You're prose style is acceptable, but please never again use the phrase "thought to himself". It is one of the most contemptible lines of first-person narratives. Unless your story concerns telepathy, you need not specify that your protagonist thought it proper to conceive his own thoughts in his mind. It is redundant.
@Rudyftw: I had considered for my proposal an ending for part two where Bruce Wayne receives an invitation to go to the circus (make a lucky guess as to what the main attraction would have been), but I thought the Talia Al Ghul ending was more appropriate.
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