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@k4tzm4n: @projector: I seem to remember that in the first issue it pretty strongly implied that the events of the game happen five years after the first issue started, I think there should be plenty of time to keep this little beauty going. Also, just because the comic reaches the point in the story where the game occurs, that doesn't mean it has to stop. There's a lot of fun to be had dealing with the ramifications of Injustice as well, so that could keep them going for a while.

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@jaybefre said:

No Noh-Varr's fight in Young Justice?!? Absurd!

Agreed. Best double-page spread I've seen in a long old time.

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Not bad, although it feels like this could do with some work. You have some really great ideas, they just need fleshing out, really.

First of all, names. Even though Grimmr's parents are only minor characters as a whole, they're still significant to him as a character. They should be identified by names, rather than just 'Grimmr's mother' etc.

Second, description. While there's no problem using spars language, and over-the-top, flowery descriptions can really bog down a story, it feels like you're relying a bit too much on the reader to fill in the blanks. We know that Grimmr and his family are from the north, and so would have pale skin, but what about eye and hair colour, and distinctive features like scars etc?

Thirdly, detail. You seem to skip over a lot of the start of the story to get to the scenes that interest you. It's important to try and show things, rather than just saying them. For example, don't just say that Grimmr's father is hated by the other men in the village, but show this hatred, and explain why he isn't liked by others. 'Show, don't Tell' is an old rule of writing which shouldn't be ignored. In fact, I would even say that each of these sections could easily be expanded to the point where they are a chapter (or even two or three) on their own. I think there's a danger of glossing over a set-up too quickly, which will only detract from the story as a whole.

There are also some details of the plot which could be examined further. Why did Grimmr's mother agree to leave her people with his father? Would she actually follow him out of fear, and if so why would her father allow it? Is there something more going on here? Also, in villages of the time you're describing the tents/huts would be located close together and surrounded by some kind of fence, so it seems unlikely that a pack of wolves would be able to get in and isolate one dwelling place from the others. Maybe it would be better to have them pacing around the whole village, and fended off by the men of the tribe?

Also, Aisling seems to accept Grimmr a little too quickly. Would a woman who is this defenseless really act like this when faced with an unknown man?

I'm sorry if what I've said seems a little harsh (and long-winded). As I said, your basic idea seems sound, and there's a lot of potential here. You just need to expand on things a bit more.

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@JamDamage: Rulk can't fly, but he can jup really, really high and far.

I'm also loving this version of Storm; finally, she has a costume that's practical and doesn't make her look like she sells her body for money...

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@impossibilly: I was just thinking that. Surely the whole point of the gatefolds is that it's a surprise? You should be able to buy them, and not know what you're getting until you open it up and go 'AH! Holy s*&£!' or, as seems more likely 'AH!- uh...huh.' While having interesting covers is an attraction, they would sell more copies if they kept the reveal a secret before publication.

Also, why is superman being possessed by Bugs Bunny?

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I'm going to come out of left field here and say X-men: Evolution. Yes, it's not on the list. Yes, it was a while ago. And yes, it may not have aged that well. But it had a great mix of character development and action, combined with uneblievable artwork, that was lacking in the 90s x-men series, and it had a wide range of characters, unlike Wolverine and the X-men, which was all about short, hairy and clawy.

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X-Faction: A team that serves the role of both X-Force and X-Treme X-men; finding and solving threats to Earth-616 from the rest of the multiverse before they become a danger.

AoA Nightcrawler- Team leader, teleporting swordsman. Determined to make sure that the kind of dystopian future that he comes from never happens again.

Mystique- Shape-shifting assasin. Deputy leader and alternate-universe mother to Nightcrawler. Sees joining the team as a chance to make up for her past failures as a mother to the 616-Nightcrawler.

Dark Beast- Hank Mccoy, without the morals. Sceince/technology expert and the team's answer to Wolverine.

Ruby Summers- Daughter of Cyclops and Emma Frost in an alternate future. Like Nightcrawler, she's seen how bad the future can become, and is determined to fight to make the world a better place.

Martha Johnson- Telepathic brain in a jar. Serves as the team's intelligence and long-distance recon. Won't allow any more mutants to be abused like she was.

Adam X- half-Shi'ar, blood-igniting swordsman. Alien expert and general wildcard.

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Hence the 'WTF Certified' thing they were throwing around before people started getting shirty about it. I think all of the gatefold voers are going to confuse the hell out of people...

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Wow, Wolverine. It's nice to see him get the spotlight, as he's such a deep, mult-facetted character, and Marvel just doesn't give him the focus that he deserves. It's nice that their finally putting someone new getting centre stage, for a change.

On a separate note (pertaining more to the actual subject of this article) Yay for Madureira!