#1 Posted by Project_Worm (3341 posts) - - Show Bio

This is just a short intro to my Iron Age character.  I'm not to good with condensing alot of information so hopefully the story itself will be better... Hope you enjoy, and please tell me what you think. 
 
My name is Jack Payden and I live in a world consumed by corruption. You can ask a thousand people and 98% percent of the time they will not hesitate to tell you that the fall of humanity began with the death of Tony Stark. And although I may like most, want to believe that within time things will sort themselves out. The Iron Army has held America in their grip for decades, and I for one do not see that changing anytime soon. Not without people determined to change it at least. The people of this time have seemed to lose their spine, they are all completely content with surviving, and I am tired of it... Although I suppose I cannot blame them. I may have been against leaving the worlds safety up to the Iron Army, but it was not because I from the beginning saw the dangers of these... machines. No, my reason for hating the new regime was a much more selfish one. I hated it because Jar heads like myself were left with out a job. We were left without purpose, and what is life without purpose. Look at me... I talk real big, but what am I actually doing? Nothing, absolutely nothing, hell I'm part of the damn problem. After being "honorably discharged" from the military I became so desperate for work that I am now actually working on the maintenance staff at  Ferrum Tech. Yes... I actually fix the machines which I have come to hate with every fiber of my being. I may not be able to save the world, but someone has to do something. Why can't it be me? This world needs to change, and if I can help it, It will. Whoever it is who is responsible for forcing earth into the darkness, forcing the world into this... Age of Sorrow. Must be... Punished

#2 Posted by AweSam (7373 posts) - - Show Bio

That's so sick! Nice job. I love the last part.

#3 Posted by batkevin74 (10416 posts) - - Show Bio

"The Age of Sorrow must be punished!" I look forward to seeing Jack Payden loosing his $#!+

#4 Edited by Project_Worm (3341 posts) - - Show Bio
@AweSam:  @batkevin74
Thanks guys I REALLY appreciate it.
#5 Posted by Time_Phantom (522 posts) - - Show Bio

I like this it has... weight.

#6 Posted by joshmightbe (24677 posts) - - Show Bio

It's a great prologue I'll be looking forward to the story

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#7 Posted by Jonny_Anonymous (32827 posts) - - Show Bio

Good stuff man, cant wait to see where it goes 

#8 Posted by joshmightbe (24677 posts) - - Show Bio

is their any connection between this Punisher and Frank Castle?

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#9 Posted by Project_Worm (3341 posts) - - Show Bio
@Time_Phantom@spiderbat87:  
Thanks guys. 
 
@joshmightbe:  
I though about it at first but, Frank never came off as one to have any more kids so no Jack has no connection with him.
#10 Posted by joshmightbe (24677 posts) - - Show Bio

@Project_Worm: I was thinking more along the lines of inspiration, like maybe he finds Frank's War Journal or maybe hears some stories about him or something but it's ok if he doesn't have any connection at all I was just curious

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#11 Posted by Project_Worm (3341 posts) - - Show Bio
@joshmightbe:  
Oh well, I mean he's definitely going to know who the Punisher was. But I had just figured that alot of people knew who he was, especially people in the military...
#12 Posted by joshmightbe (24677 posts) - - Show Bio

@Project_Worm: It's no big deal to me I was just wondering

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#13 Posted by desperado_ (314 posts) - - Show Bio

Nice job! I like the irony of having to repair and fix the very things he wants broken.

Awesome!

#14 Posted by The Impersonator (5049 posts) - - Show Bio

Nice chapter!

#15 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (834 posts) - - Show Bio

Welcome back Fr...Jack!

#16 Posted by batkevin74 (10416 posts) - - Show Bio

@Project_Worm: So will we be seeing Iron Age punny bunny any time soon?

#17 Posted by batkevin74 (10416 posts) - - Show Bio

@Project_Worm: Any Punisher action?

#18 Posted by Project_Worm (3341 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74: It'll come I'm just so busy, I'm literally writing like six things right now and I can't focus enough to make them "good enough".

#19 Posted by batkevin74 (10416 posts) - - Show Bio

@Project_Worm: Didn't mean tp push or rush you, was curious...have been since his initial proposal. I get the multi-writing thing, bit hard to juggle stuff and remembering which goes where at what time in which story! :) I shall be patient

#20 Posted by Project_Worm (3341 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74: Nah, It's my bad didn't mean to come off sounding angry, if I did. I'm probably just frustrated with the fact that i can't get it done...

#21 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (1630 posts) - - Show Bio

Very good, just saw part 3 up and am catching up!

#22 Posted by batkevin74 (10416 posts) - - Show Bio

Bumped at @cbishop (I think you have this already, but just in case)

#23 Edited by cbishop (7110 posts) - - Show Bio