Punisher(s) - #2 (Script)

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Page 1

Panel 1:
Show an ideal walking pathway in Central Park. A streetlight and a bench along the path. It’s daytime out.

Panel 2:
Show the bloodied corpse of a female jogger (from last issue) smash into the streetlight from off panel.

SFX: WHUD
CARNAGE(From off panel): OHHHH YEAH BABY!!

Panel 3:
Show Carnage in a crouched pose on a big field of grass.

CARNAGE: Am I the MASTER OF TRUE-BLUE HORROR DEATH or am I NOT?
CARNAGE: Don’t answer that--

Panel 4:
Show from over Carnage’s shoulder, he’s looking at a couple walking together with a baby carriage.

CARNAGE: OF COURSE I AM!!!

Page 2

Panel 1:
Show Carnage land in front of the family.

CARNAGE: OH HEY BREEDERS
CARNAGE: Got a nice lil BITE SIZED package huh?

Panel 2:
Show Carnage’s arm forming a large blade.

CARNAGE: WANNA SHARE?

Panel 3:
Show the father’s expression turn cold. The mother is screaming, but only looking like it.

MOTHER: !!!
FATHER: Cletus Kasady.

CARNAGE(From off panel): UH yeah?

Page 3

Panel 1:
Show the illusion fade, as a large white skull forms on the father’s chest, and he holds a large plasma rifle in his hands.

PUNISHER: My baby’s not bite-sized.

Panel 2:
Pan out to show Punisher shoot Carnage in the chest with the plasma rifle(it makes a laser-gun like discharge, fired as a single beam), Carnage flying back from the shot to his chest. Punisher still has his flamethrower guantlets (along with the other set merged onto it) on, and he has the flamethrower tank on his back.

SFX: CHOOM
CARNAGE: GHHRAWWW!!!
CAPTION(Punisher): Hologram creation orb. Portable, fits in your hand.
CAPTION(Punisher): Mysterio’s favorite. Plasma rifle is standard, ripped from some old Trask tech.
CAPTION(Punisher): Again. Pym particles. Life saving.

Panel 3:
Show Carnage slam onto the ground on his back.

CARNAGE: OF ALL THE @#%# TO HAPPEN on my FIRST BIG COMEBACK!

Page 4

Panel 1:
Show Carnage holding his hand out, tossing tendril darts out toward us (off panel at Frank).

CARNAGE: I’m gonna show the world wut yer REAL SKULL looks like PAL

Panel 2:
Show Frank aim the plasma rifle up and fire a blast that vaporizes the darts in mid-air.

SFX: CHOOM
PUNISHER: You killed an entire family. Several others.

Panel 3:
Show a front view of Punisher stowing away the plasma rifle with one hand (it’s shrinking in his grip and easily fitting into a belt pocket), and aiming his other hand at us(off panel at Carnage), his fist in a tight grip. The gauntlet starts to glow a low colored blue (like a fire starting).
 

PUNISHER: Go to hell.

Panel 4:
Side view. Show Carnage jumping over a LARGE blast of fire from just the one gauntlet.

SFX: FRRROOM
CARNAGE: HA MAN!
CARNAGE: You and your GUNS and yer FIRE SPITTIN WIMP MACHINES!

Page 5

Panel 1:
Show Carnage’s hand as a tendril lashes out and off panel.

SFX: PLISH

Panel 2:
Show the tendril lash around several limbs of a tree.

Panel 3:
Bird’s eye view above the two of them. Show Carnage swinging on that tendril over Punisher’s head. Punisher is looking up.

CARNAGE: I’m the ORIGINAL MURDER FIRIN GUN!
CAPTION(Punisher): Ranting idiot is fast.

Panel 4:
Show Carnage land behind Punisher.

CARNAGE: And YOU?

Panel 5:
Show Carnage bended over forward as tendrils from his back lash out toward us (off panel at Frank).

CARNAGE: YER A NOTHIN in COMPARISON!

Page 6

Panel 1:
Side view of the entire fight. Show Punisher turned to face Carnage, holding up both hands (equipped with the guantlets). The tendrils are just within reach of Punisher (just about to reach his arms).

