Just read through some of your writing. I would say off of them a 4. My first observation for you is to try and not use He as much to start your sentences.
Just read through some of your writing. I would say off of them a 4. My first observation for you is to try and not use He as much to start your sentences."
thanx I have actually become aware of that me repeating the same phrases over and over I really try to avoid first posts because of it
"thanx I have actually become aware of that me repeating the same phrases over and over I really try to avoid first posts because of it"
Try changing it up at up at times with your name instead. Examples
He walked down the empty street as the cold brisk night crept around him. Midnightist walked down the empty street as the cold brisk night crept around him. As the cold brisk night crept around him he walked down the empty street. etc
@Aztek Sure let me go read your post against Gloom once more.
"thanx I have actually become aware of that me repeating the same phrases over and over I really try to avoid first posts because of it"
Try changing it up at up at times with your name instead. Examples
He walked down the empty street as the cold brisk night crept around him. Midnightist walked down the empty street as the cold brisk night crept around him. As the cold brisk night crept around him he walked down the empty street. etc
@Aztek Sure let me go read your post against Gloom once more."
may help thanks on a personal note do you just read COH or play it I was wondering if I should by it?
"k, sounds good, I'll read your answer when I get back"
Done and I'd say theres even improvement since the last post of yours I read in Ultimate Betrayal. With this last post I'd say your writing is up to a 5. You used nice descriptive words throughout the post to show your environment. Very good. Still think Gloom is gonna win though :)
"may help thanks on a personal note do you just read COH or play it I was wondering if I should by it?"
I've played it for a while. I have a Scrapper that's level 42 or so and another one that is 22 both on the Justice server. The game is a lot of fun to start off with but unless you have a group of people to play with it can get dull after a while. It does however have a great character generator, one of the best for any online games. I also have read all the CoH comics, I like them and would of liked to seen more done.
There is a 20 issue run and a 12 issues run as well as a single stand alone one. All of them are on the website in pdf file for free. It didn't go to well so yeah they canceled them.
I'll give you a 2 after that. You said your name too much, it was short, full of bad grammar and misspellings, and it wasn't a finished RPG. A 2 is generous
There is a 20 issue run and a 12 issues run as well as a single stand alone one. All of them are on the website in pdf file for free. It didn't go to well so yeah they canceled them."
"The Real World...got one post there, and Whatever it Takes...two posts. Both are pretty recent."
Nice man I was pleasantly surprised with your writing in The Real World. I didn't expect what I found and I would say that piece of writing is a 5. Top notch job man. I'll have to read your posts in Whatever it takes now, see if you keep up that kind of consistency.
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