Was Lex Luthor at the wedding in the first page?
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@batkevin74: The twist is he saw a vision of the near future where he has someone else's blood on him, he's very upset and his hands are glowing. The implication is he has some kind of power that he's intentionally or unintentionally hurt someone with. I realize now that isn't clear so edited it.
Anyone? I could really use some feedback, even just saying if you liked it or not would be helpful.
Hi everyone, as the title suggests I am writing a submission for a comic book publisher where you have to write a four page script. I could really use some feedback please? (P.S this is a science fiction story though it isn't clear at first).
The family are wearing thick coats and other winter clothes
Father-tall, quite thin with glasses, quite strong jaw, dark brown hair and beard and broad shoulders
Mother-medium height, long blonde hair, hour glass figure, thin
Connor-Average height and build, light brown hair, about ten years old
Rebecca-Quite small, quite large eyes, dark brown hair tied in a pony tail, she is about seven years old
Police officer-middle aged, greying hair, quite wrinkly and medium build
Panel 1: Text box:
‘A young family have gone on their Christmas holiday in Scottish cottage. They are an hour away from the nearest town’
Picturesque view of the classic two story cottage with a mountain range running behind it, with trees dotted around, even more along the base of the mountains, and in the background the family can be seen hiking up the mountain, among the trees. There is a thick layer of snow.
Panel 2: Wide shot showing the children running around, laughing, ahead of their parents, the parents and children facing the shot
Panel 3: The medium shot shows the children running around a thick cluster of trees, the parents out of sight
Panel 4: A medium shot Rebecca has run ahead, laughing and looking back at her brother, unaware of the hole nestled in the snow and leaves a step or two away, the shot comes from behind Connor
Panel 5: A medium wide shot Rebecca is about to fall into the hole, she has just turned and sees the hole, her eyes filled with shock and terror, the shot comes from the hole below
Panel 1: A medium shot shows Connor had caught up and grabbed the back of her coat, stopping her fall; the panel shot faces the two from the left
Panel 2: A medium shot shows Connor pulled her back and she is hugging him, crying into his coat
Panel 3: A wide shot shows Rebecca backed away in fear of the hole, not wanting to slip and fall. A text box says:
‘He doesn’t want her to leave scared so he is going to show there is nothing to fear.’
Connor is walking around the whole to the other side, he says:
“Don’t worry Reb, there’s nothing to fear.”
She, upset, replies:
“Connor just come over here!”
Panel 4: A medium shot shows on the opposite side of the hole the ground below Connor’s feet breaks away, he is looking down in surprise, saying:
“Rebecca its f-”
The shot shows Connor from the front with Rebecca standing to the left of the shot opposite Connor
Panel 5: Connor falls through the hole, the shot is a wide shot of the space in the whole. It’s massive and very high with a rushing river below. Connor is shown falling from the top of the panel, the surface not shown. Half way down below Connor there is a very faint, small red blur, barely there.
Panel 6: Shot from above Rebecca, she is lying at the edge of the hole, reaching down, screaming. Passed her in the hole there is Connor disappearing half way down in a red flash of light.
Panel 1: The medium shot comes from just behind Connor, he is surrounded by a burning red energy. He is reaching out to his sister who can be seen through a hole resembling a tear in all the red which in the panel is far away so very small. Connor is screaming.
Panel 2: A text box of another colour says:
A wide shot from Connor’s left, he’s still falling and screaming. Dotted around him are other tears in the space, one shows an older version of him kissing a blonde man. Another shows an older him arguing loudly with and older version of his sister and another shows a blurred image of a man in all red not visibly standing on anything. There is others but they aren’t clearly seen.
Panel 3: A wide bird’s eye view shot of him falling, showing another large tear below him that he is falling into
Panel 1: A close up shot, in a faint flash of red he is at the foot of the mountain, it is night and he is huddled into a ball. There is no clear view of his face, the panel shot shows him from the front.
