Posted by Jackson_Hartley (186 posts) - - Show Bio

THE OMEN

Part 1

The Soulless One

In the maternity ward of St. Joseph's Hospital, in London, the nurses watch over the slumbering newborns during the night. Especially tonight. The wife of an American ambassador had to be rushed into delivery right away. Twelve hours later, the five-pound eleven ounce Damien Thorn was born.

One of the nurses made her rounds among the babies. She took extra care to look over little Damien. But when she reached his bed, she found he was awake. Awake and silent. His eyes widened, when he saw her. His eyes, wide and dark.

She suddenly found herself swallowing a lump of discomfort. Something wasn't right. Something was... cold about the little babe. His unblinking gaze could easily be set akin to that of a bloodthirsty Great White Shark. The nurse shivered, as a chill ran up her spine; though it felt more like someone had brushed up against her.

Run along, Kathy,” a voice sighed within her mind.

The nurse shook herself from her haze. She went about her business; pinching the bridge of her nose. Surely she'd been working too hard. Maybe she needed that vacation after all. When she was finished and almost out the door, she turned to the newborns and blew them all a kiss... no, not all of them. Not that ambassador's creepy kid.

When the room was empty, a cool breeze sailed through the windowless room. Some of the babies began to weep, while others cried their longs out. Through the eyes of an adult, it would appear nothing more than a room full of crying babies. But through a babies eyes, they witness sights that cause human beings to forget their first days of life.

Standing before little Damien Thorn was a tall gaunt man, with massive bat-like wings folded behind him. Strapped over his chest was a scorched, dented, breastplate. A tattered tunic draped to his knees and his dirt caked feet were bare. His eyes – black as pitch – looked over the young one; the quiet unsettling child who stared back. The winged man's head tilted, as he was fascinated by this bizarre little thing.

“Payden,” a voice called from the other side of the room.

The winged man – Payden – turned to see another winged man. This one had skin so pale the only hint of color was from the dark-purple veins that ran along his body.

“Klatus,” greeted Payden.

“What are you doing with these... things?”

Payden leaned closer to Damien; only mere inches from his face. “I'm intrigued by this little one, dear brother. There's something different about him.”

With but a blink, Klatus was standing next to Payden. “He looks no different than any other doll,” he glanced over the child. “If you're hungry, just feed and let us be on our way.”

“You look upon him with rash eyes,” stated Payden, as he stood tall. “Take a closer look and this time... see.”

Klatus shook his head and looked upon the child once more. After a deeper inspection, he found himself befuddled. “How can this be? He's-”

“Empty,” Payden finished. “As empty as you or I.”

“How is this possible?”

“I know not,” he answered, as a subtle smile stretched the corner of his lips. “However, I do know that it has escaped Father's notice.”

Klatus rose from the baby and looked at Payden. “What thoughts rattle within your mind, brother?”

Again, Payden leaned over Damien. “My thoughts are my own, brother... and with my thoughts, I could achieve greatness.”

“Be weary where your thoughts may lead you. Should you anger Father-”

“Father is always angry,” Payden interjected. “That's what makes him Father.”

Payden raised his hand to Damien's face; a ruddy, clawed, hand. He ran one of his talons across the baby's cheek, coaxing a burbled laugh.

“You know of what I speak, soulless one,” he whispered unto Damien. “We will show such wonders, all of Heaven and Hell will gaze upon us as kings.”

Klatus looked upon his brother, stunned, as a dark tear dripped from Payden's eye onto Damien's lips.

Such Wonders.

#1 Posted by darth_brendroid (1717 posts) - - Show Bio

There really is a dark beauty to this. When the demons(?) showed up I wasn't sure how well it was going to go down, but you pulled it off. Payden in particular has a certain eloquence to his speech that's quite something; my hats off to you.

#2 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (1636 posts) - - Show Bio

This is very dark, chilling even. I like your twist that a son of the Devil is going to inhabit Damien (I got that right didn't I? Or have I missed the mark completely?) Good work

#3 Edited by feebadger (1442 posts) - - Show Bio

“Father is always angry,” Payden interjected. “That's what makes him Father.”

Sounds like my dad.

Seriously though, this is really beautiful. I agree with when he says he was dubious at first. I felt the same, but your dialogue was so great and i could really get a sense of these two demonic characters really quickly and vividly. Am even more impressed knowing how quickly you wrote this. Thanks for your contribution, man. Can't wait to read more.

#4 Posted by wildvine (8437 posts) - - Show Bio

“Be weary where your thoughts may lead you. Should you anger Father-”

“Father is always angry,” Payden interjected. “That's what makes him Father.”

This was my favorite part. Made me giggle for some reason. And actually i thought at first the visitors were angels, that would have been a twist.

#5 Posted by Jackson_Hartley (186 posts) - - Show Bio

@darth_brendroid: Thanks. For some reason, I think angels and demons would talk that way.

@4donkeyjohnson: Thanks you. You're partially right; the plan will unfold itself in time.

@wildvine: I thought about angels, but demons felt easier to write for, for some reason, lol.

@feebadger: Thanks. I had a second wind and I figured I'd write it down, before I lost it. I wouldn't expect the second one to come so quickly, lol.

#6 Posted by batkevin74 (10437 posts) - - Show Bio

@Jackson_Hartley: When I read this, I've got that piece of operatic music 'Nexus domini'....hang on I'll find it http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_b4WaiX4A_Q

Nice work, especially the demon brushing Damien's face

#7 Posted by joshmightbe (24697 posts) - - Show Bio

Really good job, the demon visit was a great touch.

#8 Posted by Jackson_Hartley (186 posts) - - Show Bio

@batkevin74: It does seem fitting, considering the source. Thanks.

@joshmightbe: Thanks. Just tryin something a little different.

#9 Posted by joshmightbe (24697 posts) - - Show Bio

@Jackson_Hartley: I like it, you're dealing with the Anti-Christ. Seems like the optimal place to work demons in.

#10 Posted by batkevin74 (10437 posts) - - Show Bio

Looking forward to part 2 :)

#11 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (1636 posts) - - Show Bio

Eagerly awaiting chapter 2 also

#12 Posted by NlGHTCRAWLER (2898 posts) - - Show Bio

Sweet job dude! Looking forward to the next.

#13 Posted by feebadger (1442 posts) - - Show Bio

Giving this a BUMP in anticipation of part two...

#14 Posted by Decept-O (7275 posts) - - Show Bio

@Jackson_Hartley: Impressive story thus far, well done.

#15 Posted by tomdickharry1984 (834 posts) - - Show Bio

Nioice!

#16 Posted by batkevin74 (10437 posts) - - Show Bio

@Jackson_Hartley: Demonically bumped!

#17 Edited by batkevin74 (10437 posts) - - Show Bio

Bumped