Splicers: The Orwell's Chapter 1

#1 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 18 days ago - Show Bio

Nexus Parental Planning Office, Hawaii. 2014.

“So you want the deluxe?” said Dr Benjamin Schultz as he looked up from the computer. The middle aged Jewish doctor was better on the business end of a microscope than dealing with clients, but when Mandy, Leilani and Jacinta had called in sick he was on the desk.

“Is there better than deluxe?” The man was excited, almost methamphetamine excited. He had good reason to be, he was Thomas Orwell “The Luckiest Man Alive”. Thomas was a nobody until three years ago. He was just one of the vast numbers that make up a population, a face in the crowd, a background player. He bought a ticket in the Super Mega Jackpot and the Millionaire Ball lotteries. And he won both! The sole winner of $924,755,200.12 after taxes; an almost instant billionaire.

Thomas was hounded by the press, everyone wanted a piece of him. So he did what any sensible person would do; he ran. He moved to the Cook Islands because no one their cared who he was and they were a tax haven. He then put all his money stupidly into a little company called In-Gen which was on the cutting edge of genetic testing and after a $900,000,000 investment saw the company boom and Thomas made even more money. He sensibly pulled out and watched as In-Gen merged with Beyond Tomorrow and eventually became Nexus, the pharmaceutical company that could make designer babies.

“If you have the money you can have whatever you like” said Dr Schultz, totally oblivious to who his client was. Dr Schultz had chemical compounds on the brain.

“Okay I want them to be sporty like Federer…no Nadal…no Connors, Connors at his peak was good…maybe Sampras with seven Wimbledon’s but Federer did five in a row…hmmm? Can you do that?”

“I don’t know who you are talking about?” replied Dr Schultz, tapping his pen on the desk

“What can’t you do is probably a better question?”

“Mr Orwell…”

“Thomas. Or Tommy”

“Mr Orwell” continued the doctor looknig over the top of his glasses “The sky is the limit. If you have the money I can design whatever you like”

“Really?” Thomas had a big smile on his face

The Animal Farm, Avarua, capital of the Cook Islands 2028

Fourteen year old Blair Orwell stood on the surface of the swimming pool. She didn’t know what to do. She’d run after her younger brother Arthur and he’d dodged away and Blair ran out onto the water like it was solid. Arthur looked at her in shock, awe and amazement

“WOW!” exclaimed Arthur

“Go. Get. Dad” said Blair petrified at the fact she was doing the impossible

“Okay” said Arthur who ran off into the mansion “DAD!”

#2 Posted by joshmightbe (19488 posts) - 11 months, 18 days ago - Show Bio

Great start

#3 Posted by AweSam (3870 posts) - 11 months, 18 days ago - Show Bio

Good job, maybe your guy can lend my guy a few... millions?

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#4 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 18 days ago - Show Bio

@joshmightbe: Thank you

@AweSam: Thanks. Sure just give me your account details and he'll wire them over from his Nigerian bank :)

#5 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (811 posts) - 11 months, 17 days ago - Show Bio

This is great! Is this a new world thing? Looking forwrd to more

#6 Posted by joshmightbe (19488 posts) - 11 months, 17 days ago - Show Bio

@tomdickharry1984: We started this the other day. Its brand new and the characters are all originals

#7 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 17 days ago - Show Bio

@tomdickharry1984: New, original stuff like @joshmightbe: said

#8 Posted by joshmightbe (19488 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

bump

#9 Posted by Project_Worm (2592 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

Really great job batkev!

#10 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

@Project_Worm: Thanks!

#11 Posted by utotheg38 (18883 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

Nice

#12 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

@utotheg38: Thanks :)

#13 Posted by The Poet (6920 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

@batkevin74: very cool

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#14 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

@The Poet: And thank you, I am up to chapter 3 if you're keen or interested :)

#15 Posted by The Poet (6920 posts) - 11 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

@batkevin74: I'm catching myself up, so I will check it out soon...

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#16 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 12 days ago - Show Bio

@The Poet: Sweet

Have a look at this

Cast an eye over this dude

#17 Posted by Joygirl (6111 posts) - 11 months, 12 days ago - Show Bio

Where is chapter two? Eh, nevermind, I'll find it.

