#1 Edited by Comiccrazeraze (427 posts) - - Show Bio

Just in case you want to read the others: (Part one) http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/knights-of-the-metal-table-part-one/676982/#8 (Part two) http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/knights-of-the-metal-table-part-two/677244/#5, (part three) http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/knights-of-the-metal-table-part-three/677431/#3

(The camera shows a scene of utter chaos as we see the four Metalli corvis, locked in combat with the mechanical dragons, made by HYDRA.)

(The camera zooms on Howard, in his golden armor, on top of one of the dragon's head wailing away at an eye ball. He is soon shook off, then swallowed whole.)

Anthony: Dad!! ( He shot smoke into the dragon's face , throwing it off.) James, Dimitri! Cover me! (two acknowledgment lights blink on.)

(The camera looks at Dimitri as he flies towards the now unengaged dragon, he quickly swirls around digging Vermiculus terrore into the side of the metal dragon, making long deep grooves. Oil coats him as it roars in pain and falls to the ground.)

Dimitri:Armor, reroute power, ninety five percent to jets, (He dives, his body perpendicular, with Vermiculus terrore extended before him. He spears through the dragons head, stopping right before he hit the ground.)

James: Masterfully done Dimitri! (He says firing his two shoulder mounted cannons at the dragon. When it goes to roar he casually throws six small bombs into its mouth. The dragon stops in mid air, then we hear a muffled sound, followed by the expansion of the dragons stomach area, then five more until the dragon explodes sending oil, and metal pieces everywhere.)

James: (James had lost sight of the other two dragons.) Anthony, how you holding up?

(Camera zooms some one hundred yards away, as we see a pursuit ensuing, Anthony chasing a metallic dragon and a metallic dragon chasing him.)

Anthony: Can't.... uhn,,,, (he dodges a bite from the dragon, shooting arrows at it to push it back.)... talk right now!

James: We're on our way!

Anthony: Whatever!!! Armor: Weapons off, boost jets and armor to max! (His armor takes off as he wheels around and faces the front dragon.) Full power towards weapons! (We see his insignia light up, he covers it for a second and then releases a continuous stream of energy. Melting the armor off the front end of the metal dragon.)

(A far shot shows Anthony's armor falling out of the sky as, Howard flies out of the ruined dragon.)

Howard: COME HERE YOU METALLIC MONSTER!!!! (He yells landing on the last dragon, grabbing it's top jaw and pulling backwards, splitting it in two. The dragon spirals to the ground as Howard flies up.)

Howard: Metalli corvis, check in. (Three acknowledgment lights.)

Anthony: Yeah thanks for catching me! Only fell fifty something thousand feet!

(Howard ignores his son.)

Howard: James, Dimitri how is everything, at the castle?

Dimitri: Slight structural, damage but all in all..... (Static)

(We see a large mushroom cloud in the distance)

Howard: Dimitri!? Dimitri status!!

Anthony: What just happened.... the dragons.... MOVE!!!

(The two large dragons self destruct simultaneously sending both knights flying hundreds of miles, in the opposite directions.)

To be continued....

#2 Posted by batkevin74 (11004 posts) - - Show Bio

@Comiccrazeraze said:

Anthony: Dad!! ( He shoots smoke into the dragon he is engaged with face, throwing it off.) James, Dimitri! Cover me! (two acknowledgment lights blink on.)

Anthony's action needs to be He SHOT smoke into the DRAGON'S FACE he was/is engaging, throwing it off. Because as written it's a little, well it doesn't make much sense, the idea is there but it's not quite right. Good job, could be a tad longer but keep up the D&D style Marvel Universe :)

#3 Posted by Comiccrazeraze (427 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74 said:

@Comiccrazeraze said:

Anthony: Dad!! ( He shoots smoke into the dragon he is engaged with face, throwing it off.) James, Dimitri! Cover me! (two acknowledgment lights blink on.)

Anthony's action needs to be He SHOT smoke into the DRAGON'S FACE he was/is engaging, throwing it off. Because as written it's a little, well it doesn't make much sense, the idea is there but it's not quite right. Good job, could be a tad longer but keep up the D&D style Marvel Universe :)

Understood glad you enjoyed it!

#4 Posted by primepower53 (5686 posts) - - Show Bio

@Comiccrazeraze: still going strong duder!

#5 Posted by Comiccrazeraze (427 posts) - - Show Bio

@primepower53: Haha thanks Prime!