#1 Edited by MaccyD (5475 posts) - - Show Bio

A bearded man….a flash…and then…nothing.

That dream was getting common now. Too common for Doom’s liking. Normally he would not have believed in such things as important, but lately it has started to become troubling for Doom. Along with dreams of knights, magic and kings, Doom couldn’t remember the last time he slept easy. The seemingly realism of it all is what worried him the most. His thoughts were interrupted by a mechanical voice.

“Lord Doom, your next appointment is a meeting with Reed Richards and Sue Storm at 9am. Current time is 7:30am.”

Doom growled under his breath. Richards always got on his nerve. He always found Richards to be untrustworthy, ever since college. Nonetheless, he needed to work with him. The U.N already distrust him enough and on the plus side, it may stop their constant interference for a while. He equipped his family’s traditional armour, generations old and swung his cloak in an arc onto his shoulders. Of course, a man like Doom does not dwell on the past alone. The armour also doubles as one of the most powerful pieces of technology on the planet.

Richards tapped his fingers nervously on the table. Doom always took his time, it’s a good excuse for Doom to make out how busy he is at governmental matters. A dramatic entrance was to be expected.

“Reed, could I ask a favour, before the meeting begins? You know…outside of business?”

Reed suddenly got alert, he had completely forgotten about Sue Storm, the American ambassador in Latveria, was also waiting for Doom.

“Yes…yeah, sure, go ahead. Sorry, I must of blanked out.” Reed said dazedly, his hand signalling for her to continue.

“Okay, I know it’s a lot to ask, but you know my brother Johnny? He’s doing an engineering course in Doomstadt University and…he needs an apprenticeship. You can guess what I’m hinting at. I know you work on governmental projects but I didn't know who else to ask, maybe have him work on lesser work or…”

“No, no it’s okay. I’ll take him on. Need some company anyway” he smiled.

“What about Doom? Doesn't he work with…never mind” she remembered what kind of person she was talking about.

“Doom is… I don’t what to say, to be honest. Wait, isn't this the Johnny who…”

His sentence was cut short as the doors were slammed open by several Doombots.

“His lord, highness, the great and powerful Lord Victor Von Doom approaches!”

Doom himself marched in, cloak flowing and with a determined pace. He sat himself down and began the meeting.

“I apologise for my lateness but I had to solve a dispute with a neighbouring country. Beyond your expertise, of course. Now then, Sue, your government wishes to hear the progress of the project, I gather?”

“Yes, well as the first joint project between U.S and Latveria, you can imagine my superiors’ eagerness for information.” Sue replied clearly and concise, well trained in the diplomatic art.

“We're nearly finished you can assure them, Project…what did you Americans call it?” Doom questioned as he glanced at Sue and Reed.

Reed joined the conversation, quiet until now.

“Storm chaser. After the show on TV. As Doom said we should have a ship capable of observing and researching the cosmic storm in the correct fashion within a few weeks at most. Current spacecraft simply isn't equipped for such a specialized job and we need the extra time. We believe this cosmic storm contains energy, particles, rays and who knows what, previously unknown to science. This new information could progress physics, medicine and general science by a decade. It could even lead to new energy sources.”

“You can understand their concerns, Reed, you are already over budget and they want results…and soon.” Sue said, worried for Reed’s sake. She had become to become friendly with Reed in her short time in Latveria.

“Well money isn't one of my strong points, but the results should more than cover the cost.” Reed explained.

“The results…that brings me to my next point… I have been requested to ask will this project have military applications?” Sue questioned in a business-like manner, trying to indicate this wasn't her decision.

Reed paused for a minute or two.

“Yes….it may have weapon applications among other possible military uses.” Reed spoke as if the words had a bad taste.

The pause afterwards was interrupted by Doom.

“Richards seem well versed in reporting to his superiors. I don't need to explain myself and my time is valuable. I have a country to run and research to complete.”

Doom stormed out of the room with Doombots in tow, leaving Reed and Sue alone.

“The joy of being a diplomat to Doom…” Sue sarcastically broke the silence left by Doom.

“You're not the one who has to work with him.” Reed quipped.

They had a short chuckle.

