Posted by InnerVenom123 (29510 posts) - - Show Bio

The Cult of Khonshu was formed when the Egyptian God Khonshu manipulated three souls (Marc Spector, Jake Lockley, and Steven Grant) into killing his former companions, the other Egyptian Gods. Marc left his ex-wife, Marlene, behind. Grant and Lockley's entire childhoods were manipulated. Khonshu declared himself an "Omega-God." His plans since then have yet to unfold.

"Vengeance V Vengeance" - Rated M

Page 1

1.1

Back view of a preacher/priest leading a crowded church in prayer. It’s sunny outside, everyone looks like they’re sick of the heat. The church has large stained glass windows on both sides.

PRIEST: “The LORD is my shepherd!”

1.2

That same priest in his suburban home, arguing with his wife in a kitchen. We see a man turned over on the couch in a living room, just barely visible from here, with a blanket covering him. It’s night.

CAPTION: TWO NIGHTS AGO.

PRIEST: Janet, there’s nowhere else for him to go! He has nothing, he came up to the door mumbling about fighting a KILLER CULT!

JANET: He needs help!

PRIEST: I intend to get him the help he needs, and--

JANET: To get him out of our house?

PRIEST: Yes. But he has to stay for just a day or two.

PRIEST: Please… look at him.

1.3

Front view of the same priest during the sermon.

CAPTION: NOW.

PRIEST: “I shall not be in want!”

1.4

The sleeping man, we can’t see who he is.

JANET: … Fine. But he’s out by Friday.

PRIEST: Thank you. I’m sorry, but--

JANET: You have to help people. I know. I love you.

PRIEST: I love you too.

1.5

The outside of the church, an overhead view. The area around the church lets us know that this is a small town area, probably in America’s bible belt. There’s a group of about 15 men surrounding it. A few are walking toward the entrance, a few toward the exit. A few are standing around the perimeter, as if to guard.

PRIEST: “Even though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death…”

Page 2

2.1

The sleeping man has turned over, revealing himself to be JOHNNY BLAZE.

BLAZE: mmmhrrzzzzz

CAPTION: PRIEST: “I will fear no evil!”

2.2

The priest continues on.

PRIEST: “For you are with me!”

2.3

The front doors have fallen, mercenaries dressed in all black and holding guns burst in. There are two important details to remember about them. They all wear black masks, and they all have one identifying mark: a silver crescent symbol on the chest.

MK MERC 1: EVERYONE DOWN!

CROWD: AAAIIIEEEE

MK MERC 2: YOU HEARD HIM! SHUT THE F**K UP AND GET DOWN!

MK MERC 2: HANDS OVER YOUR HEADS!

2.4

The priest is shocked, MK mercs are walking up behind him onto the stage.

MK MERC 3: On your knees, false preacher.

PRIEST: WH-WHAT IS GOING ON HERE?!

2.5

One of the stained glass windows bursts, MOON KNIGHT (Marc Spector) erupting through holding his cape as he dives in head-first. Dramatic entrance.

SFX: KSSHHH

MK MERC 3: You’re about to meet a REAL man of God.

Page 3

3.1

Marc MK looks up, toward the priest, he landed right in the middle of the aisle. Both sides of the church look on in horror.

MOON KNIGHT: Good morning, father.

3.2

The priest is on his knees, forced there by the two MK Mercs, right next to his pedestal on the stage. Moon Knight is walking toward him, and they’re essentially at eye-level.

MOON KNIGHT: Do you know why I’m here?

PRIEST: I-I- Let them go!

PRIEST: Let them all go!

MOON KNIGHT: That all depends on what you do.

3.3

Moon Knight is now close to the Priest, and has his hand out and around his chin, forcing him to look him directly in the face.

MOON KNIGHT: Seen a blonde biker bum recently, father?

PRIEST: I-… I-

MOON KNIGHT: You don’t even know him.

MOON KNIGHT: The guilt will hurt… but surely this entire church’s capacity is worth more than him?

PRIEST: … Yes.

MOON KNIGHT: Yes what?

PRIEST: Yes! I have him! He’s at my house! Please, let them go!

3.4

Moon Knight slashes the priest’s throat open violently with a crescent dart.

