#1 Edited by SpideyIvyDaredevilFan26 (5725 posts) - - Show Bio

Harley and Ivy had found themselves in the worst position possible when the Regime took control. Not sadistic or cruel enough to join the ranks of the Regime, and with criminal backgrounds too extensive to join any heroes. Not that they could even if they wanted to. Pamela and Quinzel had been living off of robbery and theft and hadn't once been stopped by heroes. It had reached a point where they doubted whether there were any left. Ivy was watering her garden as Harley snuck up behind her, moping exaggeratedly.

"Oh Red, I haven't seen Mistah J in months. You think somethin's happened to him?"

Ivy rolled her eyes. This was the third time today the taboo subject of "Mistah J" had been brought up. Yes, Ivy thought, in all likelihood, Joker was dead. She had never trusted Scarecrow, but she believed the Regime when they announced that they had assassinated the Clown Prince. Yet even in death, Harley's abuser and tormentor still had her in his iron grip. Clenching her fists, she grabbed Harley by the shoulders.

"Harley, Joker's dead. I'm not sure if the Regime got tired of his hijinks, or some costumed vigilante gave him what was coming. But it's not like Joker to stay quiet for so long. And the sooner you accept it, the better the chances we have of staying alive!"

Harley looked like she was about to cry, turning away from her best friend and pouting like a small child. "No...Not...Not my puddin! He's too clever and smart to get himself killed out there...Wait a minute! Maybe we could ask the Regime! They'll tell us where he is and we got ourselves some new buddies!"

Ivy got into an exaggerated, mocking stance mimicking Harley's, along with an exagerrated, sarcastic smile. "Great idea Harl! And then, we'll let them continue their mass botanical genocide and murder complete innocents for no other reason then terror and fear! No Harley, we're not on Scarecrow's side. We're not on anybody's side. Because nobody is on our side!"

"Objection, Ms. Sexy pale, green woman in blackish green leotard!"

Ivy and Harley turned around to see two figures emerge from the darkness. One was recognized immediatley. Gigantic gorilla, purple cape, pernament frown...It was Gorilla Grodd alright. The second one remained a mystery. He wore a red and blue spandex costume, and what appeared to be some kind of bug mask.

"Let's see...Bright flashy colors, friendly demeanor, hasn't threatened us with murder...Costumed hero?"

"Sure looks like it Red...But what's he doin with Groddy?"

Grodd shrugged, smiling briefly at Parker. Spider-Man nodded back at his simian ally. "Look, I've been listening in, and I was hoping..."

"You were listening?!" shouted Ivy. Even Harley jumped back, startled at Ivy's anger and frustration. "How dare you spy on Mother Nature..."

Suddenly, footsteps were heard from the darkness of the greenhouse. Out stepped an attractive blonde woman, wearing a skimpy white outfit. She smiled sarcastically at Spider-Man and his comrades. Ivy rolled her eyes, crossing her arms disapprovingly.

"Let me guess...A friend of the bug's?"

"I'll save you the introductions. The bug brat goes by Spider-Man, and I go by Emma Frost. And no, I'm not with Spidey. I've just been tracking you guys for a few days, hoping you'd be able to bring me to some enemies of the Regime. Oh, almost forgot the best part. Scarecrow's got a message for you!"

Emma threw what looked like some kind of miniature projector on the ground. From the projector sprouted a holographic image of Scarecrow. Turning towards the heroes, Crane laughed sinisterly before responding.

"Hroo, hraaa!! Welcome, my worthy adversaries, to the beginning of hell. I am Jonathan Crane, known as Scarecrow to the populous. As Emma has told you, we've been tracking you for some time, and are finally ready to close the trap and catch the mice. But don't worry...She's been instructed not to kill you...Yet. Not until me and my little friends have instructed you in the true ways of fear and suffering, as we shall all who oppose my rule of terror. And at the end of terror...Oblivion!"

Spider-Man quickly shot a web at the face of Emma Frost, propelling her towards his fists. As he prepared to strike, Emma delivered a fierce kick to Parker's head, knocking him to the ground. Harley charged Frost with an enraged scream, preparing to bring her hammer down. Just before impact, Emma shifted to diamond form, and as the hammer struck her, she barely flinched. Harley dropped the hammer, holding her hand in pain. As Emma prepared to strike, she found herself entangled in vines. She struggled and writhed as the vines began to entangle her. Ivy laughed as she walked closer to Emma.

"Disappointing...I guess I overestimated Crane's intelligence. Why we never went on the offensive I'll never know."

