#1 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

S. Inc Comics: the Ringed Skull #1

INT. lab

Michael Sooth is studying crystal radiation on Pluto.

MICHAEL:

With the power the crystals possess, it could give anyone incredible knowledge, power, or even a cure for cancer! I must go! The rocket I made should get me there.

So, Michael Sooth sets off to Pluto to gather some of the crystal radiation.

Cut to.

EXT. Apartment

Bob Wager is watching the news.

NEWS ANCHOR:

In other news, scientist Michael Sooth, owner of Sooth Inc, has went to Pluto to study the crystal radiation.

BOB WAGER:

What!?! He was always put in the spotlight instead of me!

Bob remembers back to his childhood.

BOB (narrating):

Dad liked him more when he won the science fair and I made varsity squad.

BOB (narrating):

Mom liked him more when he graduated for college and I won the state championship.

BOB:

Now he’s getting fame for going to Pluto, while I’m making 500,000 dollars a year! That’s it!

Cut to.

Alley.

One week has passed since Michael went to Pluto. He has now returned, but Bob stole a few chunks of the crystal radiation.

BOB:

Now to figure out how they work.

However, the crystals light up, and go towards Bob. They hit him

BOB:

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

Bob becomes incredibly strong.

BOB:

It must of been the crystals. Now, I can crush that worm. But, he’s smart enough he’ll turn that stuff into a weapon. I must prepare.

Meanwhile, Michael was working with the crystals. He turned it into a ring with a skull carved into it.

MICHAEL:

Incredible! I must use this power for good!

Michael makes himself a costume, and decides he will call himself, the Ringed Skull.

But, he wasn’t the onyl super-being born that day. Bob made a costume, made himself a weapon, and named himself, the Executioner.

EXECUTIONER:

I know what will get his attention! There’s no way he can stay away if I’m stealing from a bank!

One month later, Executioner is driving a car.

EXECUTIONER:

I decided to rob a bank to buy a car to steal from a bank.

He walks inside the bank.

EXECUTIONER:

Everyone, put your hands in the air! Oh, it’s Sunday. Good!

7 minutes later, Bob comes out of the bank. There’s a cop waiting for him outside.

COP:

Stop!

The cop begins to shoot. The bullets just bounce off of Executioner’s chest. Then, the Ringed Skull comes in.

RINGED SKULL:

I don’t care who you are, but you’re going to jail pal.

EXECUTIONER:

You don’t recognize me Michael?

RINGED SKULL:

How do you know who I am?

Executioner takes off his mask, revealing himself to be Bob Wager.

EXECUTIONER:

It’s your half brother, Bob!

RINGED SKULL:

That was a trick!

Ringed Skull fires an energy beam at him, but it only destroys Executioner’s shirt.

EXECUTIONER:

You can hut me, but not my clothes. Now I will hurt you, but not your clothes!

Executioner runs at Ringed Skull with a ball and chain, and hits him right in the head with it, sending Ringed Skull crashing to the ground.

RINGED SKULL:

Ow. Just, ow.

RINGED SKULL (thoughts):

The Sooth Inc nuclear reactor is just two miles away. If I can lure him there.

Ringed Skull flies up, and starts flying away.

EXECUTIONER:

No! you’re not getting away that easily!

Executioner chases Ringed Skull, until they reach the Sooth Inc. nuclear reactor.

EXECUTIONER:

I will kill you!

Executioner charges at Skull with an axe, but Skull gets out of the way and Executioner falls into the reactor.

RINGED SKULL:

He’s locked in the reactor! I hope this works!

Ringed Skull fires at the reactor, and it explodes.

Cut to

EXT. Press conference

One week has passed since Ringed Skull faced Executioner. Michael Sooth is giving a press conference on the generator exploding.

MICHAEL:

Operantly, a bird flew into the nuclear generator. As for the people in costumes, they are simply robots gone...

Michael stops for a moment.