I liked this bit so far, though I'll withhold complete judgment until I finish the entire thing. It's a very fine start, and well-written. Engaging enough for me to get a great sense of activity despite being distracted by these bedamned interwebz.

#18 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 12 days ago - Show Bio

@Joygirl: I'm up to chapter three :)

#19 Posted by csguterres (140 posts) - 11 months, 11 days ago - Show Bio

@batkevin74: Nice start, very good!

#20 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 11 days ago - Show Bio

@csguterres: Thanks, I am up to 3 chapters of this so far if you're keen/interested

#21 Posted by joshmightbe (19488 posts) - 11 months, 10 days ago - Show Bio

bump

#22 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 11 months, 10 days ago - Show Bio

@joshmightbe said:

bump

Thanks! :)

#23 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (809 posts) - 11 months, 2 days ago - Show Bio

A homage, tribute to George Orwell I take it? Quite a captivating start with especially the end with: "Fourteen year old Blair Orwell stood on the surface of the swimming pool. She didn’t know what to do. She’d run after her younger brother Arthur and he’d dodged away and Blair ran out onto the water like it was solid. Arthur looked at her in shock, awe and amazement. “WOW!” exclaimed Arthur. “Go. Get. Dad” said Blair petrified at the fact she was doing the impossible. “Okay” said Arthur who ran off into the mansion “DAD!” I may have to read more, I rate this a B- mainly due to it's over a tad too quickly (don't pay too much attention to my ranking system...I am simply some person and not an ACTUAL standard to be measured against)

#24 Posted by joshmightbe (19488 posts) - 11 months, 16 hours ago - Show Bio

bump

#25 Posted by tmacximas (625 posts) - 10 months, 27 days ago - Show Bio

In-Gen has been mentioned. the dinosaurs are not far away. :)

#26 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 10 months, 26 days ago - Show Bio

@tmacximas: That's the Jurassic Park people! I just wrote In-Gen because it sounded like what a gene splicing company should be called...and Michael Crichton beat me to it by 22 years!

#27 Edited by tmacximas (625 posts) - 10 months, 26 days ago - Show Bio

@batkevin74 said:

@tmacximas: That's the Jurassic Park people! I just wrote In-Gen because it sounded like what a gene splicing company should be called...and Michael Crichton beat me to it by 22 years!

It's still cool.

#28 Posted by CapFanboy (4210 posts) - 10 months, 25 days ago - Show Bio

*poke*

#29 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 10 months, 24 days ago - Show Bio

@CapFanboy said:

*poke*

Only been poked on Facebook before, this is new strange and may just catch on. #thismaycatchon

#30 Posted by SyIar (405 posts) - 10 months, 22 days ago - Show Bio

POKE!

Also. Great start!

#31 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 10 months, 22 days ago - Show Bio

@SyIar: Well I'm up to chapter 5 if you're keen, eager or interested

#32 Posted by SyIar (405 posts) - 10 months, 22 days ago - Show Bio

@batkevin74 said:

@SyIar: Well I'm up to chapter 5 if you're keen, eager or interested

All three, thanks.

#33 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 10 months, 21 days ago - Show Bio

@SyIar: Sweet, hopefully chapter 6 today if my plans work out :)

#34 Posted by joshmightbe (19488 posts) - 10 months, 17 days ago - Show Bio

bump

#35 Posted by ReVamp (22561 posts) - 10 months, 17 days ago - Show Bio

Interesting read.

#36 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 10 months, 17 days ago - Show Bio

@4donkeyjohnson: Thanks

@ReVamp: Thanks :)

#37 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (809 posts) - 10 months, 12 days ago - Show Bio

Bump

#38 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (811 posts) - 10 months, 4 days ago - Show Bio

bumo

#39 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 9 months, 22 days ago - Show Bio

And a casual bump, that's it :)

#40 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (811 posts) - 9 months, 13 days ago - Show Bio

Bump'd

#41 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 8 months, 18 days ago - Show Bio

And a final bump

#42 Posted by Joygirl (6111 posts) - 8 months, 18 days ago - Show Bio

@batkevin74: COFFEE.

Psycho Eyes
#43 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 4 months, 10 days ago - Show Bio

Sexy bump :)

#44 Posted by batkevin74 (5196 posts) - 1 month, 16 days ago - Show Bio

Bumped

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