What's that I see? Another Character Creation Contest? Yep! Round 5!
Alright, folks, @wildvine won last time, but decided to bow out, because she couldn't be here to present the next contest (but she will be back in time to defend her title). So as winner by default, here I am, bringing you the next contest.
I think this contest has gotten pretty cool - each time, you guys and gals flex your muscles, come out swinging, and blow me away with the quality of your work, and it only improves from round to round. You've shown that you can take a general subject and turn it into something of your own - you all rock at that. So here's my challenge: can you take something a little more specific, and still hit a home run? Here's what I'm thinking:
General consensus seems to be that Batman has eclipsed Superman in popularity, because Batman just has way cooler villains, and I think Supergirl suffers from the same problem. So what've you got, writers? Can you come up with a villain to challenge Superman and/or Supergirl?
Rules:
#0) YOUR CHARACTER MUST BE PRESENTED IN A STORY! A character description is a fun teaser, but won't be counted as an entry!
1) Yes, this is the fan-fic forum, but for this contest, I want you to write a character that could legitimately show up in the DC Universe to challenge Superman or Supergirl. If we're writing characters with plausible roots in the DCU, we need to make peace now with the possibility that DC may come up with something similar in the future. Coincidence happens, people. So let it go and create your character. ;) Then put them in a story against Superman and/or Supergirl.
2) Your character has to be new. We are creating characters, not reformatting existing ones. However, that does not mean that your new character has no history with existing characters. That's okay.
3) Your character must have a name. If you can make Rama-Lama-Ding-Dong into an interesting character that's great, but name him Rama-Lama-Ding-Dong, so we all know who he is.
4) No alternate Earths Superman/Supergirl - it has to be the main DC Universe. Pre-New 52 is okay, because frankly, I'm not familiar with the New 52 Supes.
5) No evil twins. No enemy Kal or Kara from another universe, xerox ray, or whatever other silly way you could clone them.
6) Nothing and nobody goes to H'el. The character is too new, and we don't know enough about him. To connect a new character to H'el would mean too much speculation on the history and motivation of the H'el character. It would distract from your character, and make it near danged impossible to judge the quality of the idea.
7) Standard disclaimer: we have no claim on anything owned by DC Comics, and we're not making a claim here. We are writing fan-fic, having fun with exploring an idea, and that's it.
8) Word count: 1,100 words maximum (because someone had trouble with the 1,000 word limit last time). No minimum.
9) Deadline: January 16th. That's 3 weeks, instead of the standard 2, but I figure this coming week is going to be crazy for a lot of people, with New Year's and all, so extra week. Plus, that'll allow 1 week for the voting thread, and 1 week for the next contest to get posted, to get us to the end of January.
10) Edit your work. Your first post does not have to be your final post. You've got 3 weeks. If you post the first day, you have the rest of that time to tweak your piece however you see fit. Make use of it.
11) If I miss anyone, please invite them. I don't know a ton of people in the fan-fic forum (I went through previous contests to get most of those below).
@batkevin74: Very nice. :) You have 236 words left though. I wouldn't mind seeing a little more of that fight. "Always leave them wanting more" has its place too though. ;)
@Necrotic_Lycanthrope said:
@cbishop:
Supes being David. :3 Then again, he's always the David in a battle :/
Eh, at least it gives me an excuse to beat him up.
Can't wait to read it. :)
@Redmonkeyssj4 said:
@The Poet
Only 19 words over the limit.(Please make an exception)
Nice entry, but Word counts your piece as 1,146 words. Remove some adjectives in there, you can get this down to 1,100 easy. That's the highest word count we've allowed yet - wouldn't be right to flaunt it. This needs some edits about midway, so that should help.
I like your villain. Curiosity though: why "Lakota?" Just like the name? Is he from North/South Dakota? Is he Lakota/Dakota/Sioux?
@batkevin74 Okay, now i see why everyone was mad at me for not writing an end to my story....
YES!!!