CAPTION(Punisher): Tech from Cyclone. Punk who used to make use of the wind, could control it with a Tony Stark wannabe suit.
CAPTION(Punisher): Found tech similar from a wannabe Cyclone, in guantlets. Ripped off The Shocker.
CAPTION(Punisher): Mix it with a flamethrower.

Panel 2:
Same view. A MASSIVE sideways tornado of fire explodes out from the guantlets, enveloping the tendrils and Carnage.

SFX: FFFFFFFFFFOOMMMMM

CAPTION(Punisher): Whatever works.
PUNISHER: What I said about hell?
PUNISHER: Not joking, @#^#er.
CARNAGE: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEGRRRRRRRRRRRRAWWWW!!!!!!!!!

Panel 3:
Show Carnage in the fire tornado, his body lifted off of the ground, and spinning with the flow of the miniature tornado.

CARNAGE: GGGHHHHRRRAHHHH!!!!!!
 

Page 7

Panel 1:
Show Punisher standing there, letting the fire do its work.

AUGER(Static bubble): Frank!
PUNISHER: Go ahead.

Panel 2:
Show Carnage burning up, most of the symbiote ripped off into bits, Cletus’s mechanical legs and abdomen exposed.
 

AUGER(From off panel): You have to go! There are cops on the way in! They know you’re there and they’re moving in!
PUNISHER(from off panel): Almost done.
CARNAGE: GRRAWWWWW!!!

Panel 3:
Show several cops rushing over a pathway and onto a grass field. They’re SWAT units.

AUGER(From off panel): FRANK! That’s not an OPTION! GET OUT, NOW!!!

Panel 4:
Show Punisher’s boots moving forward on the toe.

PUNISHER(From off panel): @##%.

Page 8

Panel 1:
Show Punisher running from Cletus (who is now fully exposed without his symbiote, his metallic legs look black and charred). The entire grassy area around Cletus is burnt to nothing and a small fire outlines the area of the blast.

CAPTION(Punisher): As I turn to run, I get a peek at a certain tree. The one the freak swung from.

Panel 2:
Close up of Punisher’s hand gripping a tiny, metallic orb, and his thumb clicking an eye-shaped blue button.

SFX: BEEP
CAPTION(Punisher): I’d recognize it anywhere.
CAPTION(Punisher): We found the man tied to it, bleeding. Lisa screamed.

Panel 3:
Show a large, black dog running down the sidewalk/jogger pathway, SWAT cops ignoring it as they move in.

CAPTION(Punisher): Bullets and blood followed.

Panel 4:
Show the black dog looking at Punisher’s van. There’s a thug next to the van, trying to jack the door open with a crowbar.

CAPTION(Punisher): …

Page 9

Panel 1:
Show the thug turning around to face the black dog, which has a combat knife held in its mouth. The dog now has white markings all over its face (reminiscent of a skull).

DOG: GRRRRRR….
THUG: WHAT THE--

Panel 2:
Show Punisher in the dog’s place, jutting the knife toward the thug’s chest.

PUNISHER: Wrong van to pick.
THUG: HOLY @#^#@!!!!!!

Panel 3:
Show Punisher delve the knife into the thug’s chest, twisting it slightly.

SFX: CHKK
THUG: GHHAWHH!!!
PUNISHER: Shut it. Random jacking or did someone--

Panel 4:
Show Punisher’s point of view. Over the hood of van is an alleyway, there’s another thug looking out from it wide-eyed.

CAPTION(Punisher): Random jacking, alright.

Panel 5:
Close up of the knife being ripped out of the thug’s chest.

SFX: CHUKK
THUG(From off panel – small text): Ngh…

Page 10

Panel 1:
Show Punisher shoving a syringe into the dead thug’s head.

CAPTION(Punisher): So many SWAT near, can’t risk the van being compromised.
CAPTION(Punisher): Only so many Pym Particles left. What a waste.

Panel 2:
Show the thug’s body shrink along with his clothes, right in front of the tire of the van, which seems massive by comparison.

Panel 3:
Show Punisher’s boot slam down onto the view from panel 2.

SFX: SQSHH
CAPTION(Punisher): Now, for the look out.

