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07/11/13CB 1-Shots #1Ninja & The Warrior Princess, The(Blog) (Forum)Disclaimer
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T+Graphic imagery, mild cursing w/symbols.
Intro:So far, my total output on the Fan-Fic forum has been in the Character Creation Contest. I want to share some of the stuff I've written there with the larger FF forum. The first two contests had general themes. I made the decision to try to make them something that would wind up as one continuing story. No easy task, when you don't know what the following contests will bring. I also issued myself the challenge of writing the scenes without actually naming the characters - it forced me to find new and different descriptors, instead of just "he, she, they," etc. I wound up dropping that idea, because it's extremely hard to do, but I'm satisfied that I tried it. Let me know what you think.

Contest details:

Contest #DateThemeMax Words AllowedMy WordsTotal % of contest wordsVotesTotal % of VoteOverall Placement
109/23/12Ninja36035723%00%5th (Last)
~Project_Worm's challenge:
That's right just make a short story about an original character (Male or Female a Hero or Villain) based around the concept of a NINJA.

And the story...

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Part 1~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~The Ninja~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Being a ninja isn't all that. The people you work for are jerks, and talk to you like you're nothing, even though you could rip their heart out with the right punch, or cut their head off in an eye blink. They all think they're these evil grandmasters, moving ninjas like pawns against their enemies, when all they are, really, are some spineless cowards who want someone else dead, but don't have the guts or the skills to do it themselves. Yet they expect you to act with honor, because that's what they've seen in a hundred martial arts movies, or they think we're all bound by the mores of a culture that's thousands of years old. Give me a break.

The martial arts are part of our way of life, and I took to kung fu, because frankly, I liked the idea of being able to whip some a**. Turned out I was really good at kung fu. Also turned out I whipped a** on the wrong self important, self entitled bully one day, and he came back with a band of friends late in the night - some biker boy, Yakuza wannabes - and wiped out my entire family in retaliation. Missed me though, because I was with the bully's sister - the reason we had been fighting to begin with. Got back just in time to see them retreating into the darkness on a bunch of Yamahas.

So I buried my family, sold what was left of their holdings to interested buyers in Kyoto, and I went to the real Yakuza, offered all of my money to the biggest boss I could get to, and told him all I wanted in return was to be put in touch with some ninjas. He laughed, but amazingly enough, he arranged the meeting. I told them I wanted to be a ninja. They laughed, and then one of them tried to kill me. Like I said, I'm really good at kung fu, so one dead ninja later, and I started learning ninjitsu, and I've killed a lot of people since then. Just not the one I want.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Continued in Part 2~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Contest details:

Contest #DateThemeMax Words AllowedMy WordsTotal % of contest wordsVotesTotal % of VoteOverall Placement
210/13/12Warrior Princess50050018.3%00%6th (Last)
~Irishlad's challenge:

Anything based on the picture, I just said I'd pick one that people could interpret differently...

While it is Princess Mononoke it doesn't have to be about her, it can be anyone

it doesn't have to be the actual character, I didn't have mononoke in mind because I don't know [the character].

I just thought it looked like a cool picture,so make your own character...

And the story continues...

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Part 2~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~The Warrior Princess~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"My young lover was chosen to make my brother angry, among other reasons, but I did not think he would be so brash. I thought he had gotten beyond that several decades ago, but I underestimated his anger over father giving me The Dragon Fangs, which will give me the power to find the form of our ancestors. Because he prefers the prestige of form over the power of function, my brother never bothered to learn what he had been given. He has only himself to blame for losing The Dragon Talon, but responsibility has never been his strength. Father told him this when he gave me the Fangs, and as usual, our aged father was right. He shouldn't have wagered with my boyfriend, over their fight. He thought it might come between us, but instead my eager lover immediately handed the blade over to me, smirking at my brother the whole time. This is when he became so murderously enraged, that he would later kill the boy's family.

"The Dragon Talon is special. It is the last of its kind to be unearthed from the honeycombed caverns of the dragon's lair. There are twenty-nine Talons in all, five of which are enchanted fakes, and the other twenty-four being real. They have been scattered throughout and beyond the empire, but if one were to possess four of them; four of the real ones - enough to represent one dragon paw - then they would become very powerful. If one could find them all, they could rule with no fear of opposition. With my brother'sTalon, I now have three - two real, and one fake - the boon of the last few centuries. Pitiful for so long a search, but a testament to how well they are hidden."

"Is that why we are here?" asked the escort. A few fat drops of rain began to fall. Just enough to be heard hitting the gravestones, but not quite enough to start getting wet. The escort opened his umbrella, and held it over the kneeling princess. "Is another Talon among these graves?"

The princess looked sorrowfully at the gravestone before her, and brought the handle of The Talon to her cheek, catching a tear and letting it soak into the soft, red ribbon that wrapped the handle. "No," she answered. "We are here, because I miss my lover. He has been gone for so long, chasing vengeance against my brother, but he can never succeed on his own. No one can kill the immortal, unless they have talked to death face-to-face."

The escort blanched. "Princess...please, no!"

"Do not fear. I am here to use the Talon, yes, but a dragon's talon does not just take life. It also has the power to give life. So I am here to raise my lover's sister, that she may enact his revenge, and satisfy his need to restore his family's honor. Although he has cast all other traditions aside, he still clings to that one."