An ending is an ending! That's why it's an ending :)
It can be fade to black (Sopranos), abrupt (ALF), sucky (Friends/Everyone Loves Raymond), sad (Mad About You), silly (Seinfeld), uncertain (Futurama) or frustrating (Sliders, Tru Calling, Mork & Mindy, Terminator SCC, Deadwood) The reader can get mad at an ending, they can demand more but sometimes things need to end where they end. Sherlock Holmes came back for an encore after he was killed off and readers demanded more...I beleive he's the original shark jumper :)
@batkevin74 Okay, now i see why everyone was mad at me for not writing an end to my story....
YES!!!
An ending is an ending! That's why it's an ending :)
It can be fade to black (Sopranos), abrupt (ALF), sucky (Friends/Everyone Loves Raymond), sad (Mad About You), silly (Seinfeld), uncertain (Futurama) or frustrating (Sliders, Tru Calling, Mork & Mindy, Terminator SCC, Deadwood) The reader can get mad at an ending, they can demand more but sometimes things need to end where they end. Sherlock Holmes came back for an encore after he was killed off and readers demanded more...I beleive he's the original shark jumper :)
I have to disagree. Much of what you're citing is "cancellation," not "ending." Some of those had non-endings, because they didn't have a chance to do anything else. Some of them had open endings, because they were leaving it open for the possibility of series revival or a reunion show, years down the road.
We often end things mid-scene in this contest, because we don't have the word count to write a full story. We spend much of it giving a description and/or origin to our character, and a fight gets shorthanded, or cut off abruptly, implying there's more that the reader doesn't get to read. That works okay, and yes, even for this contest, but what I was teasing wildvine about is that hers had the perfect ending standing there like the next-to-last kid at a kickball game, going, "Pick me! Pick me! Hey! Over here! Pick me! Hey!..." and she didn't pick him.
One arrow to Vlad's heart, and her story would have had an ending, and gained at least two more votes, from comments made in the thread. It was there, begging to be written, and she couldn't bring herself to "ruin" what she saw as being a longer story. My argument was really that she could have had a short little 1,000 word story for the contest with an ending, and written the envisioned novella later.
<shrugs> It's a matter of taste. I just like teasing her about it, because I think that with an ending, she could have won by a wide and clear margin, instead of by one, last minute vote. I do think my last contest entry was good, but I think the only reason it kept up with WV's in the voting thread, is that a) the poem style grabbed people's attention, and b) it actually had an ending. Had she given hers that ending, I think she'd have flattened me in the votes.
<sigh> Okay, off to bed for me. I have to work tonight (midnight shift). I still need to write my own entry for this. I think I'm going to have to put some time into it though, instead of shooting it off in a few days. Looking forward to everyone's entries. This is a skilled bunch.
I have to disagree. Much of what you're citing is "cancellation," not "ending." Some of those had non-endings, because they didn't have a chance to do anything else. Some of them had open endings, because they were leaving it open for the possibility of series revival or a reunion show, years down the road.
A cancellation is still an ending, crappy/abrupt/unforseen but still an ending. As are the wishy-washy open endings which as the word states "endings". And that's what comic books do every week; last page cliffhangers; stopping mid sentence with the classic face
But we could debate this endlessly. Let's say these boxes for entries and comments on entries and refrain from meme blasting and such (though teasing @wildvine is acceptable but only for a little while)
Even though I doubt I'll enter, I'll admit this made a character idea pop into my brain and I'd like to share it.
From the files of Researcher Maxwell Hogan.
Name: Cain (This is the name by which this being has come to identify itself, so it is the one I shall use)
Age: Unknown
Characteristics: In its true form Cain appears as an indistinct and gaseous humanoid form. It seems to be between black and grey in color and between 6' 1' and 5' 10" in height. Much like its height, the being's build seems variable or perhaps extraordinarily indistinct to the point that there are times it seems to possess broad shoulders and a slim waist, while other times still it seems portly or rotund. Most viewed instances seem to be vaguely male in physical construction and yet there are even a few instances of almost female curvaceousness to the figure. While the being does possess a voice and is capable of speech, oddly enough most that have bore witness to this have a hard time remembering anything about the voice save for the words spoken and their meaning.
