VENGEANCE OF THE CULT OF KHONSHU #2 - (Script)

PREVIOUSLY: VENGEANCE OF THE CULT OF KHONSHU #1 - (Script)

"Trinity V Trinity" - Rated M

Page 1

1.1

An image of a crescent moon, something taken from a photograph.

TRAINING PROGRAM: KHONSHU IS THE OMEGA-GOD. THE GOD OF GODS.

1.2

Daniel Ketch riding his motorcycle through an empty road, wearing a bandanna over his face, along with big shades.

CAPTION: KETCH: There used to be a worldwide unit of Ghost Riders. I only found this out recently, when Johnny and I took down Zadkiel, the evil angel.

1.3

An image of a man with his face split open, a large crescent mark carved into his face.

TRAINING PROGRAM: KHONSHU CAN DEFEND HIMSELF. KHONSHU IS NOT WEAK.

1.4

Close up on Ketch.

CAPTION: KETCH: But over the past few weeks, I’ve felt the agony of… of separation. And then death.

CAPTION: KETCH: The spirit of vengeance is angry.

CAPTION: KETCH: And afraid.

1.5

An image of a crescent dart.

TRAINING PROGRAM: THAT IS WHY YOU ADMIRE KHONSHU.

TRAINING PROGRAM: THAT IS WHY YOU WILL OBEY KHONSHU.

1.6

A little boy is sitting in a chair, a large mechanical helmet around his head, with a visor in front of his face. The chair has metal bonds over his arms that are part of the chair itself, it’s a high-tech piece of mind control equipment.

CAPTION: KETCH: It knows exactly what’s happening. Someone’s trying to eat it.

CAPTION: KETCH: Someone’s trying to eat me.

CAPTION: KETCH: The paranoia has only gotten worse over the last few weeks.

CAPTION: KETCH: I’m not even sure if I’m myself anymore, or some combination of the two.

TRAINING PROGRAM: AND THAT IS WHY KHONSHU CAN DEFEND HIMSELF. THAT IS WHY KHONSHU IS NOT WEAK. BECAUSE YOU ADMIRE KHONSHU. YOU ADORE KHONSHU. YOU SERVE KHONSHU. YOU OBEY KHONSHU.

1.7

An entire room full of kids strapped in chairs like the boy.

TRAINING PROGRAM: YOU LOVE KHONSHU. AND KHONSHU HATES YOU.

Page 2

2.1

Close up on a short man’s bearded face, covered in blood. He’s in a dark area.

CAPTION: TRAINING CAMP RE-EDUCATION CELL 45-A.

DOCTOR JONES: oh god

DOCTOR JONES: oh devil

DOCTOR JONES: blood blood everywhere

2.2

Pan out. The man is covered in his own blood. There are syringes (probably adrenaline) everywhere, he’s cut his own gut open. He’s drawn a satanic star on the wall. He’s in a dark, lonely prison cell. There are candles lit.

DOCTOR JONES: oh devil devil sweet devil*

DOCTOR JONES: i can’t be saved*

DOCTOR JONES: please-please-please kill me

DOCTOR JONES: and the moon knight*

DOCTOR JONES: please please*

DOCTOR JONES: f**k the little bastards i don’t care about them*

DOCTOR JONES: revenge revenge revenge i want my revenge*

CAPTION: TRANSLATED FROM DIFFERENT LANGUAGES.

2.3

Dr. Jones looking up at the ceiling, eyes wide.

DOCTOR JONES: they made me do this

CAPTION: KOWALSKI: Funny. I hear prayers…

2.4

A seemingly ordinary man, Kowalski, sitting in a diner eating a piece of pie and drinking coffee.

CAPTION: KOWALSKI: Does that mean I’m going to have to give up my coffee? That would piss me off.

2.5

Khonshu in the throne room, his eyes wide.

KHONSHU: LOCKLEY!! HEAR ME!

Page 3

3.1

Moon Knight Lockley looks up from a control room.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: W-what is it, Khonshu?

KHONSHU: KETCH IS NOT THE FINAL PIECE!

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: What?!

KHONSHU: THERE IS ANOTHER! A SPIRIT BORN FROM A POWERFUL MEDALLION, AN ARTIFACT THAT EVEN THE DEVIL WANTED FOR HIMSELF!