SFX: GSHHHSKK

PRIEST: GGAHHH

CROWD: OH MY GOD

CROWD: FATHER!

CROWD: JESUS!

CROWD: LORD SAVE US, SAVE US!

3.5

Moon Knight turning his head slightly, blood splatter on his mask.

MOON KNIGHT: SHUT THE HELL UP.

3.6

The terrified crowd, frozen in silence. The MK Mercs watch on, guarding the entrance. We get a back view of Moon Knight, similar to the Priest’s from earlier.

MOON KNIGHT: This is no longer a hostage situation.

MOON KNIGHT: It is now a recruitment drive.

Page 4

4.1

A mother holding her 3 year old child near the back, a seat closest to the windows, looks up in horror, covering her child’s mouth. An MK Merc is looking at her, his mask lifted partially so we can see his sadistic smile.

MOON KNIGHT: Your children belong to Khonshu now.

4.2

Moon Knight standing in front of the horrified crowd. The priest’s body slumped over, bleeding out onto the stage, bleeding over it and dripping toward the floor.

MOON KNIGHT: Anyone over the age of 5 in this room is corrupted, and at the moment, we need the purest possible recruits.

MOON KNIGHT: I’m sorry to say, you’ll have to die.

4.3

Outside the Church, the perimeter’s MK Merc guards are opening fire at something off-panel. One of the MK Mercs is pressing his thumb to his ear, talking into a comm system.

SFX: BUDDA BUDDA BUDDA

MK MERC: SIR! SIR, HE’S COMING!

4.4

Moon Knight receiving the signal.

MOON KNIGHT: Good.

4.5

Ghost Rider running over the MK Merc who was just talking.

MOON KNIGHT: COMM: Let him in!

Page 5

5.1

Ghost Rider stopping his bike in front of the church’s door, starting to get off.

GHOST RIDER: SPECTOR!!!!

CROWD: SMALL TEXT: NO! NO IT CAN’T BE!

CROWD: SMALL TEXT: THE DEVIL! THE DEVIL AND A MADMAN!

5.2

The crowd is looking toward the front door, the MK Mercs inside are keeping guns trained on them as usual.

GHOST RIDER: I’M GONNA RIP YOUR F**KIN’ HEAD OFF!

CROWD: SMALL TEXT: We’re all gonna die. We’re all gonna die.

CROWD: SMALL TEXT: Mommy! I’m scared!

5.3

Ghost Rider stepping inside the church, walking down the aisle. He’s dragging two corpses on hellfire-chains, and the bodies are burning, consumed in hellfire that only touches them.

MOON KNIGHT: So they managed to kill the priest’s wife even with you in the way?

MOON KNIGHT: You’re really bad at saving people, you know that?

GHOST RIDER: Now they’re BURNING. FOREVER.

MOON KNIGHT: I told them it was a suicide mission. Their real objective was letting you know I was here.

MOON KNIGHT: I bet you thought you could save the priest, maybe make up for your mistake…

5.4

Moon Knight holding up the bloody crescent dart over his head.

MOON KNIGHT: You were late, Blaze. I killed him for Khonshu. His blood is his food.

5.5

Ghost Rider glaring.

GHOST RIDER: You KNEW I was there.

5.6

Moon Knight holding the crescent dart close to his face, almost examining it.

MOON KNIGHT: I wanted to see if he would sell you out.

MOON KNIGHT: Surprise, surprise, he did.

MOON KNIGHT: EVERYONE sells you out. That’s how much you mean to them.

MOON KNIGHT: Aren’t you sick of it? Just a little bit?

MOON KNIGHT: Don’t you want to be part of something MORE?

Page 6

6.1

Ghost Rider throws his arm out, and a hellfire-chain comes from the sleeve, straight toward Moon Knight. At this point, Ghost Rider has stopped carrying the chain that holds the two burning MK Mercs.

GHOST RIDER: NO!

GHOST RIDER: You’ve been chasing me for WEEKS!

GHOST RIDER: IT ENDS HERE!

6.2

The hellfire-chain wraps around Moon Knight’s arm, but he’s pulling his arm back, so he intends for this. He’s still holding the crescent dart, too.

GHOST RIDER: Wh-WHAT?!