“Don’t forget to Email some of the research to back home, should get the bureaucrats off your back for a while. One last point before you get back to work. I’ve been requested to go onboard during the storm to supervise.” Sue spoke as if quoting a to-do list.

“Wh..why?” Reed replied, obviously unsure of the bureaucrats’ reasoning.

“Simply put they don't trust you Reed. Your past record has shown you to be reckless with government resources. They don’t want their money to lost over, and I quote: ‘Reed’s constant quest for knowledge, no matter the cost’. “

Reed remained quiet and after a few minutes, Sue began to leave the room but stopped before the door.

“Oh and Johnny will begin tomorrow if that’s okay with you?” she asked, finding it awkward to break Reed’s brooding.

“…Sure…” Reed murmured, his concentration lost.

“Thanks Reed, it means a lot.” though she knew his mind was elsewhere, she still felt the need to vent off her gratefulness for Reed.

She left Reed alone with his thoughts. He asked himself about his life and decisions, but even he couldn't answer them all.

Meanwhile, a cosmic storm was brewing.

#2 Posted by MaccyD (5475 posts) - - Show Bio

What do others think? I accept any feedback good or bad.

Also I've been told to use this to get officially accepted into Marvel Mayhem? It would be nice to get response from the decision-makers of Marvel Mayhem, thanks for your time.

#3 Edited by ImpurestCheese (7189 posts) - - Show Bio

@maccyd: We are doomed. Oh no.:-) Good start but then I always say that. Never been that interested in the FF but fan fiction is always different to the real thing. Just keep up the good work and I look forward to seeing more.

BTW check out the Doom reference mentioned by the Dreadknight in Issue 9 of Jester's 11 I hope it helps in some way or fashion.

#4 Posted by Monarch_Chronicle (916 posts) - - Show Bio

@maccyd: Intersting, I am unsure about ur doom and reed but I suppose I am simply used reading an older Mr. Richards

Intersting and am looking forward to how you show the governments involvement, surely they might want to stake claim in the 'new status' of the crew after the storm

Good Job

#5 Posted by MaccyD (5475 posts) - - Show Bio
#6 Posted by ImpurestCheese (7189 posts) - - Show Bio

@maccyd: Comment on some of their work. That usually draws them in. Also what did you think of Dreadknight's view of Doom in J11 #9? Hope you get more comments. :-)

#7 Edited by jatoe48er (225 posts) - - Show Bio

@maccyd: no trouble at all. Good work. I'm a FF fan and looks like its in good hands. You've put your own twist on the characters and i like that. Reed is a hard one to write. Good job, more please!

#8 Posted by MaccyD (5475 posts) - - Show Bio

@impurestcheese: Thanks :) I don't know what to comment most of the time though :P I liked Dreadknight's view of Doom. One of the themes I plan to touch upon is Doom's past and this further shows that Doom has been making the "big" choices long before the FF. He's a man who goes to extremes to do what he thinks is right and sometimes they can interpreted as atrocities, for example, Dreadknight. I may have went too detailed... :P

#9 Edited by MaccyD (5475 posts) - - Show Bio

#2 is out now! Get it now while it's hot off the digital forum-presses!

#10 Posted by wildvine (10425 posts) - - Show Bio


This was good. I like that you took it back to origin. And your Doom was spot on.

#11 Posted by Rabbitearsblog (6484 posts) - - Show Bio

This was a really good chapter! Is this when Reed, Sue and Dr. Doom first met each other?

#12 Posted by MaccyD (5475 posts) - - Show Bio
#13 Edited by batkevin74 (12145 posts) - - Show Bio


Is this in Latveria or New York? I'm a little confused on the setting.

Doom and his worries are very good.

Interesting change on Sue Storm being a diplomat, it does fit her personality and her role in the FF.

Curious as so far there is no mention of powers, so my guess is that is still to come. And it sorta fits with my Doom ref in MMU: Spider-Man #1 http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic-8/marvel-mayhem-spider-man-1-1475121/

Good work, sorry I left it so long

#14 Posted by MaccyD (5475 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74: It's Latveria, I even have Johnny studying in Doomstadt Uni :P Also it's in the MMU's past so continuity with other MMU stories doesn't clash too much.

#15 Posted by batkevin74 (12145 posts) - - Show Bio

Bumped as I catch up