While mostly humanoid in shape, the shape can at times lose cohesion and seem to be a cloud or drift of smoke or fog. No matter the shape however, the humanoid figure is generally devoid of clearly defined features and possess nearly noting in the way of defining characteristics outside of a basic silhouette.
Smoke without fire, fog without substance, a feeling of being watched by an unfriendly and malicious observer, all of these things have been used to try putting a description to the being or perhaps the phenomenon that goes by the moniker of Cain by the people of Metropolis. Whatever, he, she, or it may be it is assuredly not physical in nature. Or perhaps it simply occupies or is in sync with a dimension separate from our own. Honestly all of this last is of course hypothesis on my part as the being has not yet been studied by researchers and is currently under investigation by Superman for a number of violent activities across the city of Metropolis.
Powers and Abilities: Cain is for all intents and purposes is an incorporeal being. As such it has been observed as being capable of moving through all tested forms of matter as well as quite a few forms of energy without seeming resistance. Also because of its lack of weight or truly matter as modern science recognizes the term; it is also capable of flight and unhindered movement of any kind in the visible world. The laws of temporal space however do still seem to apply to this being, or so it seems at the moment, so there have been no reports of teleportation or existing in multiple locations. Being incorporeal, Cain also seems incapable of interacting with the physical world or rather most of it.
Cain's most formidable ability however and the only one that seems to have any affect at all upon the physical world at large is one that though I'm loathed to even use the word; could only be called possession. The Cain entity is capable of diffusing itself though living things, however where with most matter it simply passes through. All things living it instead creates a strange symbiosis. Or rather a strange parasitism, were the entity gains control of the host and all of its bodily functions both conscious and unconscious and even gains access to the host's mind, thoughts, feelings, and memories.
According to the psychiatric evaluation of survivors, as well as direct testimony by the same survivors, the host at the time of possession is completely aware of themselves. Most site being able to remember events in vivid detail and yet all remember a feeling of powerlessness. They were watching their bodies move from the inside but had absolutely no control over their limbs, their speech, or anything else of their motor function.
Background: Nothing is known of this entity other than it's sudden appearance and recent actions. It was first recorded by Supergirl while saving a window cleaner high above the streets of Metropolis. The workman seemed to fall and was caught by the kryptonian young woman. However after being reassured of his safety, the man began to struggle violently. Not expecting such a thing, Supergirl dropped the man, and as he fell there was a smile on his face. "You can't save anyone!" He shouted. And then hit the ground, but not before a curious black-grey fog/smoke seeped from his pores. It coalesced into a vaguely humanoid figure that floated up to Supergirl's height above the streets and tried to force its way into her body. The now realized to be parasitic even, was ineffective. Supergirl's report of feeling intense cold has not been shared by any other victim and yet she is the only known failed attempt at this possession. So it has been the hypothesis that kryptonian physiology is some how incompatible with this entity. Shortly there after the entity escaped pursuit by slipping under the city streets and further still until it's movements became blocked by massive amounts of earth.
Supergirl discovered this being, however she has not been the only target. Both Superman and Superboy have come face to face with this entity and both know nothing of its make up except to say that it seems to have an obsession with them and seems intent on killing and chaos. The words "You can't save them." Have been repeated again and again. But what do they mean? Are they an allusion to the victims of this entity or do they perhaps have a different meaning altogether?
HONEY is a Mutant, Her powers are to turn into a swarm of Honey Bees. She can't change in cold air. When she is in human form she has super strength the equivilent of a human sized Bee. She also has the power to use Pheramones to summon other honey bees in warm weather.
HONEY is a Mutant, Her powers are to turn into a swarm of Honey Bees. She can't change in cold air. When she is in human form she has super strength the equivilent of a human sized Bee. She also has the power to use Pheramones to summon other honey bees in warm weather.
As I have a similar family of characters floating around in my file of character ideas, I like your character idea here (and the one that was here before you edited it away - the joy of being the one to create the contest is that I get a PM on everything posted to the contest, whether it stays or not).