MOON KNIGHT: I am one of the TRINITY.

MOON KNIGHT: Khonshu gives me POWER.

6.3

Moon Knight yanks his arm back more, pulling Ghost Rider forward, stumbling a few steps.

GHOST RIDER: YOUR SOUL SHOULD BE ON FIRE!

MOON KNIGHT: It’s protected, Blaze.

MOON KNIGHT: You, on the other hand…

6.4

Moon Knight is close up to Ghost Rider now, jamming the crescent dart into Ghost Rider’s forehead.

MOON KNIGHT: WILL FEEL KHONSHU’S WRATH!

GHOST RIDER: GGAHHH!!!

6.5

Ghost Rider fallen to his hands and knees, the crescent dart stuck in his forehead. He looks like an ordinary skeleton.

MOON KNIGHT: Feel it.

MOON KNIGHT: Feel the blood of who you sought vengeance for turning on you… his soul wants vengeance on YOU.

MOON KNIGHT: For being the pathetic fool who wandered into his life and transformed it into THIS!

6.6

Moon Knight looks behind him, and up.

KHONSHU: Yessssss…

Page 7

7.1

Ghost Rider looking up from his hands and knees to see the massive form of Khonshu staring down at him, towering in the room. Khonshu is more shadowy than ever, eyes burning bright red.

KHONSHU: You have done well, Moon Knight.

KHONSHU: The spirit of vengeance is MINE.

CROWD: WHAT’S HAPPENING?!?

CROWD: JESUS JESUS JESUS

CROWD: WE’RE DEAD

CROWD: THIS IS HELL

7.2

Moon Knight looks, angry at the crowd for interrupting Khonshu with their screams.

KHONSHU: Let them scream, my son.

CROWD: DEAD

CROWD: I WANT TO GET OUT OF HERE

7.3

Khonshu’s icy glare.

KHONSHU: Johnny Blaze…

7.4

Ghost Rider looking up.

KHONSHU: LOOK INTO MY EYES.

Page 8

8.1 Splash Page

The spirit of vengeance itself is sucked out of Johnny, directly into Khonshu’s open beak. The crescent dart in Johnny’s head has disintegrated.

KHONSHU: THE SPIRIT OF VENGEANCE WILL MERGE WITH THE OMEGA-GOD OF VENGEANCE

BLAZE: AAAAAAAAAAAAAA

KHONSHU: YES

KHONSHU: GIVE ME WHAT IS RIGHTFULLY MINE

Page 9

9.1

A collapsed Johnny Blaze, with a scorched mark on his forehead where the crescent dart was.

BLAZE: nnnhhh…

9.2

Khonshu cackles, breathing fire out of his nose and mouth.

KHONSHU: HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

KHONSHU: YES!!!

9.3

Moon Knight looking up toward Khonshu.

MOON KNIGHT: What’s our next move?

9.4

Khonshu’s fiery eyes.

KHONSHU: Take Blaze to our main holding cell… we must keep him alive.

Page 10

10.1

The outside of the church. Several of the MK Mercs are dragging along small children or carrying them. Most of the kids have duct tape over their mouths.

10.2

The MK Mercs that are left over have surrounded the church, and are opening fire. Some are throwing grenades.

10.3

Moon Knight is standing in an open field, and talking to a lone MK Merc. Johnny Blaze is laid out next to him.

MOON KNIGHT: Everyone dead?

MK MERC: Yes, sir.

MOON KNIGHT: Good.

MOON KNIGHT: Take the children to the training camp.

MK MERC: What do I tell Moon Knight Lockley, sir?

MOON KNIGHT: Standard procedure.

MK MERC: Yes, sir.

10.4

Moon Knight facing the open field.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: “For I was blind...”

10.5

Moon Knight presses a button on his belt.

SFX: BEET

Page 11

11.1

Moon Knight walking toward the visible mooncopter, which is now painted a dark red color. He drags Blaze along, too.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: “But now I see.”

11.2

The MK Mercs are loading the children into the back of several vans, some of which are already driving off.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Johnny Blaze… he and I used to be alike.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Neither of us had a purpose. We lied to ourselves, created purposes. He was vengeance-incarnate, I was an Avenger.