Panel 4:
View from the inside of an alley. The thug is running down it, Punisher is running into the alley behind him.

LOOKOUT THUG: AGH—AGH--!!

Page 11

Panel 1:
Close up of Punisher’s hand reaching into a holster.

Panel 2:
Pan out to Punisher chasing after the thug and aiming his arm up, the gun fires off two shots, the casings fly out. The thug is hit in the shoulder, blood exploding out slightly.

SFX: BLAM
SFX: BLAM
LOOKOUT THUG: AGHH!!

Panel 3:
Show the thug fall down into the ground.

LOOKOUT THUG: NGH--!!

Panel 4:
Show the thug’s head, the pistol put to the back of it.

SFX: CLKC
PUNISHER(From off panel): Really wanted a van that badly?

Page 12

Panel 1:
Show the thug’s face as he turns around, the pistol aimed right at him.

LOOKOUT THUG: WAIT WAIT WAIT--
LOOKOUT THUG: I KNOW WHERE THE HOOD IS!!!

Panel 2:
Show Punisher raising an eyebrow.

CAPTION(Punisher): The undying impulse to pull the trigger lessens. Slightly.
PUNISHER: Start talking.

Panel 3:
Side view. Punisher leaning down on the thug, putting the pistol up against his nose.

PUNISHER: Why were you trying to break into my van?
LOOKOUT THUG: WAIT WAIT, WHAT?! HE WAS TRYIN TO--
LOOKOUT THUG: LISTEN—HE WASN’T S’POSED TO!
PUNISHER: Really?

Panel 4:
The thug’s eyes, tears flowing down.

LOOKOUT THUG: YES! REALLY! WE WERE JUST S’POSED TO MEET YOU AND TELL YOU WHERE THE HOOD WAS!!

Page 13

Panel 1:
Close up of Punisher’s skull symbol on his chest.

PUNISHER: THEN WHERE IS HE?

Panel 2:
Side view. The thug’s lower half of his face as he screams out.

LOOKOUT THUG: HE’S AT “THE BAR WITH NO NAME” MAN! THEY GOT A NEW LOCATION!

Panel 3:
Show Punisher’s hand wrap around the thug’s throat.

PUNISHER: Where?

Panel 4:
Show the thug’s face, he’s getting red.

LOOKOUT THUG: TH-THE DOCKS—NEAR THE DOCKS—
LOOKOUT THUG: R-RIGHT NEXT TO—GHK—THE MAGGIA’S—CHHK—shipping…
LOOKOUT THUG: --zone…cargo….gkkk…(small text)

Page 14

Panel 1:
Side view. Punisher standing over the thug, aiming his pistol down at his head.

PUNISHER: Good.

Panel 2:
Close up of the barrel of the gun, front view, firing at us.

SFX: BLAM

Panel 3:
Show the darkness of the alley, Punisher’s white skull symbol glistening and shining as he walks out into the light.

Page 15

Panel 1:
Show a large, abandoned apartment complex.

CAPTION: THE BRONX

Panel 2:
Show a black gloved hand gripping a crowbar.

Panel 3:
Show a small apartment, obviously abandoned. Decrepit.

Page 16

Panel 1:
Show the apartment again, just now have the door ripped open and thrust inside by a crowbar.

SFX: CRKSHH

Panel 2:
Show a tall and muscular (about as muscular as Punisher) shadowed figure walk inside.

Panel 3:
Show the figure’s POV, and the inside of the apartment. There’s a large, fleshy cocoon attached to a wall.

Page 17

Panel 1:
Close up of the end of the crowbar, being shoved into fleshy muck.

SFX: GHHSHHKKT

Panel 2:
Pan out to show the shadowed figure pulling back, trying to pry the cocoon off of the wall.

FIGURE: NGH….

Panel 3:
Show the fleshy cocoon drop to the ground, leaking disgusting bile and fluids everywhere.

SFX: SPLORT

Page 18

BIG IMAGE:
Show the figure jamming the crowbar into the center of the fleshy mass.

FIGURE: Come on out…

Page 19

Panel 1:
Show a deformed hand with no skin and only muscle reaching out, there are claws made of fingernail on the ends, and ripping up out of the palm and top of the hand randomly.