A mutant is not out of the question in the DCU, but DC does kind of stay away from them. Not completely, but when they do use them, they're usually not called mutants. They're either metahumans or it's just emphasized that they inherited their parents' powers. So this character CAN PLAUSIBLY EXIST IN THE DCU, but I have two problems:
1) For this to be counted as an entry, it needs to be presented in a story, showcasing your villain against Superman or Supergirl (or both).
2) Is this character a legitimate threat to Superman/Supergirl? A person controlling a swarm of bees is a great visual, and a terrifying thought to us mere mortals, but are they a threat to someone with invulnerable skin, and the power to pick them out of the air with heat vision or super cold breath?
I'm still curious to see Orb fighting Supes in a story.
I'm having trouble editing down the submission to 1,100.
@batkevin74 said:
@Redmonkeyssj4: Nice use of the term Ska-doosh! :)
@Necrotic_Lycanthrope: Take out the bit with the dancing monkeys and you'll squeeze in :)
Chop it! Chop it! Chop it! Killll the monkeeeeyssss!
@DarkDay: @Pyrogram said:
@DarkDay: 300 of so over the word limit. Apart from that brilliant submission.
What he said. Microsoft Word tells me you're at 1,418, so chop 318 and you're golden. The eyewitness/victim account might reduce it that much for you (I didn't count).
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The word count is part of the rules, folks, just like the previous contests, and this is the highest limit yet. Maybe the next winner needs to increase it again.
@DarkDay: 300 of so over the word limit. Apart from that brilliant submission.
Thanks. I actually wasn't entering. Just had a thought bug I wanted to get out. But thanks. I'll see if I can cut it down though just to see what happens.
Okay folks! With much needed editing help from BatKevin74, here's my submission:
Clark Kent awoke, his mind clouded as it struggled to focus. He could feel hard, chilled rock underneath, his strength and abilities failing him. Clark rubbed his eyes with a hand, using the other to raise himself onto his knees. He looked down and saw his suit Lois bought was torn to shreds, along with his Super suit.
“What the…what‘s going on here? Where a…?”
A deep laugh reverberated through the swampy air; the sound made his blood turn to frost. He looked around, his vision fully cleared. It was an expansive courtyard, shrouded in darkness and a thick green rot. The laughter continued, deepening and reverberating, bouncing off of unseen walls.
“Who’s there?! Show yourself! Come out here and face me like a man!”
The laughter quieted down a little to a sinister chuckle. A thick rasp escaped from whatever hole generated the sounds, the rasps thickening as words started to form. A thick hiss permeated the air.
“Ssssimple minded Ssssssuperman”
Superman stumbled around, every inch of his body shaking in reflexive fear. As he moved, the shadow of a huge object began to emerge behind him. The dark fog immediately began to lift somewhat and Superman could see a giant figure; a huge steel statue crouched in a knighting position. Its massive head was hidden in between its stretched hands, the slightly clawed hands holding tightly the handles of a pair of gargantuan swords; each one rusted with age but seemingly dipped in the same rotted blood as what covered the strange floor. The stature was as solid and lifeless as anything made of stone, but the aura it released…it was wrong. There was no way to describe how it felt, just that it wasn’t supposed to be there. A clicking noise sounded behind Superman; a steady click like high heels against thickened tiles. Superman turned his head to view the source of the sound and recoiled in horror. It had the overall structure of a human dinosaur, but its body was rotting and tearing itself apart. The face was just a skull of a crocodile, with huge bulging yellow eyes crisscrossed with equally thick, bulging black veins. A hideous, grotesque smile stretching from the each edge of the opening of the lipless mouth.
“Who-who are you? What the Hell ARE you?! Where am I?!”
The creature continued to hollowly smile; stopped in its tracks, folding its arms. With a whispering voice like a dark wind in October trees, it spoke.
“The last son of Krypton. It is an honor, to finally see the living blur himself.”
Superman suddenly felt weaker, the air torn out of his lungs. A thickened pain erupted through his arms. Shaking, he pulled up one of his sleeves and saw his veins enlarged, bulging out of the skin.