11.3

Moon Knight flying the red mooncopter over the vans, which are leaving the now burning church. Blaze is clearly visible in the back of the copter, strapped in.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: That was before the Cult of Khonshu.

Page 12 and 13

A big crescent-dart shaped spread made up of different panels. Blood is dripping from the blade. Khonshu’s eyes are glowing at the top of the spread.

12.1

Flashback to the last scene of “Cult of Khonshu”, the three Moon Knights rising with Khonshu leading them.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Khonshu’s manipulative powers increased dramatically.

12.2

A mercenary in a wartorn area looking up, his eyes glowing red.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: All over the world, we found those who were like me.

12.3

An NYPD cop looking at his young wife and baby in a crib, being fed. He holds a gun at his side, but he’s raising it. His eyes are red.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: It wasn’t just the scumbag mercenaries. It was anyone with that dark spark inside of them. Anyone who’d been scarred inside… whether they’d put it behind them or not.

13.1

A teacher looking at her class, holding up a machete. Her eyes are red.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: In the first month, unexplained violent homicides rose, along with unexplainable disappearances. But they weren’t the enemy that I had fought all this time.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: They were us. Entering the fold through a baptism of blood.

13.2

A small group of MK Mercs bowing before Khonshu in the tomb from the end of Cult of Khonshu.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: By the third month, we had a police force.

13.3

Khonshu addressing a much larger group in a larger, dark place. Possibly underground.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: By the sixth month, an army.

Page 14

14.1

The mooncopter passing under a commercial airliner.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: That was when Khonshu decided that this generation wasn’t enough.

14.2

A large underground compound, the vans from earlier are driving inside.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: A training camp in middle-America was opened. Easiest to work with, give the shocking lack of superhumans in the area. A few more have followed, but the first is the best.

14.3

A small kid banging on the doors.

KID: LET ME OUT!

KID: I WANT MY DADDY! LET ME OUT!

14.4

The van has stopped, and the doors are open. Moon Knight (Lockley) is staring down at the kid.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: Your daddy’s dead.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: You won’t miss him soon enough.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Jake Lockley runs the place.

14.5

Lockley holds a crescent dart to the kid’s face.

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: Now be quiet.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: He works well with children.

Page 15

15.1

It’s night in New York City. The mooncopter is soaring overhead.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Nothing makes me see red more than children.

15.2

The mooncopter hovers over a skyscraper’s roof.

CAPTION: MOON KNIGHT: Nothing.

15.3

Moon Knight is standing in the copter, grabbing Blaze by the neck.

MOON KNIGHT: That scar’s healed nice.

MOON KNIGHT: Must be something left of the spirit inside you.

MOON KNIGHT: WAKE UP!

15.4

Blaze’s eyes slowly opening.

BLAZE: Wh… wha…

15.5

Black panel.

BLAZE: W-HEY! What’s—WHAT’S GOING ON!?

BLAZE: OFFA ME!

BLAZE: GET OFF ME!

Page 16

16.1

From Blaze’s point of view, a small prison cell. It looks like it was a shower stall once, remodeled into a cell. The door is made of strong glass, some air holes. The door’s open.

BLAZE: Wha-

16.2

Side shot, Moon Knight kicking Blaze in the back so that he falls into the cell.

BLAZE: GHA!

16.3

Blaze up against the wall, his head turned around as Moon Knight slams the door shut.

BLAZE: Where the hell am I?!

MOON KNIGHT: Home, sweet home.

Page 17

17.1

Khonshu sits on a throne made of human skeleton in a large, dark room.

KHONSHU: Yes…

17.2

Close up on Khonshu. He’s holding a blue, glowing rock.

KHONSHU: Trinity. Hear me.

17.3, 17.4, 17.5

Moon Knight Spector, Lockley, and Grant looking up from different locations. Spector is in front of Blaze’s cell, Lockley is standing on a catwalk overlooking a larger room, and Grant is standing on a dirt road with several MK Mercs around him.

KHONSHU: The final piece of the spirit of vengeance must be found.

KHONSHU: DANIEL KETCH must be found!

KHONSHU: And once I have fully merged with the complete spirit of vengeance…

Page 18

18.1

Khonshu holding up the glowing blue rock.

