@My motivation here is for those newer Viners who would like to learn more about writing a combat scene and more so adopting a truly believable martial arts persona to the best of my ability as a teacher. Also maybe to the not-so new Viners who may consider and add a few things I write here to their repertoire. The more you know!
Disclaimer: I do not nor should anyone expect to read this and instantly become Karate Kid of the Vine, the most important thing to remember is practice makes perfect.
This will be written in a series of installments and other Viners are more than welcome to comment on what is written here. Especially expanding my own work which is apart of what being a RPG community is all about. Also, if you think this is basic knowledge, stating the obvious and/or seems redundant, which I understand it may be for some, then this installment isn't for you now is it champ? :p
Okay Ladies and Gentlemen, with that out of the way :D.....
BOW TO YOUR SENSEI! ヽ(#`Д´)ノ!!!!!!!!!
Number One: The Devil is in the Details-
Uchiha NeVann once told me that the key to success in RPGing is description, description, description. This is applicable to a combat scene for a multitude of reasons but the one I want to expand upon right now is Believability. Look at the following examples against NPCs:
Sentence A: "Tenjin throws a punch and knocks out the guard."
Sentence B: "Tenjin cocks his fist back then transfers the power from his legs and torso by twisting his entire body, while sending his fist rocketing into the jaw of the guard causing the man to topple over unconscious almost instantaneously."
Which one seemed to be from a martial artist? Its the same thing, right? I do not think so. The second sentence is more believable, it hints at the fighting skill of Tenjin. Remember this is a single sentence, imagine an entire fight scene written this way, which a short one will be provided momentarily.
That was a offensive sentence, now time for a defensive sentence. Which of the following is more believable?
Sentence A: "Then another guard threw a kick at Tenjin but he blocked it with his arm."
Sentence B: "Out of the corner of Tenjin's eye, he saw the incoming side kick of another guard flying towards his sternum but with his tiger like reflexes sent his arm upwards against his foe's ankle then to the outside causing the kick to be misguided and over Tenjin's shoulder."
Again what sentence seemed to be from a martial artist? Answer should be B. What it does here is lays the groundwork for a truly convincing counter attack and mentions what type of kick was thrown and where it was intended to hit, which gives little room for interpretation to what the position of the body the guard is in. This is important as the position of you and the NPC/opponent not only paints a better picture but is crucial for a tip I dub Retreating, which I will explain later.
As is before, read the following sentences and decide what is more convincing of a martial arts background?
Sentence A: "Tenjin saw an opportunity and grabbed the guard and slammed him on his head, killing him."
Sentence(s) B: "Tenjin's predatory instincts saw the guard's vulnerability and without warning grappled his foe around the waist with his massive arms only to hoist the man into the air with all his might. Tenjin then arched his spine and dropped backward with deadly speed powered by his legs, driving his enemy's skull into the concrete causing instant death as the sound of bones splintered."
By now, you should understand that description aids in not only your writing ability but also your believability as a fighter. Lets see these combined in a short paragraph form:
Paragraph A: "Tenjin throws a punch and knocks out the guard. Then another guard threw a kick at Tenjin but he blocked it with his arm. Tenjin saw an opportunity and grabbed the guard and slammed him on his head, killing him."
Paragraph B: "Tenjin cocks his fist back then transfers the power from his legs and torso by twisting his entire body, while sending his fist rocketing into the jaw of the guard causing the man to topple over unconscious almost instantaneously. Out of the corner of Tenjin's eye, he saw the incoming side kick of another guard flying towards his sternum but with his tiger like reflexes sent his arm upwards against his foe's ankle then to the outside causing the kick to be misguided and over Tenjin's shoulder. Tenjin's predatory instincts saw the guard's vulnerability and without warning grappled his foe around the waist with his massive arms only to hoist the man into the air with all his might. Tenjin then arched his spine and dropped backward with deadly speed powered by his legs, driving his enemy's skull into the concrete causing instant death as the sound of bones splintered."
Obviously, length of the post means little as far as how good it is and that same scenario could have been written shorter and more than likely better. However, I wished to place emphasis on description. Another quick tip is give yourself consist aliases to change things up as "Tenjin" is used frequently for familiarity but I often use his first name or one of the dozens of nicknames I have on my bio; Which I understand is excessive :P. Details are extremely important, simply describing a character going into his combat stance before the battle even begins adds believability. It doesn't necessarily follow that a martial artist can only be proven in an attack, little things such as the way he or she moves, stating the way they keep their hands up during the fight, the chin held down and the knees slightly bent adds believability.
My biggest and probably best suggestion in this entry is watch martial arts films or contact sports on television. Not just looking for new moves to do but instead try describing the technique to yourself as if you were writing your character performing that routine. Practice using this GIF:
(I am a fanatical Donnie Yen fan so forgive me)
This is how I learned and practiced description, I wanted to replicate the attacks I seen in movies and TV so I watched clips and did exactly as I mentioned above.
Now, without segwaying into a different discussion too much, pick movies and shows that utilize techniques you would like to perform. Let me expand with my character as an example: Tenjin (or me personally) prefers over the top and stylish techniques that you would expect to see in a Donnie Yen or Tony Jaa film. However if your character is more practical in his/her personality stay towards the MMA/ Vale Tudo side or even a classic Bruce Lee film. Not that there is anything wrong with either one of them, it is purely out of personal preference. At any rate, this helps tremendously with wrestling and grappling! Not to mention everything besides H2H such as swordsmanship ;p
Finally, for this installment anyhow, I had mentioned before something I call Retreating. Out of hard knocks in the many battles I have had, I have learned when it comes to description one of the worst things you can do is end a post without 'Retreating'. In simplest terms, never have the last sentence be an attack, in most cases, due to it exposing you to a whole world of potential figurative pain. (Selling is something I will delve deep into in a future installment but this is just wisdom I will pass along to you) Because, you have given your opponent free range of interpretation, you will almost always, if the person wants you KOed or dead anyway, be subjected to a counter attack and you have left yourself unguarded especially in a H2H encounter! At the end of every post, try to take a defensive position and give yourself some distance (retreating*) so your character is prepared whatever your opponent throws at you and remember to use description!
(Also description doesn't mean dictionary, if people have to stop to figure out the meaning of a word every sentence it can break the flow of your writing, actually causing damage to your prose)
☆*:.。. o(≧▽≦)o .。.:*☆
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