maybe It is just me, but I think you are deliberately keeping David out of action so he can make a big appearence and save everyone like a badass:) I like to think that, at least.
PPS Sorry for my poor language, I'm just a dumb Russian guy, чёрт побери.
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