JLA: PROMETHEUS FIRE (part 1)

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JLA: PROMETHEUS FIRE

We have been at it all week, this is not normal! Tuesday a tsunami hits the west coast of the states! Thursday a storm like none that I have seen before obliterates Bangkok! And now an emergency evacuation because Vesuvius is ready to explode! You know Vesuvius, the great volcano that destroyed Pompeii! Yeah it decided to wake up! I barely see my partners, my friends as I fly through the sky full of volcanic ash! Bruce is exhausted but restless evacuating people,saving lives, Aquaman and Flash are clearing paths so the evacuation teams can make it to the shore where the “Bat-Tanker” is, Bruce has seriously taken the vehicle naming in a complete other level! I wonder how Green Arrow will respond; the arrow car wasn’t very successful! The volcano finally rests! I am going back to Bruce to get orders, I am required to do all the heavy duty today since Diana and Hal are dismissed. Diana has problems in “Paradise” and Hal is out with the Green Lantern Corps. I have delved into thought. I can’t believe that these natural disasters are happening by coincidence in less than a week! Without noticing I have reached Bruce. He seems troubled, I bet it is for the same reason that I am! Even though I know the answer I ask: “What’s troubling you Batman?”

-This is the third grand scale disaster in less than a week Superman, it can’t be a coincidence!

-I was thinking the same thing but I can’t find someone who would profit by these events or who could have caused it!

Bruce makes that almost silent grunt which means he is thinking! Cyborg informs us about the human casualties and the injured. The number doesn’t make me happy. A black eagle pass above my head! This can't be a good sign!

End of part 1

Hello guys! So what do you think of my story if I get good feedback I will continue it! I hope you liked it and if not tell me why?

Thanks in advance!

10 Comments
10 Comments
Posted by nerdork

I think the idea is very sound, and you have set up the story well; however, you may want to make the chapters more involved; meaning, a bit longer with more character interaction, and not just implied interaction. There are also some grammatical errors, but those are easy to fix. Again, this is a really good idea, one that you can take in many different directions; it just needs a little polishing and lengthening. IMO.

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@nerdork said:

I think the idea is very sound, and you have set up the story well; however, you may want to make the chapters more involved; meaning, a bit longer with more character interaction, and not just implied interaction. There are also some grammatical errors, but those are easy to fix. Again, this is a really good idea, one that you can take in many different directions; it just needs a little polishing and lengthening. IMO.

Thank you!

I made this part short to see if people like the narrative approach and if not to change it!

The grammar mistakes may continue because english is not my mother language but i will try really hard to diminish them!

As for the idea i think people will like the direction the story will take ^_^

Posted by batkevin74

@Squalleon: It's a good start, bit short but it is a great start especially Bat-Tanker

Posted by Squalleon

@batkevin74 said:

@Squalleon: It's a good start, bit short but it is a great start especially Bat-Tanker

thank you!

Posted by thespideyguy

@Squalleon: I like the idea of a justice league story threw Superman's view. But work on Superman's voice.

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Posted by TheIncredibleSuperHulk8642

This is great. As the other's said a bit short but still great :)

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