3.2

Kowalski looking at his slice of pie.

CAPTION: KOWALSKI: Something about children being bastards and anger.

CAPTION: KOWALSKI: Please be a fluke.

CAPTION: KOWALSKI: I love this pie.

3.3

The dead Doctor and his satanic symbol on the wall, two MK Mercs walk into the cell to discover it.

KHONSHU: BUT A SPIRIT NONETHELESS!

KHONSHU: ONE OF THE MOST RUTHLESS!

KHONSHU: FIND THE DOCTOR AND GET RID OF THE SUMMONING SYMBOL HE USED!!!! QUICKLY, MY SON!!!

MK MERC 1: What… the hell?

3.4

The bloody star starts to glow.

CAPTION: KOWALSKI: Dammit.

3.5

Moon Knight Lockley running down a dark and disgusting hallway.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: WHAT AM I DEALING WITH HERE, MY LORD?

3.6

Molten chains rip out of the symbol, impaling the MK Mercs through the face and stomach, respectably.

KHONSHU: SOMETHING WE SHOULD HAVE BEEN PREPARED FOR!

Page 4

4.1 Splash Page

Standing on top of the corpse of the doctor is VENGEANCE.

VENGEANCE: I was really f**king hungry.

VENGEANCE: But this’ll do.

CAPTION: KETCH: Dammit.

CAPTION: KETCH: I feel it.

Page 5

5.1

Ketch on the road. He has two MK Mercs on motorcycles following him.

CAPTION: KETCH: It’s close.

5.2

Ketch turning his head.

CAPTION: KETCH: Too close.

5.3

Vengeance breaking through a wall, peeking his head out, his skull somehow conveys glee.

CAPTION: KETCH: Coming.

CAPTION: KETCH: Coming to eat me.

VENGEANCE: HA!

VENGEANCE: YES! THIS is DELICIOUS!

5.4

Pan out. Vengeance is standing in the room full of children in the mind control device chairs.

VENGEANCE: The sound! The smell! The TASTE!

VENGEANCE: CORRUPTION OF THE INNOCENT!

VENGEANCE: DAMNATION!

VENGEANCE: FORCED DAMNATION!

VENGEANCE: HAHAAHAHA! I LOVE IT!

5.5

More MK Merc bikers are on the streets, along with Moon Knight Steven Grant on the mooncycle.

MOON KNIGHT GRANT: SPIRIT OF VENGEANCE!

CAPTION: KETCH: RUN.

CAPTION: KETCH: RUN.

5.6

Moon Knight Lockley looks at Vengeance from the other side of the hole in the wall, he’s holding up a silver crossbow.

CAPTION: KETCH: RUN!

Page 6

6.1

Marlene in her prison, standing and talking to Johnny Blaze across the hall.

BLAZE: Who’re you?

BLAZE: Where the hell am I?

MARLENE: New York. The new building for Marc’s fake company.

MARLENE: Listen to me… what’s your name? I’m Marlene.

BLAZE: Johnny Blaze.

MARLENE: Okay, Johnny.

MARLENE: We don’t have much time.

6.2

Vengeance with an arrow in his back, he’s bent forward and in some clear degree of pain.

VENGEANCE: GHAH!

VENGEANCE: THE HELL--

6.3

Vengeance turned to face Moon Knight Lockley. Lockley has his crossbow lowered, and is reaching for his back.

VENGEANCE: Ahhh…haha… I know you.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: Never seen you before, spirit of vengeance.

VENGEANCE: JUST Vengeance. Keep it casual.

VENGEANCE: But I DO know you, Lockley.

VENGEANCE: The doctor’s hate filled cries to the devil called me here.

VENGEANCE: You did some horrible things, Lockley.

6.4

Vengeance’s ribcage rips open, dozens of chains lashing out toward Moon Knight Lockley.

VENGEANCE: NOW FACE VENGEANCE FOR YOUR SINS!

6.5

Moon Knight Lockley’s dropped the crossbow and has a sword with a crescent symbol at the bottom, the chains wrapping around it.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: HRG!

Page 7

7.1

Close up on Doctor Jones’s mouth as he talks into a phone.

CAPTION: WEEKS AGO.