Panel 2: The medium shot comes from behind Connor, he looks up to see the cottage through the trees with police cars out front, siren lights on, his parents and a police officer are standing in front of the cottage.
Panel 3: In the same shot as the last panel he got up and is walking to the cottage, walking as if dazed; he is shrouded in the darkness, the panel shot shows him from behind
Panel 4: The parents are talking to a police officer in front of the house with Connor emerging from the dark forest, though he can’t be clearly seen, in the background. The mother is facing (really upset) the police officer while the father on her left turns his head towards Connor. The panel view comes from the parents’ right showing them and the police officer up close.
Panel 5: The parents run to Connor who is in shock and his skin and clothes are burnt. His mother says:
“Connor! Thank god!”
The father says:
“Connor, what happened?”
The medium shot shows Connor from the front and the parents from behind.
Panel 6: the entire panel shows one of the tears in the wormhole which shows Connor, hunched over, crying. He is covered in cuts and bruises with blood stains on his clothes which don’t seem to come from any cuts. His hands are clenched and are faintly glowing red. (Edit) It appears that he has hurt someone with some unknown power radiating from his hands.
The Doctor is nearing to his last incarnation and I was wondering what you all thought of my idea for what they could do (not that they would do this but whatever). Also what are any of your ideas for they could do and what you think they will do.
This is the idea:
In the Doctor’s last incarnation he is called by an organisation that worked similar to a cult to time lords, they believed time lords were the master race, the pinnacle of scientific and cultural perfection and they wished to resurrect them. They scoured the universe for time lord remains, finding a handful. Using the DNA of dead time lords through time they made hundreds of new time lords, effectively downloading them with scientific and cultural knowledge to be ready to be adult time lords. They are also downloaded with knowledge of the doctor the organisation learned about while searching out time lord stuff, they did this because the doctor would be a great cultural hero to inspire the new time lords.
They also devised other sub-projects made to protect the new time lords and help recreate their society. One such project being a process that would regenerate a dying time lord fully so that they regained all their regenerations and be young by time lord standards though a side effect of the project is memory loss which they haven’t been able to fix. This organisation called the doctor using recreated time lord technology and wanted his help in recreating time lord civilisation.
In this time the Daleks had discovered this organisation and upon finding they set an attack to stop their greatest group enemy from returning, in the chaos only one individual survives, a young time lord with virtually no memory of his origin apart from the odd flashes of memory every now and again. This time lord leaves the ruins of the organisation’s facility, with no memory of how he got there or who he is, he gets a flash of memory, of a man called the doctor, he doesn’t know who the doctor is but he needs a name and decides the doctor is a suitable name (though he may not entirely understand its significance or why he chose it), he then finds the TARDIS, not knowing what it is he goes inside to discover its bigger on the inside which shocks him just like it had all the doctor’s companions.
He goes in, looks around the control room and sees its some sort of ship, while here the TARDIS produces a sonic screwdriver (though the doctor doesn’t know why or how). He could discover objects from different parts of history (things he recognises either because he’s a test tube time lord all of whom were being downloaded with information pertaining to history and science and other such things or because he’s the doctor and has fragmented memory of them), he thinks it odd these things seem so new, he then discovers the doctor’s diary which upon reading he gets more memories though again their source isn’t clear. He recalls the ship has no owner though he doesn’t know if the owner is dead or off he/she abandoned the ship, he also remembers the name of the ship he’s in is the TARDIS- Time And Relative Dimension In Space. He also remembers what the ship can do, which excites him to no end. He decides to try travelling to the past, he chooses 21st century London because it seems like a good idea though he isn’t entirely sure why, there he has a doctor who adventure and meets his first companion.
This doctor could have the intellectual brilliance of the old doctor as well as his confidence and swagger but lacks his experience, maturity and wisdom so he makes some stupid mistakes though he always manages to get out of them. Also because he is young he could more easily have relationships with his young assistants, especially since he may not even know how long he can live because his information download was interrupted. Also because we don't know who he really is it adds even more mystery to the character.