Posted by RedQueen (1171 posts) - - Show Bio

Just a little something I wrote a couple of years ago, based around the doubts of Kate Bishop/Hawkeye. It's currently on fanfiction.net under my pseudonym, but I'm going to delete it there any day now. Thank you to xxYoungFatexx for the CC.

Disclaimer: All characters mentioned are properties of Marvel, and, as such, I do not own them.

Rating: T..... make it a T+ just to be safe.

Doubt

Doubt. That raw, festering sensation that gnawed at the edge of reason; a plague that, once contracted, would continue to infect, to grow until it overwhelmed every conscious thought. Every waking moment. Kate Bishop would come to experience this only three times; the first was at the sharp bite of a bullet entering the muscle in her forearm. The pain was excruciating.

She screamed.

Hot tears blurred her vision, and streamed down her face. Overhead, the battle continued on. An explosion of light erupted from Wiccan’s fingertips. A glimpse of a veined wing as it soared among the clouds of dust that had settled over the area. . A giant hand, Cassie’s hand, crashed through a nearby building, scattering rubble onto the road, flattening vehicles that had been abandoned there. The roar of a machine gun deafened her senses. Crimson blood, her blood, wept from her arm, cradled by its twin against her chest. Such a simple thing – a tiny projectile- had incapacitated her.

The second, that even now, would cause her to wake, bed sheets drenched in her sweat, with but a ghost of a whisper on her lips. The sense of hopelessness, as she stared down the foreboding barrel of the handgun, was unbearable. Heart hammering in her chest, perspiration beading on her forehead, all she could manage to stutter was “please...no.” Saliva pooled in her mouth, bile rushed up her throat. Her limbs trembled as she counted the seconds before the bullet entered her brain. Her eyes darted to her bow, discarded on the floor out of arms reach. She was at his mercy.

Kate Bishop wasn’t bulletproof. She hadn’t been blessed with super strength, or magic powers, or alien ancestry. She was, simply, merely, human. With human desires, human strengths, human weaknesses. Cassie, her best friend, had insisted (with a mouth full of cereal) that she too was human. That so was Billy and Tommy, Iron Man, Wasp, Eli, Captain America, the Fantastic Four……

She nodded her head, mumbled, “yeah, I guess so,” and then left- her thoughts chaotic and anguished. How long could she pretend to be part of a world that she, clearly, didn’t belong?

She was a kid playing dress up living a childish fantasy.

And so it was that the third time she experienced doubt was as the witness to a heartless murder. They were juvenile teenagers, armed with shotguns and pistols, getting their thrills from basic robbery. A kid, dressed in a rudimentary cape and mask, was caught in the crossfire. She could still hear the grief-stricken wails of the mother as she embraced her child’s lifeless corpse in her arms.

“What makes me so different? God, I’m out of my depth….”

“Classic superhero doubt- we’ve all experienced it.” He scrunched up the paper in his hand, “Heck, even Thor, would you believe it.”

She leant forward, wrapped her coat around her and folded her arms across her chest, “No I don’t.” She sighs wistfully, “What I wouldn’t give to fly, or be able to read minds.”

He tossed another peanut into his mouth, “I know of a few people who are dying for the skills we have… and besides powers don’t make a superhero. You’re a hero in here.” He gestured with a finger, before quirking an eyebrow at his own sentimentality. “If cap could’ve heard me say that….” He shook his head contemplatively, pushed himself to his feet, and glanced off into the distance, “you just remember that, Hawkeye. Don’t go letting the side down.”

She watched him walk away; mingling with the crowds, melting into normality; her fingertips resting on the place he had indicated: Her heart.

She glanced down at the gravel beneath her feet, feeling a slight blush creep along her cheeks and the bridge of her nose. From that moment on, Kate Bishop would never come to doubt herself again.

#1 Posted by Project_Worm (3315 posts) - - Show Bio

HOW HAS THIS NOT GOTTEN MORE VIEWS?! Blasphemy!!

#2 Posted by RedQueen (1171 posts) - - Show Bio

Glad you liked it :D

#3 Posted by xxYoungFatexx (99 posts) - - Show Bio

This opening sentence was a mouthful; I had to read it a few times with the multiple pauses. I’d say condense it a little. Right now, it’s a good sentence, and a sentence grammatically correct. However, it felt slightly awkward.

Doubt, that raw, festering sensation that gnawed at the edge of reason; a plague that, once contracted, would continue to infect, to grow until it overwhelmed every conscious thought, every waking moment. Kate Bishop would come to experience this only three times; the first was at the sharp bite of a bullet entering the muscle in her forearm.

I think this sentence needs a semi colon and a colon. - She watched him walk away; mingling with the crowds, melting into normality; her fingertips resting on the place he had indicated: Her heart. - I added them.

This sentence seems to be a fragment. If it’s not, I must have gotten confused with a verb tense or something.

-Crimson blood, her blood, wept from her arm, cradled by its twin against her chest.

Overall, it was a good story. And me being in my editor mood love picking stories apart.

#4 Edited by RedQueen (1171 posts) - - Show Bio

Thanks for the comment/advice - You're right ...the sentences you picked out were always the few I thought needed work. :D

Edit: Made a few changes, still working on the blood sentence..... :)

#5 Posted by CapFanboy (4520 posts) - - Show Bio

@RedQueen: Nice

#6 Posted by primepower53 (5686 posts) - - Show Bio

Cool