DOCTOR JONES: I-I’m telling you! A serum that reverses the aging process!

DOCTOR JONES: THE FOUNTAIN OF YOUTH IN A SYRINGE!

DOCTOR JONES: Sto…stop it…

7.2

Pan out. Doctor Jones lowering his head, an expression of incredible defeat as he holds the phone to his head with the minimum amount of effort for his arm. Doctor Jones is in an empty, dark office, probably located in a skyscraper.

DOCTOR JONES: Stop laughing…

DOCTOR JONES: I’ve… changed the world…

???: How does it feel to try your hardest, to cut your soul and let it leak onto an idea, to watch that idea grow… and to watch it wither and die?

7.3

Doctor Jones looking up. He’s horrified.

DOCTOR JONES: WH-WHAT ARE YOU?!

???: I am exactly what you need me to be.

7.4

Khonshu stands before Doctor Jones. Moon Knight Grant and Moon Knight Lockley are at his side.

KHONSHU: I am your salvation.

KHONSHU: I am Omega-God.

KHONSHU: I am Khonshu.

7.5

Khonshu has lowered himself to Doctor Jones’s level, staring him in the face a respectable distance away. This is not an interrogation, it’s a genuine offer.

KHONSHU: Would you like to save the world?

Page 8

8.1

Moon Knight Lockley rips through Vengeance’s chains with the sword.

CAPTION: NOW.

SFX: SKSHK

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: The trinity is BLESSED with POWER!

VENGEANCE: The TRINITY needs to SHUT UP AND SMELL THE DAMNATION!

VENGEANCE: Do you have any idea how much fun the demons are gonna have with your soul in THE PIT OF HELL?

8.2

Vengeance’s hand. A fireball forms in his open palm.

VENGEANCE: HAHAHAHA!!!

VENGEANCE: You FED that man’s BABY TO HIM!!!

VENGEANCE: You are SO F**KED!

8.3

Moon Knight Lockley in a defensive stance.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: We were actually quite delicate with it.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: We merely SKINNED his child and fed him the PELT.

VENGEANCE: You put it to a CHEESE GRADER and sprinkled it on a SALAD! You made him WATCH and then FORCED HIM TO EAT IT or else his wife would be next!

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: You don’t understand Khonshu’s ways.

VENGEANCE: “Act f**ked up and crazy” seems pretty understandable to me.

8.4

Vengeance pitching a fireball at Lockley. Lockley dashes to the right, avoiding it.

VENGEANCE: I’m good at it too!

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: The doctor had to feel HATE!

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: KHONSHU HATES US ALL, AND HE WANTS US TO KNOW IT!

Page 9

9.1

Marlene looking toward Blaze.

MARLENE: In about five minutes, he’s going to come back. He’s going to sit down and talk to one of us.

MARLENE: I need you to get him angry. REALLY piss him off, yeah?

BLAZE: What?

9.2

Close up on Marlene’s face.

MARLENE: Please, trust me.

MARLENE: I have a plan.

9.3

Moon Knight walks into the room.

MOON KNIGHT: We’ve found your brother, Blaze.

9.4

Blaze is angry.

BLAZE: YOU LEAVE HIM ALONE!

BLAZE: YOU PIECE OF SH*T!

9.5

Moon Knight is standing in front of Blaze’s cell, but he has his head turned toward Marlene.

MOON KNIGHT: …

MARLENE: That… that’s your brother he’s after?

MARLENE: oh god

MARLENE: I’m sorry.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Nothing makes me see red more than children.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Nothing except her.

Page 10

10.1

Ketch is speeding off the road, his bike is on fire. He’s on fire, in mid-Ghost Rider transformation. The MK Mercs don’t turn, but Moon Knight Grant has his arm up to signal he’s turning.

KETCH: SCREW THIS!

MOON KNIGHT GRANT: GET THE MOONCOPTERS!

10.2

Ketch as Ghost Rider, speeding forward while doing a wheelie.

CAPTION: KETCH: HUNGRY.

10.3

Close up on Moon Knight Grant, revving up the mooncycle as the chase intensifies. The MK Mercs are visible on the road behind him, going ahead.

CAPTION: KETCH: IT’S SO HUNGRY.

