#1 Edited by TheManInTheShoe (3878 posts) - - Show Bio

Chapter 2: Friendly advice

Years ago

"Before you are a leader, success is all about growing yourself. When you become a leader, success is all about growing others." That ironic sentence rang in Hank Pym's ears.

"Where do I know that from? Oh, right. Jack Welch. How do I know that?"

Just the day before, Pym had unleashed something into the world that he does not understand yet, a dangerous AI named Ultron that claims to be his artificial son. When Pym refused to help Ultron, he defeated the tired Pym without hesitation, so now he had to grow. He took it literally. He's now known as Giant-Man, while maintaining his other ego as Ant-Man.

"Faster." he screamed into his helmet, the words transformed into a strange buzzing and the ants sped on. At microscopic size he traveled with a small army of insects in Manhattan during rush hour. People took no notice, just like he wanted.

A few blocks away, in the laboratory of Dr. Vernon Van Dyne, a young woman named Janet just got back from her afternoon shopping.

"Dad?" she repeated but could not find her father anywhere. The young lady could easily be mistaken for a brat in her Gucci clothing and with her Louis Vuitton handbag only looking for her dad so that he can raise her allowance, but a way more mature woman was buried deep beneath. In fact, she only maintained this facade so that she could look for her real purpose in life.

"Dad! I'm back from shopping. You couldn't believe the traffic today. What was it that they said? Oh right, I think your weird bug friend found a way to reverse his Pym Particles into borrowing mass instead of... I mean he found a way to grow instead of shrink."

"I'm not weird." a voice behind her said. Surprised, she turned around to find Dr. Hank Pym standing at the other side of the lab, with ants around his legs about to depart to places unknown and with his helmet under his arm. He looked at the young woman with a smug face.

"Oh, I'm so sorry, Dr. Pym. I didn't mean to--"

"No worries... Janet is it? I don't think we've met."

"No. No, we haven't." She said blushing.

"Dr. Pym. What gives me the honor of seeing you here, without calling first?" a smiling Vernon Van Dyne said. He walked towards several of the weird machines he had in his lab.

"Sorry for the intrusion, my friend. But something has happened. You remember the Dragon Man body you lent me?"

"Yes. Eh, Janet, please, this is between us." he said looking at his daughter.

With a frown face she slowly walked away even though she could be to more help than the others realized.

"Go on." Vernon said to Pym.

"Well, in order to see what was wrong with it, I created a second body that I based on Dragon Man in order to move the lifeforce-energy to the new body. But something went wrong, very wrong. The body came to life, calling me his father and attacking me when I didn't want to cause genocide against the human race. I don't know where he is or what he's capable of."

Vernon was trying to melt all the information.

"What will you do?" he asked.

"That's why I came here. To ask for advice."

"What if... what if you would fight AI against AI. I know it sounds weird but..."

"Wait... I know exactly what I should do. Thank you, Vernon!" Pym shouted and ran up to Vernon, shook is hand and shrunk.

Vernon stayed by his machines and looked surprised.

"It will take some time, but it'll work." Pym thought as he called for his ants.

To be continued in Avengers AI and the return of Janet Van Dyne in the next issue of Hank Pym

#3 Posted by ImpurestCheese (5200 posts) - - Show Bio

@themanintheshoe: And thus another Avengers team is born...manufactured? Can't wait to see who will be joining. Another solid chapter and a great addition to the Mayhem verse.

#4 Posted by TheManInTheShoe (3878 posts) - - Show Bio

@themanintheshoe: And thus another Avengers team is born...manufactured? Can't wait to see who will be joining. Another solid chapter and a great addition to the Mayhem verse.

Many thanks

#5 Edited by ekrolo (434 posts) - - Show Bio

The idea of a robot Avengers team sounds pretty cool but after Ultron Im not sure anyone would risk making a whole team of machines like him. Especially by Hank Pym.

#6 Posted by TheManInTheShoe (3878 posts) - - Show Bio

@ekrolo: Well, it's a way to introduce the team, and he won't create the androids, he will only gather them.

#7 Posted by TommytheHitman (3228 posts) - - Show Bio

Awesome job re imagining Hank Pym's origin! Which is what annoys me is how in Avengers 2 he won't be making Ultron. STOP GIVING EVERYTHING TO TONY STARK! LET OTHER HEROES HAVE THE SPOTLIGHT DAMNIT!

#8 Posted by TheManInTheShoe (3878 posts) - - Show Bio

Awesome job re imagining Hank Pym's origin! Which is what annoys me is how in Avengers 2 he won't be making Ultron. STOP GIVING EVERYTHING TO TONY STARK! LET OTHER HEROES HAVE THE SPOTLIGHT DAMNIT!

#9 Posted by jatoe48er (220 posts) - - Show Bio

Good job and I'm interested to see where you are going with this and how the AAI is going to workout.

#10 Posted by batkevin74 (10868 posts) - - Show Bio

@themanintheshoe: A little short. Now this bit : "Vernon was trying to melt all the information." doesn't make any sense

Also you need to work a bit on your dialog because the exchange below, I don't know who is saying what, or how they're saying it?

"What will you do?" he asked.

"That's why I came here. To ask for advice."

"What if... what if you would fight AI against AI. I know it sounds weird but..."

#11 Posted by TheManInTheShoe (3878 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74: Yeah, to me the dialogue is the hardest part. But that's why I'm here, to train my abilities. The reason it's so short is because I don't know the ideal length, if there is one. English is my second language, I'd like to think that I'm good at it. Actually, I know I'm good at it. But sometimes languages collide. My first language is swedish, in Sweden melting information is a normal expression. Sorry if I made a reasonable mistake that is reasonable to me. And I'm sorry if this feels like an attack but I'm trying to be defencive.

#12 Posted by batkevin74 (10868 posts) - - Show Bio

@themanintheshoe: Well you speak two languages, I only speak English, so you're doing okay in the linguistics department :)

Length of stories are totally up to the writer, but I felt this chapter was short.

As for the melting, well first I've ever heard of it. It may be common in Sweden but it doesn't read right. I'm Australian and I try to write Trans-Atlantically which is US-English. Because a lot of Australian sayings either baffle, confuse or read weirdly to non-Australians. And don't think I was ripping into you (see that's Australian, means have a go, attack etc) I was merely just pointing out things that to me, didn't work.

This comes via an online translator so it may be wrong but here goes: Förvara upp det bra arbetet :)

#13 Posted by ImpurestCheese (5200 posts) - - Show Bio

@themanintheshoe: To be honest I never noticed. And there are plenty of people who are English or use the language as a first language who write at a much poorer quality then you. :-)

#14 Posted by TheManInTheShoe (3878 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74 said:

This comes via an online translator so it may be wrong but here goes: Förvara upp det bra arbetet :)

haha. Almost correct. "Fortsätt med det goda arbetet". I'm hope I didn't come off angry in the comment.

#15 Posted by batkevin74 (10868 posts) - - Show Bio
#16 Posted by Rabbitearsblog (5893 posts) - - Show Bio

Awesome chapter!! I can't wait to see Janet join the team!

#17 Posted by batkevin74 (10868 posts) - - Show Bio

Bumped