Emma laughed cruelly, as a brick levitated to hit Ivy in the face, bringing her to the ground with a pained cry. "Oh Pamela, it seems you're the one doing the underestimating. Luthor's helped to enhance my telepathy to extrordinary levels...Know what that means?" Emma rose her hand to one of the beams holding up the green house, as it slowly began to fall. Spider-Man, in a flash of time, dove in front of Ivy, knocking her out of the way of the impending beam, saving her from death. As Ivy looked back up at Spider-Man, she had a confused look on her face.

"Wait but...I'm the bad guy. Why did you..."

Suddenly, Spider-Man was lifted of the ground, as he began to choke, holding his hands to his neck. Frost was mere seconds away from finishing the Spider off when she screamed out in pain, falling to the ground.

"What...You're a telepath?!"

A deep, laugh was heard behind Frost, as Grodd closed in on her, holding her head with his great hands. "No...I am." As Grodd prepared to snap Frost's neck, Spider-Man cried out with a quick "No, wait!"

Grodd turned to Parker, checking to see the problem. "We don't have to kill her!"

Grodd looked back at Parker, shrugging him aside as he tried to stop him. As he prepared to break Frost's neck, the young mutant looked back into Grodd's eyes. It was as if she was screaming out for mercy, but was too weak to do so. A message came to Grodd, a voice he had rarely heard in his life, telling him he was better than this, that there was more to him than a big brute. No, for the first time in his life, he was ready to take the high road, but he wouldn't let Parker think that.

"Weak human...I'm not in the mood for bloodshed..."

Grodd dropped Frost as he walked away. Spider-Man turned to Ivy, who had a mixture of annoyance and interest on her face.

"So um...Ma'am, can I get your name, or do I just have to use bad plant puns?"

Ivy laughed slightly at Parker's joke, there was a bit of charm to it, as cheesy as it was. "Flattery will get you nowhere. Name's Poison Ivy, the jester is Harley"

When Ivy had finished wrapping up Frost in her vines in order to restrain her, Spider-Man began to walk away. Ivy placed her hand on Parker's shoulder, stopping him. "Wait...Spider-Man...Why did you save me? Hell, why didn't you try and arrest me like you did with Frost?"

"Look Ivy...You know how I was kinda listening in on you earlier?"

"Yep...Still haven't apologized for it."

"Yeah, working on that. Anyways, I know there's more to you than even you see. More than just evil or villainy. And maybe if we teamed up...We could uncover more of that."

"No...You saved me and I'm grateful. But I've been offered similar opportunities before, only to be used and manipulated. Maybe your intentions are good, and I respect you for not treating me like a monster...But I don't save people, and I don't need want any help from you heroes."

Spider-Man sighed, grabbing Ivy's hand again. "Look Ivy...Please. We need you...The world needs you. This may be your only chance at turning your life around. Whether you trust me or you don't, it's time to start trusting yourself."

Ivy turned to Harley. Spider-Man's words were true, it was about time that they start turning a new leaf. And when a charming comedian in red and blue spandex gave them the chance, it was a wise idea to take it.

"I'm such an idiot...Fine, I'll give it a shot."

"Nice! Alright, Grodd's got a hideout..."

"...On one condition."

"And what's that?"

"You saved me, and I'm grateful for that. But if we're serious about teaming up, we need to know...Who are you?"

To be continued in Gotham City 21: Moon Knight

#2 Posted by CyberWarrior (1312 posts) - - Show Bio

Awesome! The chemistry fited just right, the fights are enjoyable. I don't know what to add: this one of the best chapters to the moment.

Moon Knight! There he goes!

#3 Posted by wildvine (8027 posts) - - Show Bio

Ivy seems awfully trusting and nice in this. The title is Harley Quinn, yet she barely has anything to do with this. She's just there.

What "killing blow" was Emma going to give Spider-Man? She already had him in a psychic choke hold.

If Grodd was going to kill someone he wouldn't pause just cause Spider-Man squeaked out "No wait." This scene could have created tensions between Grodd and Spider-Man. Or if you were going straight hero with Grodd, he could have felt pity. Or said something about walking the higher path, that sort of thing.

You're still putting different characters dialogue in the same paragraph. Also there were a few typos.

Two type A personalities and two comedians on the same team. This should prove interesting in future issues. I don't know Moon Knight very well, so I am curious to see how you write him.

#4 Posted by SpideyIvyDaredevilFan26 (5725 posts) - - Show Bio

@wildvine said:

Ivy seems awfully trusting and nice in this. The title is Harley Quinn, yet she barely has anything to do with this. She's just there.

What "killing blow" was Emma going to give Spider-Man? She already had him in a psychic choke hold.