Page 11

11.1

Moon Knight is standing in front of Marlene’s cell. Just staring at her. She’s stepped back.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: It’s not even her as a person.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: It’s… the possibilities.

MARLENE: He does this every single day.

MARLENE: He—he just STARES.

MARLENE: STARES AT ME FOR HOURS ON END!

11.2

Blaze is looking on, a bit freaked out.

BLAZE: HEY!

BLAZE: Look over HERE!

BLAZE: LEAVE HER ALONE!

11.3

Khonshu’s cold, burning stare.

11.4

Moon Knight’s cold, burning stare.

11.5

Marlene is doubled over, pulling at her hair and screaming.

MARLENE: STOP IT

MARLENE: FOR THE LOVE OF GOD STOP IT

MARLENE: PLEASE

MARLENE: PLEASE MARC

11.6

Moon Knight is opening her cell door.

MOON KNIGHT: I hate you.

MOON KNIGHT: It burns inside of me every day.

MOON KNIGHT: To think that I once loved you with all of my heart makes my stomach turn.

Page 12

12.1

Blaze slamming his fists on the cell doors.

SFX: WHUD

BLAZE: LEAVE HER

SFX: WHUD

BLAZE: ALONE!

SFX: WHUD

BLAZE: HEY

SFX: WHUD

BLAZE: ASSHOLE!

12.2

Marlene looks up through her hair and crocodile tears, determination and anger show through the lie.

CAPTION: MARLENE: It’s always just him and me when he walks in here.

CAPTION: MARLENE: To cut me. To hit me.

CAPTION: MARLENE: To curse my name.

CAPTION: MARLENE: To curse the hypothetical life we could have lived.

CAPTION: MARLENE: But I know Marc. Possessed or not. He’s an idiot.

CAPTION: MARLENE: A violent, stupid idiot.

12.3

Moon Knight turns his head slightly, toward Blaze.

CAPTION: MARLENE: That’s right, you son of a b*tch.

12.4

Close up on Marlene’s hand. She has a shard of glass, she’s gripping it tight enough that her own hand is bleeding.

CAPTION: MARLENE: I HATE YOU, you BASTARD.

CAPTION: MARLENE: LOOK AWAY FOR JUST A SECOND MORE.

Page 13

13.1

Vengeance has Lockley by the throat, and he’s holding him up off the ground.

VENGEANCE: Any FINAL WORDS?

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: Yes.

SFX: BEET

13.2

The room has gone dark, save for Vengeance’s flames.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: Children. Show yourselves.

13.3

The room’s lights have gone back on. Vengeance and Lockley are now surrounded by full grown Moon Knights, male and female.

MOON KNIGHTS: WE ARE THE NEXT GENERATION OF KHONSHU.

MOON KNIGHTS: CHILDREN OF OMEGA-GOD.

VENGEANCE: What… the hell…

13.4

Lockley sneering, visible even with a mask.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: The serum was made with science and magic.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: We made him reverse-engineer it.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: They grew up in a matter of days, knowing only Khonshu.

Page 14

14.1

The Moon Knights swarm onto Vengeance, crescent darts raised.

MOON KNIGHTS: KNOWING ONLY HATE

14.2

Black panel.

MOON KNIGHTS: KNOWING ONLY TO KILL

14.3

Khonshu’s eyes in the black panel.

MOON KNIGHTS: KNOWING ONLY KHONSHU

Page 15

15.1

MK Mercs rushing toward a large clearing of desert, leaving their bikes.

MK MERC 1: CLOAKING DEVICE ALPHA NINE!

MK MERC 1: DEACTIVATE!

15.2

Shot from above. There are about a dozen mooncopters lined up, painted black.

MK MERC 3: WE ARE THE GLUE THAT HOLDS THE TRINITY TOGETHER!

MK MERC 4: SOON WE SHALL ASCEND!

15.3

The swarm of mooncopters take flight, kicking up dirt as they take off.

Page 16

16.1

Moon Knight Grant’s holding a crossbow with one hand as he drives the mooncycle.

MOON KNIGHT GRANT: KHONSHU GUIDE MY AIM!

CAPTION: KETCH: I’m shivering.

16.2

Ghost Rider Ketch looks back, trying to swerve the hellcycle to avoid an incoming blow.

