I'm tired. >_<
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@pyrogram: I can hum LIKE A BOSS! >:D
@icarusflies: o_o If I was AmazingAngel right now. I would be very very scared. How long did that post take you? woah xD Supertastic.
The start KINDA felt a little draggy though ( Not the right word..Just..Too much introduction ) , like - It was not written bad, but just sometimes getting right into the murder carnage is the best thing >_< ( After an intro, as you did ) , But yeah, I cannot really give any fair criticism as I would not do any better. Honestly I enjoyed it and now look forward to see if AmazingAngel can match it or beat it :P
But you did set the scene perfectly. So , maybe not getting into the fighting as quick WAS the correct move. As it can now allow the reader to understand everything better.
@amazingangel Zaniel wishes you luck, you're gona need it >:D
@pyrogram: I dunno...like, an hour, hour and a half? And thank you!!!!!!
I totally understand what you mean by the draggy thing, I do need to work on jumping into things. My writing can be a bit like the equivalent of very slowly getting into a swimming pool full of sharks. It's cold, and it takes a bit to get started, but then it's a bloodbath. >_>
Thank you for your critique, I very much appreciate it. :)
Neat. That concentration is good xD
Like you set the scene perfectly, but then their is a difference from setting the scene and making it drag out for the sake of "detail" as some do.
Hey, I have done Fan-Fics and gotten replys like "Good" or "Nice job"
And I am like....How the hell am I going to improve with that? lol
@pyrogram: No, that was without concentration. I kept getting distracted, the actual writing was probably more like half an hour, maybe 20 minutes.
I'm not sure whether you're saying I'm good or need less detail. >_>
Ugh, I KNOW, right??!?! That's just the worst! Like, I wrote all this for you, you could at LEAST give me more than three words. :P
@feral_nova: Hey, Be grateful for waking up. You could have been hit by a bullet. 0_o
Might as well have been! I got hit in the head with a shoe -_-
I freaked out because I heard her crying so i got up, ran over to her and she yells at me to get out and throws her damn shoe! Then I walk over to the kitchen to get some water (now mind I just woke up, freaked out cause idk what the hell was going on so I look like sh!t) and who do I see in the living room? Her damn boyfriend... AND his brother! >_< I swear I'm going to kick his @ss!