If Grodd was going to kill someone he wouldn't pause just cause Spider-Man squeaked out "No wait." This scene could have created tensions between Grodd and Spider-Man. Or if you were going straight hero with Grodd, he could have felt pity. Or said something about walking the higher path, that sort of thing.

You're still putting different characters dialogue in the same paragraph. Also there were a few typos.

Two type A personalities and two comedians on the same team. This should prove interesting in future issues. I don't know Moon Knight very well, so I am curious to see how you write him.

I edited it a lot, tell me what you think of it now.

#5 Posted by Deathstroke19 (3799 posts) - - Show Bio

@spideyivydaredevilfan26: you did a great job with this and this one and bane are my favs so far. I love how you get to see a more sympathetic side to ivy. Great job I'm really loving the series.

@wildvine: try to be a little more kind when your commenting i mean its great to give constructive criticism just lets not be too harsh. (This isn't directed directly at you but i mean anyone commenting) also wildvine i agree with you about one thing... It is titled Harley Quinn but it mostly revolves around ivy. That's really the only thing i can say.

DS

#6 Posted by CyberWarrior (1312 posts) - - Show Bio

@spideyivydaredevilfan26: you did a great job with this and this one and bane are my favs so far. I love how you get to see a more sympathetic side to ivy. Great job I'm really loving the series.

@wildvine: try to be a little more kind when your commenting i mean its great to give constructive criticism just lets not be too harsh. (This isn't directed directly at you but i mean anyone commenting) also wildvine i agree with you about one thing... It is titled Harley Quinn but it mostly revolves around ivy. That's really the only thing i can say.

DS

@spideyivydaredevilfan26 What about calling the chapter Poison Ivy? )

#7 Posted by wildvine (8027 posts) - - Show Bio

@wildvine: try to be a little more kind when your commenting i mean its great to give constructive criticism just lets not be too harsh. (This isn't directed directly at you but i mean anyone commenting) also wildvine i agree with you about one thing... It is titled Harley Quinn but it mostly revolves around ivy. That's really the only thing i can say.

DS

I may have been a tad rough this time, I agree. Its not that I like giving negative criticism, I just know SIDF26 has a lot of potential. And in the past I've read his stories that had mistakes, and no one pointed them out. So he kept making them for the entire series. I do try to always end on the high notes so writers don't get discouraged, but I will work at delivering bad news more gently in the future.

#8 Posted by wildvine (8027 posts) - - Show Bio
#9 Posted by SpideyIvyDaredevilFan26 (5725 posts) - - Show Bio

@spideyivydaredevilfan26: you did a great job with this and this one and bane are my favs so far. I love how you get to see a more sympathetic side to ivy. Great job I'm really loving the series.

Thanks so much! Glad you like my direction with Ivy, as that's what I'm gonna be going for in the next chapters. Make no mistake though, she's still gonna be a rogueish badass. ;)

#10 Posted by Deathstroke19 (3799 posts) - - Show Bio
#11 Posted by SpideyIvyDaredevilFan26 (5725 posts) - - Show Bio
#12 Posted by Deathstroke19 (3799 posts) - - Show Bio
#13 Posted by Deathstroke19 (3799 posts) - - Show Bio
#14 Edited by SpideyIvyDaredevilFan26 (5725 posts) - - Show Bio

@deathstroke19: AMEN! someone had to do it.

@wildvine said:

@deathstroke19 said:

@wildvine: try to be a little more kind when your commenting i mean its great to give constructive criticism just lets not be too harsh. (This isn't directed directly at you but i mean anyone commenting) also wildvine i agree with you about one thing... It is titled Harley Quinn but it mostly revolves around ivy. That's really the only thing i can say.

DS

I may have been a tad rough this time, I agree. Its not that I like giving negative criticism, I just know SIDF26 has a lot of potential. And in the past I've read his stories that had mistakes, and no one pointed them out. So he kept making them for the entire series. I do try to always end on the high notes so writers don't get discouraged, but I will work at delivering bad news more gently in the future.

@deathstroke19 said:

@spideyivydaredevilfan26: you did a great job with this and this one and bane are my favs so far. I love how you get to see a more sympathetic side to ivy. Great job I'm really loving the series.

@wildvine: try to be a little more kind when your commenting i mean its great to give constructive criticism just lets not be too harsh. (This isn't directed directly at you but i mean anyone commenting) also wildvine i agree with you about one thing... It is titled Harley Quinn but it mostly revolves around ivy. That's really the only thing i can say.

DS

@spideyivydaredevilfan26 What about calling the chapter Poison Ivy? )

Chapter #7 is up!

Moon Knight