#1 Edited by thespideyguy (2642 posts) - - Show Bio

Would you read this?

It is in my own universe and rated T

The Bug

Detective yank (looking at a dead, grotesque body): Darn shame what happened to him.

Lt. Chris: Couldn’t have happened to a nicer guy.

Detective yank: He might have been a bad guy but he was trying to make some good. Besides he had a wife and a kid.

Lt. Chris: Trying to do some GOOD! He was stealing chemicals, the wife was a prostitute and I put the kid behind bars as much as I put this guy behind bars.

Detective yank (looking horrified): You’re just mad ‘cause your fraid’ the kid won’t turn out like you did.

Lt. Chris (shoving detective yank against the wall): I told you, and only that I was from the wrong side of the tracks for a reason.

The Bug (kneeling on a building ready for action, looking down at the alley): Now put away the testosterone men and try and solve the murder.

#2 Posted by thespideyguy (2642 posts) - - Show Bio

please coment.

#3 Posted by wildvine (9696 posts) - - Show Bio

You have my interest.

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#4 Posted by thespideyguy (2642 posts) - - Show Bio

@wildvine said:

You have my interest.

thanks

#5 Posted by ChaosBlazer (3930 posts) - - Show Bio

pretty good, really short though. if you're gonna continue this, give the readers more!

#6 Posted by deadpoolrules (4683 posts) - - Show Bio

@ChaosBlazer said:

pretty good, really short though. if you're gonna continue this, give the readers more!

This and

@wildvine said:

You have my interest.

This