#1 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

Lancaster County, Pennsylvania

Nicholas hated this part of his job, but it was his job. Rounding up people seemed wrong but orders were orders and his squad had been sent out here to the wilderness to root out a Spider Cell operating amongst the Amish people. The Amish were a bunch of backwards technophobes who were living in a time before electricity, holo-phones and I-dent cards, bunch of savages really. Nicholas broke down the door of the house, entered and found a middle aged woman and her just teenaged son standing in the kitchen.

“Ma’am you’re going to have to come with me” he said politely

‘So you can kill us!” yelled the boy whipping out a knife, waving it about

Nicholas brought his repulsors up, the woman stood between the two of them

“Jacob!” she snapped “Go to your room!”

“Ma’am he can’t leave” Nicholas explained

“This is between you and me, not my boy” she said as Jacob slinked away, glaring Nicholas

“This way please” he beckoned her towards the door

“You’re going to kill me” she stated

“No ma’am we just need to ask you some questions”

She simply removed the glove her left hand and pointed it towards him; a spider tattoo on her palm and fingers “Does this answer your questions?”

“Outside please ma’am”

“No!”

“Ma’am under the authority of the Supreme Commander...”

“Why do you hate us?” she asked

“You’re a spider” replied Nicholas bluntly “We shall not suffer a spider to live”

“Why?”

Nicholas paused, he’d never actually thought about it

“Why shall you not suffer a spider to live?” there was tone in her voice, but not anger

“Because you’re poisonous”

“Spider’s are venomous boy” she corrected ‘Have you ever asked; why is this law in place? Do I honestly look like a threat?”

“No ma’am but the law is the law”

“Slavery use to be the law. Compulsory going to church on Sunday use to be the law. Thou shalt not...”

“That’s different” said Nicholas dismissively

“How?”

“Ummmm I don’t know but it’s different”

“You are just a tool of an evil empire. You just follow orders”

“Now hang on...”

“No you hang on!” she snapped stepping towards him, waggling her finger in his face “You stormed MY property, kicked down MY door, are rounding up MY friends and family and are going to take ME outside to EXECUTE me and you believe YOU’RE not evil!?! Wake up silly child!”

Nicholas paused looking at the woman in front of him, seeing her as a person and not as a thing or an it

Sergeant Ermey marched into the house “What’s the holdup Rogers” he barked

“Nothing sir”

Sergeant Ermy smacked the woman in the mouth with the rifle butt then again in the stomach, sending her crashing to the floor

“Don’t listen to them Rogers. They’re poisonous”

“Venomous sir” Nicholas felt dirty, wrong

“That too!” The Sergeant grabbed her by the hair and started to drag her by the hair outside “Anyone else in here?”

“Sir no sir!” he lied, unsure of why

Nicholas flipped up his visor and watched as she was thrown to the ground. Her eyes caught his and didn’t drop away. Sergeant Ermy read out the standard execution protocol and then blew her brains out the side of her head. She hit the floor, her now dead eyes still firmly locked onto Nicholas Rogers who turned and vomited, holding onto the door frame for support

“You okay?” asked Private 1 Class Jackson Barnes

“I’m fine” replied Nicholas to his old Academy friend

“Suck it up Corporal!” barked the Sergeant “For we are Pennsylvania Iron Pigs!”

“Hoo-Rah!” responded the group of twenty soldiers

I CAN’T HEAR YOU IRON PIGS!”

“HOO-RAH!”

Nicholas still felt sick, sick that he was cheering like some caveman as the bodies of people lay no more than thirty feet away, bleeding into the grass

"This is wrong" muttered Nicholas

#2 Posted by PrinceIMC (5422 posts) - - Show Bio

Heh, still Amish which is good. Even more out of time.

#3 Posted by joshmightbe (24800 posts) - - Show Bio

Great chapter, I like that he doesn't start as a hero

#4 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (837 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74: Why is that Sergeant's name familiar???

Anyways good chapter, I like it!

@PrinceIMC: Spider-Amish, Spider-Amish! Does whatever the Spider-Amish do. Build a barn, not use a phone. Lookout its Spider-Amish! :)

#5 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

@tomdickharry1984: It's the last name of R Ermey, the real life drill sergeant from Full Metal Jacket. He's based on him

#6 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (837 posts) - - Show Bio

Right right right

#7 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

Bump!

#8 Posted by RedRobinTimDrake (145 posts) - - Show Bio

jackson barnes? is it a descendant of james barnes or kown as bucky barnes

#9 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

@RedRobinTimDrake: No just a homage. Jackson Barnes is a black guy who has a coincidental name

#10 Posted by TheCannon (19568 posts) - - Show Bio

I thought I commented before. But, I will now. Love it! This, and all the other Corporal Americas. Can't wait for Part 9.

#11 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

@TheCannon: More Corporal America action in Fantastic Force :)

#12 Posted by htb106 (1641 posts) - - Show Bio

very good.

#13 Posted by TheCannon (19568 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74 said:

@TheCannon: More Corporal America action in Fantastic Force :)

Woo hoo!

#14 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

@htb106: Thanks for reading

#15 Posted by htb106 (1641 posts) - - Show Bio

bump!

#16 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

@htb106: Thanks for the bump

Cast a casual glance and comment over this when you're able

#17 Posted by primepower53 (5591 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74: awww...she died...

man, that was depressing...but that's the mark of a good writer. You're able to leave me feeling emotionally attached to a character in this chapter

Though the name Iron Pigs sounds kind of corny, and the first sentence doesn't make sense to me, but past that, this is a very well written chapter!

#18 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

@primepower53: Well the Iron Pigs is actually the name of a sports team from Pennsylvania which I used. But thanks for reading, I like that spider-lady's death meant something, which is what I was trying to achieve for both the reader and Nicholas

#19 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (837 posts) - - Show Bio

Havent seen any new stuff of C.A?

#20 Posted by joshmightbe (24800 posts) - - Show Bio

@tomdickharry1984: He's been in Fantastic Force

#21 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (1734 posts) - - Show Bio

Killing Amish people! What a bunch of jackbooted cretins! :P Good work, little sad especially when you killed her. And well done on knowing there IS a difference between VENOM & POISON! Good read, I must get back into my Iron Age quest, I have sadly lagged behind in reading

#22 Posted by TheCannon (19568 posts) - - Show Bio

I still love this series, no matter how many times I read it.

#23 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio
#24 Posted by Guardiandevil83 (6379 posts) - - Show Bio

This is damn good

#25 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio
#26 Posted by batkevin74 (11276 posts) - - Show Bio

Where he began :) My how you've grown Nicholas

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#27 Posted by TommytheHitman (3557 posts) - - Show Bio

Bump for awesome!

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