KHONSHU: We will build our armies stronger than ever, and attack ASGARD!

18.2

Moon Knight Grant walks toward a mooncycle, several MK Mercs around him walk to their motorcycles as well.

KHONSHU: The God of thunder will DIE!

MOON KNIGHT GRANT: Praise be to Khonshu!

18.3

Moon Knight Lockley looking down at the facility. MK Mercs are loading the children into rooms, we can’t see what’s happening otherwise.

KHONSHU: I will take his hammer and SMASH the other Gods to NOTHING! Then I will DRINK THEIR BLOOD!

MOON KNIGHT LOCKLEY: Praise be to Khonshu!

18.4

Moon Knight walks away from Blaze’s locked cell.

KHONSHU: And every OTHER GOD will learn to FEAR OUR NAME!

KHONSHU: WE ARE THE CULT OF KHONSHU!

MOON KNIGHT: Praise the Cult of Khonshu.

Page 19

19.1

Blaze is looking over toward off panel where Moon Knight was.

BLAZE: HEY! GET BACK HERE!

19.2

Blaze looks forward.

???: Don’t bother calling for him. He’s talking to that… thing.

BLAZE: Who’s there?

???: Let me turn on the light…

19.3

Blaze winces a bit from the light coming from directly across the room.

???: There.

Page 20

20.1 Splash Page

Across the room, there’s a large cell with a strong glass wall keeping the occupant inside. The inside of the cell, however, is basically a small apartment. It’s even furnished, and there’s a TV and everything. Standing there with the light switch for the ceiling fan in her hand is a very bruised and scarred MARLENE ALRAUNE.

MARLENE: Listen… whoever you are…

MARLENE: I need your help.

CONTINUED IN: VENGEANCE OF THE CULT OF KHONSHU #2 - (Script)

#1 Posted by CapFanboy (5382 posts) - - Show Bio

@InnerVenom123: Sweet! Moon Knight and Ghost Rider are brilliant

#2 Posted by venomoushatred1001 (12273 posts) - - Show Bio

Ladies and Gentlemen, the prodigal son returns. Great story, Zach. Konshu FTW!

#3 Posted by Jackson_Hartley (161 posts) - - Show Bio

Wow. Now that's dark. Like how you handle Ghost Rider stories.

#4 Posted by FadeToBlackBolt (23238 posts) - - Show Bio

Epic as always. Impressive the way you can build narratives around antagonists too, that's difficult. Look at Bendis, he tried and failed miserably. Another fine entry into the Library of IV123 ^__^ 
 
Your stories are getting progressively darker too =P

#5 Posted by Deranged Midget (17974 posts) - - Show Bio

Holy hell dude, that was fantastically dark and cryptic. Your writing is becoming progressively more visual and I love that you aren't afraid to take characters into darker crevices of their personalities.

Easily your best work so far! Can't wait for more! :D

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#6 Posted by TheAmazingImmortalMan (3902 posts) - - Show Bio

I really enjoyed this dude, Love the narrative

#7 Posted by InnerVenom123 (29510 posts) - - Show Bio

@venomoushatred1001 said:

Ladies and Gentlemen, the prodigal son returns.

@Jackson_Hartley said:

Wow. Now that's dark. Like how you handle Ghost Rider stories.

It gets darker, if you can believe that.

@FadeToBlackBolt said:

Epic as always. Impressive the way you can build narratives around antagonists too, that's difficult. Look at Bendis, he tried and failed miserably. Another fine entry into the Library of IV123 ^__^ Your stories are getting progressively darker too =P

I had no idea making stories around bad guys was difficult. This news excites me.

I merely adapted the dark. :P

@Deranged Midget said:

Holy hell dude, that was fantastically dark and cryptic. Your writing is becoming progressively more visual and I love that you aren't afraid to take characters into darker crevices of their personalities.

Easily your best work so far! Can't wait for more! :D

Dark stories need dark characters. Thankfully, I'm in no short supply.

Thanks. :D

@TheAmazingImmortalMan said:

I really enjoyed this dude, Love the narrative

Thanks dude-bro. Hope you check out the other parts when I upload 'em.

@CapFanboy said:

@InnerVenom123: Sweet! Moon Knight and Ghost Rider are brilliant

Thanks!