My New Bio is here...not finished but Here

FINALLY...aughhhhhh...It has taken a lot of time but I finally have made the bio. In my spare time that is, i would write it. TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK, CRITISISMS and such...what could I add, what could I do better?

OH AND BY THE WAY....it's not finished yet...I just wanted to get it on here so that when I have to turn in my school laptop in I won't loose all the hard work... X D

I've only glanced at it so far but these are the things I would suggest. At the top where you have all your statistics place a picture of what your character looks like rpg wise. Then try and find some scans and pictures to go along with your powers and weaknesses. To help showcase them on a visual stand point. From there add in more pictures to the bio portion of it. Maybe one for every 2 paragraphs or something that.

Thanks but Im confused...I don't have any stats on the SP bio yet...Are you talking about my current one.

Same as Andferne, I only glanced at it. But what i'd advice is to make chapters.. like 'Childhood' etc.. etc.. So it's easier to figure out what each part is about. Pictures are always good to look at and it makes the bio more enjoyable. And one minor thing, If you make your character say things in you bio make it bold or underlined or something, makes it stand out more =)

Just personal opinions though.