CAPTION: KETCH: I’M GHOST RIDER, AND I’M SHIVERING!

CAPTION: KETCH: DAMMIT, I HAVE TO GET OUT! HAVE TO! RUN RUN RUN!

16.3

Moon Knight Grant firing his crossbow.

16.4

The hellcycle’s tire is struck by the arrow.

Page 17

17.1 Splash Page

Ghost Rider’s bike topples over, crashing violently.

Page 18

18.1

A targeting system on a computer screen. Ketch’s bike is locked.

MK MERC 4: Target locked, sir.

MK MERC 1: Fire! FIRE EVERYTHING!

18.2

The mooncopters are soaring over the crash site, firing their missiles down.

18.3

Ghost Rider Ketch looks up from the wreckage.

GHOST RIDER: Fu--

18.4

A large explosion at the crash site.

Page 19

19.1

Moon Knight Grant has stepped off his mooncycle, he holds a crescent dart in his hand.

19.2

Moon Knight Lockley stands among the rows and rows of children still in their mind control chairs, while more Moon Knights of the next generation rush out of the darkness, toward Vengeance who is off panel.

19.3

An image of Khonshu’s eyes.

TRAINING PROGRAM: LET THE EYES OF HATE LOOK INTO YOUR SOUL.

19.4

Closer up on the image of Khonshu’s eyes.

TRAINING PROGRAM: LET THEM GAZE AT YOUR TRUE SELF.

TRAINING PROGRAM: THAT IS KHONSHU.

Page 20

20.1 Splash Page

The mirror shard that Marlene had. It’s on the floor now, covered in blood. But in the blood, we can make out Khonshu’s reflection.

TRAINING PROGRAM: KHONSHU IS HATE.

CONTINUED IN: VENGEANCE OF THE CULT OF KHONSHU #3 - (Script)

4 Comments
4 Comments
Posted by Deranged Midget

Wow, that was brilliantly written. I love how seamlessly you jump between and multi-task each perspective. It feels like one really, really insane roller coaster ride and how you portrayed Marc Spector and Marlene was insanely disturbing. How you described the feeding of the baby to the father was extremely unnerving . You've taken your writing to such a gritty and unrelenting level where every line jumps off the page.

I can't say this enough but your work has never been better.

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Posted by FadeToBlackBolt
"YOU LOVE KHONSHU. AND KHONSHU HATES YOU." 
Replace Khonshu with Marvel and you have their 2012 slogan =P 
 
Really great issue, mate. I preferred it to last week, the child-soldiers angle was well-handled, having Khonshu just steal their lives from them and effectively make them husks. Bloody eerie. I liked that the Cult got hurt a bit this time too, with Vengeance raising some Hell (no pun intended). And as DM said, you handled the multiple plot threads well, jumping between them without it making the reader nauseous. Kudos ^__^
Posted by Deranged Midget

@FadeToBlackBolt said:

"YOU LOVE KHONSHU. AND KHONSHU HATES YOU."

HAHA! Although this can be applied to DC as well :P

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Posted by InnerVenom123

@Deranged Midget said:

Wow, that was brilliantly written. I love how seamlessly you jump between and multi-task each perspective. It feels like one really, really insane roller coaster ride and how you portrayed Marc Spector and Marlene was insanely disturbing. How you described the feeding of the baby to the father was extremely unnerving . You've taken your writing to such a gritty and unrelenting level where every line jumps off the page.

I can't say this enough but your work has never been better.

I seriously appreciate it. Thanks a bunch.

@FadeToBlackBolt said:

"YOU LOVE KHONSHU. AND KHONSHU HATES YOU." Replace Khonshu with Marvel and you have their 2012 slogan =P

*Cough* Rick Remender/Cullen Bunn/Dan Slott/Mark Waid/Greg Rucka *Cough* :P

@FadeToBlackBolt said:

Really great issue, mate. I preferred it to last week, the child-soldiers angle was well-handled, having Khonshu just steal their lives from them and effectively make them husks. Bloody eerie. I liked that the Cult got hurt a bit this time too, with Vengeance raising some Hell (no pun intended). And as DM said, you handled the multiple plot threads well, jumping between them without it making the reader nauseous. Kudos ^__^

^__^ Thanks dude.