Next Issue: Nightfire vs. Magnamor vs. Doom Rider
Please let me know what you think, and thanks! -cb
#1 Edited by cbishop (8925 posts) - - Show Bio

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  • Dragon Fangs, The
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Note: All of the characters were unnamed.

Advance Praise for The Ninja & The Warrior Princess:

@cbishop said:

I whipped ass on the wrong self important, self entitled bully

Very nice, actions have consequences. Good story

batkevin74

Bronze: @cbishop

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Thanks for stopping in! :^D

#2 Posted by sweatboy (819 posts) - - Show Bio

Bishop, buddy! San from Mononoke was an interesting surprise. At first I was like Kung Fu is not what ninja do, and kung fu in kyoto? But this is from before the ninja became a ninja,...

Title is catchy. I'm a sucker for those Ninja x Princess stories, and most of my RPGs take on that theme.

#3 Posted by cbishop (8925 posts) - - Show Bio

@sweatboy: The Mononoke picture was just what was pulled for the contest. The character is not her - just based on the picture. The ninja and kung-fu stuff I did no research on whatsoever. It was me just jumping in and throwing something out there for the contest. Thanks for liking the title. :)

#4 Edited by jatoe48er (220 posts) - - Show Bio

@cbishop you turned a frown upside down (that's a metaphor for the contest entry into another chapter) I like it although it was a little short, but that's the beauty of it. I want to read more.

I do hint a slight fetish towards Dragons in your writing.... I'll keep an eye out for chapter 3.

#5 Edited by cbishop (8925 posts) - - Show Bio

@jatoe48er: Not exactly a fetish. When the CCC first started, I gave myself a few additional challenges:

  1. No character would be named. This would force me to work on my descriptors, to keep from making it "he said/ she said."
  2. Every entry would somehow be part of a larger, continuing story. I wanted to see how long I could continue the same story, even though I had no idea what contest would be coming next.
  3. And it seems like there was something else, that I don't recall at the moment.

At CCC #3 - creating a villain for Nightfire - I didn't know how to make it fit in a continuing story, unless I mentioned #3 in a later contest, as a story that someone was reading. I gave up not naming characters with CCC #4, but still had a dragon in the story, in case I still wanted to continue on later. With #5 - creating a villain for Superman/Supergirl - I abandoned the continuing story idea altogether, as far as the CCC is concerned.

Outside of the CCC, the story was to be that the ninja was the lover of the princess - a dragon princess - who is solidifying her power base, in search of the Dragon Talons. The escort mentioned in this scene was to later be revealed to be Heironymous, which is why he's a dragon, in CCC #6 & 12.

So all the dragons are connected to one idea, but I'll have to develop outside of the CCC. I think those challenges have been working against me, as far as votes. No one cares that I'm trying to develop one continuing story within the contest, and I'm giving readers only part of a story in each contest. So you'll probably see that change up.

...Oh, and it's short because of the word limits for those two contests. That's why I posted both parts all in one blog. ;)

EDIT: (7/15/13) Oh, going back to CCC #3, I considered telling Nightfire's origin as being something connected to dragon's, just to further the connection to CCC #1&2 - the fire and brown, leathery-looking skin seemed to fit. I wound up nixing that idea to get in more about Magnamor and Doom Rider. Plus, the character really belongs to @payno, so I didn't want to tie it to my story too much. That's why I decided this story would only be mentioned later as something another character was reading. (That hasn't happened yet, if it ever does at this point.)

#6 Posted by jatoe48er (220 posts) - - Show Bio

@cbishop cool, I like the shortness. Some stories are too long and use lots of unnecessary words to describe a foot. You don't. I like.

LOL the fetish comment is a joke reference to Savage Dragon and the above dragon stone comment etc.

I think that's a really good idea linking the stories. I have done the same in the D-Man short. The kid and father is Eugene (note attendant says recently lost mother). Chapter 2 makes reference to his dad taking him to wrestling too, linking the stories either people don't care or have missed my link.

We're geniuses, or is it genii ?

#7 Posted by cbishop (8925 posts) - - Show Bio

@jatoe48er: I'm pretty danged near genius, but not quite. Genii have phenomenal cosmic power, but an itty-bitty living space...so I might qualify.

I think the linking thing is a cool idea too (obviously), but I think the attention span on the Internet (even among fellow writers) is too short to appreciate it.

#8 Edited by lykopis (10746 posts) - - Show Bio

Knowing the restrictions you placed on yourself makes both excerpts submitted to these contests even more enjoyable. I like that idea, a lot. I am going to try reading more, thanks for arranging them this way for easier access.

#9 Posted by cbishop (8925 posts) - - Show Bio

@lykopis: No problem. The not naming characters restriction went away after the two CCC's shown in this blog entry. The continuing story, although I said it went away after 5, I suppose that isn't quite right. Like I said, Heironymous is a dragon, and was supposed to be the escort mentioned in this scene. He's shown up in CCC #6 & 12, so I guess you could say the threads are still there. I'm not actively trying to insert links to this story in the CCC now though. So if you're looking for hints of that continuing story, you may be disappointed. ...I hope you enjoy the other entries though. ;)