“What…are..you…doing..to me?!”
The beast laughed a booming sound when compared to its whispery vocals.
“I merely equal the playing field. Or, in your case, limit it. You see, I keep my eyes out on the stronger individuals out there. Most I ignore, but occasionally there are a few that we crave to see in a sticky situation. Now, it’s not up for me to battle. My associates crave a David and Goliath setting.”
With those words, Superman saw the foggy mist dissipate fully. The large field suddenly began to stretch vertically into the sky, rimming the entire area. With a skipping heartbeat, he knew what it was.
It was a coliseum.
Lights unseen from overhead suddenly flooded the arena. Lines like molten magma etched into the creases of the floor, engulfing it in a simulated planetary mantle. Chanting erupted from the arena walls, a continuous murdering howl and cheering. But the only thing understandable was also the vilest endless chant.
“Long Live Lord Fin! All Hail Lord Fin! Crucify! Crucify!”
Superman screamed as an eerie green glow emanated from his veins engulfed him further, this time spreading up to the base of his neck.. The creature, dubbed Lord Fin by the voices, stretched out his arms, spinning slightly in a circle.
“You hear my subjects? They want a show. So, I say give it to them!”
A thundering screech of noise reverberated throughout the arena, knocking Superman to the ground. As he tried to right himself, he saw that the arena floor fell away, save for a circle surrounding him, the creature and the giant monument, which began to glow. A purple light blasted through the segments of the armor and the joints began to squeal. The giant statue clenched its swords, pulled them out of the ground and swung them through the air. The arena bellowed in chanting at the sight. The massive android shifted its head, a mutant like thing resembling a dog with the crest of a pterodactyl, peering down at the two below. The rotted lord clapped its hands in delight, walking up to Superman and the robot. Superman swung a fist at the creature, but only blew through the entity, nearly falling inside the magma. The creature reassembled, shaking its head in mock sadness.
“One thing you must learn; in MY reality, I make the rules. I made you weak, and I make myself immortal. Now, let’s see how well your will is to survive!”
With that, he disintegrated into a black mist. The giant android roared, and swung its sword at Superman. The tiny superhero, despite the loss of his strength, managed to duck in between the robot’s legs. The robot tried swinging for him, but lost balance and collapsed, shaking the tiny island in its massive weight. The swords it held bounced and fell into the magma, melting instantaneously. The android erupted in a piercing screech of anger, echoed by the unseen crowds as they roared their hate back. Superman jumped to the side as the robot tried to slam him with a giant foot, falling backwards through the impact. The android raged at its misses, then lifting up to full gargantuan height, it tried lunge at the weakened superhero. Superman at the last minute dodged the attack, and the metal statue plummeted into the magma. Screams shaking the entire arena hit as it vanished beneath the rolling magma waves. The arena roared, their protests shaking the very murky air. Suddenly, a screeching sounded from the magma and a molten red and orange hand burst out and grabbed Superman, enveloping him in scalding heat. Superman tried to break out of the fist, but his strength was gone. With a deep throated metallic laugh, the cyborg cackled.
The original edit makes a lot more sense, but even heavily edited I'm glad you enjoyed it. :P
It's an interesting character. With all of the strange things and beings Superman has seen, I question whether he'd react in fear/shock the way he did at Lord Fin's appearance. I could see that reaction more to the sudden weakening and seeming kryptonite poisoning. He bounces back strong with a solid showing against the robot, and then...the robot grips him, the end? I'd be interested to read the original edit, because this does seem to have lost something in the word chop. Gotta give ya props though - a reality warping semi-corpse thing would indeed be a challenge to Superman. :)
I didn't intend intentional fear, but instinctive. Like if you're angry at someone, but deep down they make your skin crawl. It's the same feeling I think Supes would have whenever he encounters a deranged Solomon Grundy.
The robot in the original edit was summoned from magma by Lord Fin to finish off Superman. Remember; Fin controls his reality. What he wants done, he'll make it happen. That's how he sapped away Supes' powers.
