great story!

You should place this in the Fan Fics, It is an enjoyble read!

I really like your story. Write more pleeeeeeease :)

great story, but you do know that more people will likely notice your talent and give their input if you make it in the fan-fic section on the forums (lots of users have stories there)

This is a great story, you did a great job. I'm looking forward to read what comes next..

Glad you liked it. It might take me a while to figure out what comes next but for now there's a first glimpse of Holly.

the story is great. I can't wait to read the next parts.