I didn't know you were on a time limit....seems a bit odd but whatever. Your stories will get better with time and with proper application of grammar, spacing etc. For a bilingual 14yr old you are doing very well, I'm not trying to discourage you; just help is all.
For a 14yr old you are doing well. But the only way you're going to get better is if people tell you where you're going wrong, or would you just like to me sing your praises and say it's wonderful when it isn't?? Storywise it is okay, the grammatical part is all over the place (which I guessed correctly that English is your 2nd language...which well done I speak English only, you've got two!)
This is potential going to come across as rude {I don't mean to, but it may read that way} Is English your 2nd language? Because I've read some other fan-fics from people in South America and some of your grammar (commas, captials, hyphens etc) are in the wrong spots and your spacing is a tad off. This is your opening sentence: {Bruce Banner was a very known scientist,his projects with radiation and weapons to the government were very famous,he was a man with 1 meter and 80 centimeters high,he weighed 85 pounds,had a short brown hair and used glasses.He worked for General Thaddeus E. "Thunderbolt" Ross,a man that was always seeking for power,that's why he hired Banner as his nuclear armory chief} Can you tell me what is wrong with it?
Bwhahahahahaha {“Don’t think I’ve forgotten about that fiasco at Wayne Manor, jester. I still have Big Barda’s footprints tattooed on my posterior.” Harley wilted. “Sorries.”} Excellent work @Joygirl
Excellent work @Joygirl its a pleasure to read something good {oh don't mind me, I've been having issues with another user} I have read bits of this previously but seeing part 5 up I decided to go back and refresh my brain. You really do nail Harley, good work.
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