Background: The Neutra-System, and it's people "The Neutrino's", were similar to the Kryptonians in that they honored science above all other achievements. The only problem is the Neutra-System just happens to be located near the planet Czarnia, the homeworld of the notorius bounty hunter Lobo. A peaceful race, they preferred neutrality, to be left alone and leave alone other races even if it meant the destruction of other worlds. They were aware of the upcoming doom of Krypton and did nothing. They watched the genocide of Czarnia and did nothing. That was their way. Observe. Learn. Record. And walk away.
Much to the chagrin of the Neutrino's, it became Lobo's favorite vacation spot when he needed to get away and come home. He said we had the best view of his planet. Lobo took us in he said. "Me casa, my casa!" Whatever that meant, all we knew that it meant he was staying. He would "borrow" stuff from us every visit. I say borrow but it very seldom ever made its way back. Our technology was what he treasured most. Elves he called us. We build the toys and he would play with them. In exchange for our "toys", he would let us live long enough to hear his stories, conquests, battles, etc... Lucky us that he's immortal and we get to hear his stories for the rest of our lives. Did I mention that as Neutrino's we can teleport ourselves and our planet if needed? Yet, he still finds us. So why move anymore???
My father and I were "chosen" to repair his bike. Fix this. Add that. Whatever he wanted. My old man, Zen, treated Lobo like he was the first born instead of I. Something inside me snapped. I don't know if I was the first or not, but this Neutrino wanted to, "dare I say", act. No more living in the shadows of other planets, Krypton and Czarnia. No more living in the shadow of other beings, Lobo. It's time for this Neutrino to be the one observed. Learned from. And put into the pages of Neutrino history. And to do that, I would have to do something that even the "Main Man" has yet to do. Take down Supes. And with our technology and my knowledge of Supes from Lobo, I can do it.
Powers: The Neutrino's biology has adapted in way to survive on their home planet of Neutrino 1 which has a gravity 20x that of Earth. Neutrino's are grey, tall and slender with a muscalar frame. To combat the gravity, their physiology have evolved to grant them these powers:
Stretching (similar to Plastic Man, bones and organs are malleable and immune to physical attacks)
Invisibility (similar to Sue Storm, creates an invisible force field around my self, others, etc... to hide when observing others)
Teleportation (small distances at first, but a mature Neutrino can teleport across galaxies)
12th level intellect (their knowledge and understanding of engineering, tech, biology, etc... rivals that of Brainiac)
Telepathy (before oral language was introduced, thanks to Lobo, Neutrino's communicated telepathically using binary)
Powers on Earth: Similar to Kryptonians they have added powers on Earth
@IfDCRuledTheWorld: There's a little bit of a story in the middle there, but the rest is like a character profile. Finish the story (or separate the story bit out from the profile) and you've got an entry.
@cbishop: I think the format sort of makes it hard to articulate a character without doing so to be honest. It is possible though, A narrator along side the story could make this easier though, others can use that idea :D
@cbishop: I think the format sort of makes it hard to articulate a character without doing so to be honest. It is possible though, A narrator along side the story could make this easier though, others can use that idea :D
"to articulate a character without doing so?" Sheesh.
@cbishop: I am not saying it cant be done, I am saying the contest makes it seem that is what is being asked of the contestants, if that makes sense? What your asking is easily attainable , its only making a charector up to be honest with a little more detail.
@cbishop: So I should write a story of me defeating Superman???
First rule in the OP: your character must be presented in a story. ;)
@Pyrogram said:
@cbishop: I am not saying it cant be done, I am saying the contest makes it seem that is what is being asked of the contestants, if that makes sense? What your asking is easily attainable , its only making a charector up to be honest with a little more detail.
It's always only making a character, isn't it? I guess I just assumed that presenting the character in a story would be understood by this round. It's in the rules even, so I'm confused why people are still posting profiles. Especially since yeah, this is easily attainable. <shakes head> The choices to vote on are gonna be slim, at this rate.
I tried to stay away from profiles. A. Because they're a pain to come up with without sounding like a bad scriptwriter and B. Because a story should explain the character without the need of a profile.
