Choose an existing character and give a critique as to what you find to be their finer and lesser points. For extra credit add a direction the character has not taken in that you would like to see explored.
So I'm gonna pick IcarusMach9.
He has a great unique origin, as per usual for you, and I really do like the concepts behind the character. I really like the tech focus around the characters powerset because I do think you do science fiction tech really well and you keep it really fun. My only issue with the character is that you don't really play around with the duality of his personality as I thought you would, which is a shame because I know that's a concept you could have a lot of fun messing around with.
As far as weaknesses go, like I said I haven't read anything outside of his interactions which I think are great so I can't really recall anything I don't like. That said I hope you don't go too far into fan RPG character territory and keep the character from spreading out based on his environment. Then again that might be my natural bias against already set up characters. >.>
@Decoy Elite: That's probably why. I've done more of that with him...or at least, the stories I've put together for him OFF CV had a lot of that. :P
I sometimes can't remember wat I've written here and what I haven't.
Well, You could probably tone the nastiness down by 1% or so, give it more implied gore etc..Good points is your the same throughout nearly all interactions so that's good as it helps build your character up? Something like that.
@anthony_stark: I would have liked to see you play the patriotic puppet angle just a lil longer, but you've always been exciting to rp with. I dont know about the Doom look, Iron Doom would be cooler and I think transition better but the concept of different looks for different and newer armor is beast.
@anthony_stark: I would have liked to see you play the patriotic puppet angle just a lil longer,
I agree with this, but for selfish reasons. That thing was keeping the site super active because we had two teams with opposing purposes. That said I understand why you moved on, 700 posts in four days is a crushing amount of activity for any one person to bear.
@quintus_knightfall: His activity is frightening lol. Years down the road when we're all talking about our lists of all time greats Pyro's gonna be on mine for pure, unadulterated, supercharged energy. 700 posts is probably more than I post in an average month.
I was also surprised this thread never took off, but in hindsight seeing how people react to critiques on the Vine, not really.
Hm...what about Premonition?
Evil, Awesomely cunning with a hint of passion for his job. Only downside is he kills his own allies too often >_>
Hm...what about Premonition?
The characterization of a madman in a seat of power is pretty spot on, I like the sinister inner thoughts as a release valve to the false face he puts on for the public. Makes you wonder if/when he will finally lose it American Psycho style as he is unable to pretend to be a sane and moral person.
The powerset is a little too easy to abuse IMO, but considering you did not want everyone and their grandmother to just walk in and assassinate you I can understand it for this role in particular.
The weakness is in the politics itself, the reactions to controversy at the scale of Venezuela and the surrounding activities lacks the same detail as the characterization. I cannot see this character shrugging off the things being said and done without you losing me.