Script Rough Draft: THE MONKEY KING: ISSUE 1

Hello. Recently, I have completed a Rough Draft version of a comic series I sometimes think about dubbed, "The Monkey King."

Below, you may fine a link to it in google docs.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/13E2F43JO2NjKD2SUaRi_jcK51Mwpb_kwBJnpB1Bf8VU/edit

I was wondering what anyone though about it.

Come on? No one interested in a comic where, technically, Son Goku is involved?

Then why did you reply, except to be a jerk?

I'm not asking for anyone to be excited. I'm asking for some feedback because I'm more desperate for it than a dog in heat is for what she wants and desire to better myself.

Or, unlike you, they aren't jerks and have the decency not to reply like you did.

No need to be rude...

Anyway, I read it. It's definitely well-written, and has a good opening. If I were an artist, I don't think I'd have a problem drawing it from that script. So yeah, it looks great! :-D

Cool! Alright...what would you say would be the parts where I could speed things up a bit and what did you like and didn't like?

@perezite:

I'm sorry that I was rude with the comments I made. I deleted them all. I wish you luck with your comic book.

Thank You. I accept your apology.

@perezite:

You're welcome.