Lobo: "HAHAHAHA!!! You thought you could do something that the Main Man haven't done yet? For someone with a 12th level intellect you aren't too bright are you, chico?"
Zero: "It's Zero. I had him, I tell ya."
Lobo: "Alright. Quit ya crying. Tell me all about it, chico?
It started out the way I planned. I attacked him at night, just as he was going to sleep. According to my notes, Superman should be 5-10% weaker at night. Stay invisible and stay out of his field of vision. Teleport into his blindside or directly behind and attack. What I didn't calculate or didn't calculate enough was his speed and strength. He's faster than me. And if I had bones like these humans, I'd be dead by those punches.
Lobo: "HAHAHAHAHA!! You brain-tweezers don't know the first thing about fighitng do you?"
Zero: "Well, Neutrino's aren't really known for our physical prowess."
Lobo: "HAHAHAAHAH!!! You tried to fight Superman with math and you thought you could win. HAHAHAHA!!! So let me get this straight...you get punched once. Then you ran away?"
Zero: "Well..............."
Lobo: "HAHAHAHAHAH!!! You may have a big brain...but you got glass jaw, Chico!!"
I tried to stay away from profiles. A. Because they're a pain to come up with without sounding like a bad scriptwriter and B. Because a story should explain the character without the need of a profile.
Agreed.
@IfDCRuledTheWorld: Short and sweet, but interesting. This kind of character would frustrate me in the comics though (that's not necessarily a bad thing), because he clearly has the power to be a challenge, but has the fatal flaw of lack of fighting experience.
Lobo: "HAHAHAHA!!! You thought you could do something that the Main Man haven't done yet? For someone with a 12th level intellect you aren't too bright are you, chico?"
Zero: "It's Zero. I had him, I tell ya."
Lobo: "Alright. Quit ya crying. Tell me all about it, chico?
It started out the way I planned. I attacked him at night, just as he was going to sleep. According to my notes, Superman should be 5-10% weaker at night. Stay invisible and stay out of his field of vision. Teleport into his blindside or directly behind and attack. What I didn't calculate or didn't calculate enough was his speed and strength. He's faster than me. And if I had bones like these humans, I'd be dead by those punches.
Lobo: "HAHAHAHAHA!! You brain-tweezers don't know the first thing about fighitng do you?"
Zero: "Well, Neutrino's aren't really known for our physical prowess."
Lobo: "HAHAHAAHAH!!! You tried to fight Superman with math and you thought you could win. HAHAHAHA!!! So let me get this straight...you get punched once. Then you ran away?"
Zero: "Well..............."
Lobo: "HAHAHAHAHAH!!! You may have a big brain...but you got glass jaw, Chico!!"
It's a good character, and Lobo's a good character to play off of. He's so over-the-top he seems one dimensional at times, but once you get started on him, you realize just how much danged fun it is to write him.
What's that I see? Another Character Creation Contest? Yep! Round 5!
Alright, folks, @wildvine won last time, but decided to bow out, because she couldn't be here to present the next contest (but she will be back in time to defend her title). So as winner by default, here I am, bringing you the next contest.
I think this contest has gotten pretty cool - each time, you guys and gals flex your muscles, come out swinging, and blow me away with the quality of your work, and it only improves from round to round. You've shown that you can take a general subject and turn it into something of your own - you all rock at that. So here's my challenge: can you take something a little more specific, and still hit a home run? Here's what I'm thinking:
If I miss anyone, please invite them. I don't know a ton of people in the fan-fic forum (I went through previous contests to get most of those below).
@cbishop: Did you copy and paste the names? that brakes it.
Not initially, but I was having trouble getting the blog to post. So I wound up copying the content, replacing it with "to be edited," posting the blog, then editing the content back in with paste. So yep, it wound up copy/pasted, before I was done.
@cbishop: Then @Irishlad@The Impersonator@CapFanboy@WhiteSGPlayer@mrdecepticonleader@Ravager4 for example cbishop wants you (as do I) to throw an entry in for this competition. I dares you! :)
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