#1 Posted by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio

The drive back to the Sawyer house took around fifteen minutes,give or take.

Bubba started to rock back and forth in his seat.

The Old Man glanced over and shook his head.

"Goddammit boy will ya stop doing that,you sack of sheep testicles,I don't need the stress,not at my age" He was about to carry on but was interrupted by a radio broadcast that caught his attention.

He reached for the dial to turn up the volume.

"Just this morning a shocking discovery was made five bodies were found,each dismembered with their skin and faces missing,forensic scientists are currently trying to identify them,so families can be contacted,the motive of these brutal murders are currently unknown,back to you.."

The Old Man gritted his teeth and suddenly pressed down on the accelerator pad,almost as if to take some of his frustration out on it,maybe imagining it was one of his brothers.

Bubba looked out of the window,he continued to rock up and down,this time slightly faster.

"You grade A bunch of...I am gonna skin you alive this time!,Do ya hear me?"

Bubba looked at The Old Man timidly.

"What have I told you about going out and doing that? This is why we stick to the plan,I don't want to see any gold badges?! Do you hear me?

The Old Man raised his hand,Bubba nodded quickly.

"When I see that brother of yours so help me..."

The pickup truck approached a long wide path up to the family home,at one side of the lane there was the back of an old slaughter house,on the other side a farm house which wasn't quite as old looking

The sun was starting to rise it glistened onto the Sawyer house,showing it in its true decrepit and run down sate.

"Ah the sun is coming up,time to get to work" The Old Man whispered to himself as he approached the house.

Disclaimer All characters belong to their rightful owners etc.Picture by artiom1q2w.Of course more will be on the way and as usual thanks for reading comments always appreciated.

#2 Posted by BumpyBoo (10445 posts) - - Show Bio

As mentioned before, you are nailing the dialogue in these stories! Nice work, dude. Keep 'em coming ;)

(Oooh, and love that you included the pic, very nice touch ;D)

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#3 Edited by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio

@bumpyboo said:

As mentioned before, you are nailing the dialogue in these stories! Nice work, dude. Keep 'em coming ;)

(Oooh, and love that you included the pic, very nice touch ;D)

Thank you very much.Yes I will,hopefully part 3 should be up this week.

Yeah I had to add the pic.

#4 Posted by Nerx (15087 posts) - - Show Bio

neato

#5 Posted by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio
#6 Posted by Pyrogram (41246 posts) - - Show Bio

Good job, keep it up!

#7 Edited by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio

@pyrogram said:

Good job, keep it up!

Thank you! Will do.

#8 Posted by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio
#9 Posted by TommytheHitman (3393 posts) - - Show Bio

Hmm kind of creepy. It was pretty cool since we got to learn more about the grandpa.

#10 Posted by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio

Hmm kind of creepy. It was pretty cool since we got to learn more about the grandpa.

Thanks

Grandpa? I think you mean the cook/Old Man

Sorry for the confusion

#11 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (1714 posts) - - Show Bio

@mrdecepticonleader: "Goddammit boy will ya stop doing that,you sack of sheep testicles,I don't need the stress,not at my age"

Ha! :)

#12 Posted by batkevin74 (11140 posts) - - Show Bio
#13 Edited by SC (13299 posts) - - Show Bio

Great stuff, am enjoying the dialogue!

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#14 Posted by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio

@mrdecepticonleader: "Goddammit boy will ya stop doing that,you sack of sheep testicles,I don't need the stress,not at my age"

Ha! :)

:) Yeah I wanted to keep the dialogue somewhat faithful to how he talks to him in the films.

@mrdecepticonleader: Only one minor quibble, it's short. Other than that it's good!

Thanks.Yeah it is a little but the next will be longer.

@sc said:

Great stuff, am enjoying the dialogue!

Thank you!

#15 Edited by lykopis (10746 posts) - - Show Bio

O_O

You are way too good at this. (which is good, but bad because you're too good, get it?)

#16 Posted by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio

@lykopis said:

O_O

You are way too good at this. (which is good, but bad because you're too good, get it?)

Ha ha I get it thanks. Just trying to delve into their minds a little, the actors managed to do it so..

#17 Posted by wildvine (10334 posts) - - Show Bio

@mrdecepticonleader

Nice dialogue. Creepy vibe. Just one ish. You forget to space between a period, and the next word. Nice work story wise. You really have a knack for horror element.

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#18 Posted by mrdecepticonleader (18618 posts) - - Show Bio

@wildvine said:

@mrdecepticonleader

Nice dialogue. Creepy vibe. Just one ish. You forget to space between a period, and the next word. Nice work story wise. You really have a knack for horror element.

Thanks.