Anyone think this is good

Avatar image for kinggamer97
kinggamer97

968

Forum Posts

954

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 2

#1  Edited By kinggamer97

Posted it in the NWA training forum.This is my post byt he way.


t was a dusky and clammy setting and it was raining arduously. His red thin tee was getting soiled with with the clear liquid. The aroma of corpses filled he city like deadly toxic gas filling up a room. He was sweating like he was in an oven being burned to death. The thought of that made him shiver for a second. People yelling overpowered the noise of honks made by the trucks and cabs. The year was 2019.The malevolent city known, as New York was dead. Only a few people live there after the beasts came. He was looking for the man known as Swagga Boy. The last time he had fought him, if you could even call it a fight was 10,000 years ago. hats because he had traveled to the distant future. His animosity was building. He walked down the filthy streets sluggishly just incase someone decided to pop out at him. He did not have his attire handy. When the time was right he'd take it out and don it. The building around him getting dimmer he knew he was almost there

He's contemplating whether or not he should get his attire on yet. “No not yet" he said to himself. He goes indoors to the building that has a sign up. “Your almost their”. He grasps the fact that the man is taunting him. This is when he dons it. He seizes his attire with great force and puts it on with great pride. He takes out the object that has kept him going for ten years. The Velocity ring. Takes advantage of his Superhuman: Speed and sprints inside the lachrymose building. His mind burned with the thought of what would go down when he located him. He’s speeding all the way up disregarding that the beasts that have overturned the city are present. He asks himself why this man detests him so much. He questions himself what he's going to do when he rendezvous with him.

The building took duration to scale at the rate he was going. As he strolls the next few floors, he thinks to himself why he needs to be removed from society. Because he put two people to death he says in a hushed voice. He killed the only two people that matter to me anymore. And it'll weigh me down for the rest of my existence. If I even get a hand on him. His lungs will be lifted out of him so fast that he won't have time to take his last breath. That’s how Swagga Boy killed them

He then reminisces how skilled he is. The hatred in him passes because the first time he' s seen him he was being rescued him from the Mob. Swagga Boy fought with great potential. He wiped the mob on the ground. He remembers the moment when he took that rusty blade from his back, and swung it. He always feared that sharp edge. He was terrified when they all fell in a single swoop. He knew he had to avoid it. If he didn’t, the fight would be over in a couple seconds.

 

Zodiacs power was fueled by detestation. The Velocity ring was being fueled by this detestation. It could give the power to a ninety-year-old man to sprint at the speed of nine hundred mph. This power was even greater because Zodiacs willpower to defeat this one man was so enormous. He could not experience pain anymore anymore. When he walks up the steps he sees him in clear vision.  The sharp edge was waiting at his shoulder, shining in the sun, which had just come up. He did not fell the necessity to fell terrified this occasion.  All he felt was the wind moving around rapidly. He felt it swoop across his feet.  This was going to be his advantage.  He feels his feet moving like a chopper’s blades, never stopping still they finally run out of fuel.  He was never going to cease movement.  Swagga Boy took his left hand, clenched it tightly around the blade and brought it over.  While that was happening Zodiac a couple seconds from his chest takes all the power he’s got left and shoves it into his chest and the thing that end the pain and suffering.

 

Avatar image for greystone
Greystone

479

Forum Posts

0

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

#2  Edited By Greystone

It's cool, man. Besides for typos and grammar errors(which everyone does so don't sweat it), it's kinda hot. Keep up the good work.