MICHAEL:

I can’t say this. You people deserve the truth. And, the truth is, I am Ringed Skull.

the end, for now.

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#2 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

Anyone want to comment?

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#3 Posted by batkevin74 (10793 posts) - - Show Bio

@TheCannon said:

EXECUTIONER:

You can hut me, but not my clothes. Now I will hurt you, but not your clothes!

Okay that bit doesn't make sense. It's very old school in terms of, it reminds me of comics from the late 60's with the big talking, asides, inevitable betrayals by siblings etc. Just don't know why a hero would carve a ring into a skull? Good job though

#4 Posted by GR2Blackout (2564 posts) - - Show Bio

Whats "S. Inc Comics"?

#5 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74 said:

@TheCannon said:

EXECUTIONER:

You can hut me, but not my clothes. Now I will hurt you, but not your clothes!

Okay that bit doesn't make sense. It's very old school in terms of, it reminds me of comics from the late 60's with the big talking, asides, inevitable betrayals by siblings etc. Just don't know why a hero would carve a ring into a skull? Good job though

thanks.

@GR2Blackout said:

Whats "S. Inc Comics"?

Super Incorporated Comics

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#6 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

Bump. This is now part of the fan fiction group S. inc Comics.

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#7 Posted by Rusty_Irons (627 posts) - - Show Bio

I like it, might sign up.

#8 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

@tmacximas said:

I like it, might sign up.

Hope you do.

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#9 Posted by GR2Blackout (2564 posts) - - Show Bio

No offense, but the origins just too fast-paced. It doesn't have that much effort in it IMO. He just gets a crystal, turns into a ring, says he must use the power for good, and becomes a superhero. Just like that....

#10 Posted by Rusty_Irons (627 posts) - - Show Bio

I thought it was supposed to be fast and fun. Not arguing, Just the impression i got.

#11 Posted by GR2Blackout (2564 posts) - - Show Bio

@tmacximas said:

I thought it was supposed to be fast and fun. Not arguing, Just the impression i got.

Yeah, I just dont get why he would turn a crystal he found on Pluto into a ring and become a hero for no reason at all.

#12 Posted by Rusty_Irons (627 posts) - - Show Bio

@GR2Blackout said:

@tmacximas said:

I thought it was supposed to be fast and fun. Not arguing, Just the impression i got.

Yeah, I just dont get why he would turn a crystal he found on Pluto into a ring and become a hero for no reason at all.

Point taken.

#13 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

@GR2Blackout said:

No offense, but the origins just too fast-paced. It doesn't have that much effort in it IMO. He just gets a crystal, turns into a ring, says he must use the power for good, and becomes a superhero. Just like that....

Should I make a prequel explaining his childhood?

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#14 Posted by Rusty_Irons (627 posts) - - Show Bio

bump.

#15 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

@tmacximas said:

bump.

Thanks.

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#16 Posted by GR2Blackout (2564 posts) - - Show Bio

@TheCannon said:

@GR2Blackout said:

No offense, but the origins just too fast-paced. It doesn't have that much effort in it IMO. He just gets a crystal, turns into a ring, says he must use the power for good, and becomes a superhero. Just like that....

Should I make a prequel explaining his childhood?

Yes.

Also, whats up with you and the name Michael Sooth? :P

#17 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

@GR2Blackout said:

@TheCannon said:

@GR2Blackout said:

No offense, but the origins just too fast-paced. It doesn't have that much effort in it IMO. He just gets a crystal, turns into a ring, says he must use the power for good, and becomes a superhero. Just like that....

Should I make a prequel explaining his childhood?

Yes.

Also, whats up with you and the name Michael Sooth? :P

I won't because it would be boring.

It's one of my names. Michael Sooth.

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#18 Posted by batkevin74 (10793 posts) - - Show Bio

@TheCannon: Did you ever do another part for this?

#19 Posted by TheCannon (18745 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74 said:

@TheCannon: Did you ever do another part for this?

Sadly, no. I'm hoping to get one up this weekend.

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