SFX: CHKK

Panel 2:
Show the figure’s hand grabbing the freakish hand, and pulling back, revealing a disgusting arm, also with no skin, and muscle tissue, and fingernail and bone claws forming randomly.

FIGURE: Welcome back to Earth, Freak.

Panel 3:
Pan out, show an entire humanoid body ripped out of the fleshy mass, laying at the figure’s feet.

FIGURE: Osborn’s experiments really did do a number on you. Reset your whole internal “Death count”, huh?

Page 20

Panel 1:
HALF PAGE IMAGE: Close up of an eye, without an eye lid. The pupil is dialated.

Panel 2:
HALF PAGE IMAGE: Same view, but the pupil has moved and is normal.

FREAK: Whh…. Hhh….hh…

Page 21

Panel 1:
Show the face of the figure. Caucasian, rough features, bald, brown eyes. A smile not unlike the one that main character from “A Clockwork Orange” would give. His face has a few scars, but nothing that’s far too distinguishing. Five o’clock shadow.

FIGURE: Hi. My name’s SLAUGHTER.

Panel 2:
Show Freak’s face. A total contrast. It’s half muscle tissue and half skeletal structure.

FREAK: Hhh…nnn….hhh…whhhh……whoo…..oooo….
FREAK: Wh…whoo….oooo….?

Panel 3:
Side view. The black glove holds Freak’s chin like a parent trying to address a child.

FREAK: y…you….
FREAK: Whhhh…ooo….mmmmmmmmm…..
FREAK: eee….

Page 22

Panel 1:
Side view. Slaughter putting his face in front of Freak’s. There’s a noticeable yellow bile dripping from Freak’s mouth.

SLAUGHTER: Your name is Freak.

Panel 2:
Show Slaughter’s black gloved hand reaching into a pocket.

Panel 3:
Show Slaughter’s hand pull out, holding the blank side of a picture.

Panel 4:
View from behind Slaughter’s shoulder (Slaughter is visibly wearing a black leather jacket in this view, earlier he’s mostly shadowed).

Page 23

BIG IMAGE:
Front view of Slaughter, holding up a picture of The Punisher. Slaughter is giving a grave expression.

SLAUGHTER: This is Frank Castle. The Punisher.
SLAUGHTER: He killed you. Now you’re gonna….
FREAK(From off panel): Kkk….kkkkkk….
SLAUGHTER: Say it.
FREAK: Kkkkkiiiillllll…..Fffrrannkk….Cccasstle….?
SLAUGHTER: Good boy. 

 
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Disclaimer: I don't own any characters in this script (Slaughter and Auger excluded), and I am not making any profit off of their use.  

 
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#1  Edited By Deranged Midget

Brilliant writing, brilliant story progression, and it feels so natural with the way you portray each character. I'm very impressed! I'm dying to read the next issue!

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@Deranged Midget said:

Brilliant writing, brilliant story progression, and it feels so natural with the way you portray each character. I'm very impressed! I'm dying to read the next issue!

Thanks a ton!!! :D 
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#3  Edited By FadeToBlackBolt

Awesome again, mate. Probably my favourite issue of any comic you've written so far actually. The way you incorporate the more realistic Punisher's mindset into the Marvel Universe Punisher's environment is really great. Solid cliffhanger ending as well, all in all, fantastic effort once again ^_^

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@FadeToBlackBolt said:
Awesome again, mate. Probably my favourite issue of any comic you've written so far actually. The way you incorporate the more realistic Punisher's mindset into the Marvel Universe Punisher's environment is really great. Solid cliffhanger ending as well, all in all, fantastic effort once again ^_^
Thanks so much! :D 
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1. Nice Job!
2. Yay you used Freak. Awesome. 
3. Great job with Carnage but you're missing one crucial ingredient in his dialogue:
  

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@venomoushatred1001 said:
1. Nice Job!
2. Yay you used Freak. Awesome. 
3. Great job with Carnage but you're missing one crucial ingredient in his dialogue:
  
  1. Thanks! :D
  2. I like him. He has potential. 
  3. That seems to be TAS exclusive, because I've read a lot of Carnage, and he doesn't do that in the comics. :)