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#1 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

The tale of snow white and the seven dwarves has been told many ways through the years. Some parts are left out, and others added in until the story is so warped with truth and lies that one doesn’t know where the legend begins and the myth ends. But one thing that has always remained true is the beginning. A young princess who’s true beauty outshines her stepmothers. But it is here that myth begins getting mixed with the legend. So I will tell the story that I know. The one passed down to me not from mother, or grandmother, but from my great grandmother who loves the true nature of fairytales as much as I do.

Once upon a time…scratch that… A very long time ago before the time of the internet, before cars, and phones there lived a Queen who’s beauty was matched by no other. Her husband doted on her, gave her everything he could imagine, yet the Queen was still not happy. There was one thing the King had yet to give her that the Queen wanted most of all. A child of her own. They had tried for years and still they had not produced an heir. Finally in a bought of desperation the Queen traveled to a witch to see if there was something she could do.

When the Queen arrived at the witches little shack she was greeted by a horrible stench and grisly sight. The bodies of young women hung around the witches shack, and pieces of the bodies were missing. The eyes from one young women, the lips from another, and so on and so forth. The Queen turned to the men that had accompanied her and spoke quietly to them, “If this witch can not help me, I want her destroyed. And if she does help me, after the birth of my child I want her to be burned so she can not harm anymore young women.” The guards nodded in approval and gave the Queen their word. She gave them all a beaming smile and then turned to the witches door and knocked.

There was a shambling noise from inside and then a whimper before the door opened. Standing before the Queen was a old hunched women with blood staining every piece of fabric on her. For a moment the witch stood stunned to see the Queen, then gave her a rickety bow and grunted, “What do you want Queen Zaphira?” Queen Zaphira ignored the insolence of the old witch and spoke quickly of the problem she was having. She did not want to stand in the presence of the witch and the bodies of the young women for to long. When her tale was done the old witch scratched her chin and turned her chiseled old face away as she thought. Finally she spoke her voice sounding sinister as she told the Queen what it was she was to do, “I can help you Zaphira. You will need to follow my directions exactly if you want this to work. I will give you a potion to help the King produce the perfect child for you. The night before you conceive your child you must recite what you want your child to look like. The color of hair, lips, eyes, and skin is most important. When that is done give the king he potion and the next night when you retire to your bed chambers, you will conceive the child.”

The Queen was suspicious of the old witch, but took the potion she was given anyway and retreated back to her waiting carriage. On the way back to the castle it began snowing and the Queen began thinking over the features of her perfect child. She already decided she wanted a daughter and wanted her to be more beautiful then herself. She made sure to mentally note everything she wanted for her child and by the time she had arrived back at the castle her perfect daughter was alive and skipping inside her mind.

That night the Queen prepared the potion as she had been told. She sat over it and slowly added the final ingredients and recited the final words, “Coal for hair so black, snow for skin so white and pure, a sapphire for eyes so blue, and blood for lips so red.” The potion began to bubble and a puff of smoke escaped from the cup as it settled. The Queen stared at the cup and left it on her dressing table to sit over night and retired, confident that by that time tomorrow, she would be pregnant with a child of her own.

#2 Posted by aztek_the_lost (28224 posts) - - Show Bio

woo! nice post Kiara, I'm going to keep up with this one

*is expecting a cool twist concerning birth of child* :P

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#3 Posted by T.J. Magnum (27685 posts) - - Show Bio

Yay more fan fics lol

this was real good, keep it up

#4 Posted by lady_redhead (9592 posts) - - Show Bio

o_0 Im leaving the comp... that was freaking AWESOME...

Mine sucks compared to this... LOL

#5 Posted by aztek_the_lost (28224 posts) - - Show Bio
Kiara_Sullivan said:
"Well mostly Im sticking to the roots of the story.. No really mind blowing twists just minor things.."
well I've never heard this version xP so its already a twist!!
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#6 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

-__- I accidently deleted my post booo..

I said I was sticking to the roots so no major twists.

And Thansk you guys..

MR, it wasnt that great

#7 Posted by aztek_the_lost (28224 posts) - - Show Bio
Kiara_Sullivan said:
"-__- I accidently deleted my post booo..

I said I was sticking to the roots so no major twists.

And Thansk you guys..

MR, it wasnt that great"

too bad your opinion doesn't matter in this contest xD
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#8 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

-__- :P

#9 Posted by Sherry (1470 posts) - - Show Bio

That was really, really good. :D Good luck!

#10 Posted by Walkingstone (10723 posts) - - Show Bio

I love it so far :D I'm really curious about how you're going to pull it together, it's a good first part :D  More please.

#11 Posted by Methos (40103 posts) - - Show Bio
dives on Walkingstone and attacks with hugs

babes... where ya been?

M
#12 Posted by Walkingstone (10723 posts) - - Show Bio

*huge hugs on Methos!*

Missed you!  :D  Isn't this competition awesome?  Good reading material :D

#13 Posted by Methos (40103 posts) - - Show Bio

yeah...

fresh reading material is always awesome :D

M

#14 Posted by Walkingstone (10723 posts) - - Show Bio

And everyone is doing so well!

#15 Posted by Methos (40103 posts) - - Show Bio

yeah... there are two here that really stand out...

can't wait to see how they come on

M

#16 Posted by aztek_the_lost (28224 posts) - - Show Bio
Methos said:
"yeah...

fresh reading material is always awesome :D

M"
*says the guy who never reads any of the fan-fics here including Aztek's* :P
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#17 Posted by Methos (40103 posts) - - Show Bio
aztek the lost said:
*says the guy who never reads any of the fan-fics here including Aztek's* :P"

pft... i read quite a few of the fanfic's here...

M
#18 Posted by lady_redhead (9592 posts) - - Show Bio
Methos said:
"yeah... there are two here that really stand out...

can't wait to see how they come on

M"
SURE AS HECK NOT MIINE

shoulda stuck with the one we talked about v.v
#19 Posted by aztek_the_lost (28224 posts) - - Show Bio
Methos said:
"aztek the lost said:
*says the guy who never reads any of the fan-fics here including Aztek's* :P"

pft... i read quite a few of the fanfic's here...

M"
<--------------*is just bitter cause Methos hasn't read his*
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#20 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

-__- Methos came in here to paw Stone and not read my fic.. Im so sad! :P J/k

Thanks guys. And stone. I'm not sure yet xP I'm just winging it. I have no set place or anything, just going with the flow.

#21 Posted by TheDrifter (26563 posts) - - Show Bio

Nice job Kiara :)

#22 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

Meh its not that great

#23 Posted by TheDrifter (26563 posts) - - Show Bio

You're a Writer, You're supposed to think that :P

#24 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

LMFAO, I wonder where you heard that at.

#25 Posted by TheDrifter (26563 posts) - - Show Bio

I heard it from You who heard it from Arrow of course

:P

#26 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

I think that was a rhetorical question hun :P

#27 Posted by TheDrifter (26563 posts) - - Show Bio

Oh......lol

#28 Posted by ~The Wanderer~ (34406 posts) - - Show Bio

Nice:D

#29 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

Bells tolled through the streets of Baramor. People bustled towards the courtyard of the castle as a figure clutching a small bundle came out onto the balcony. It was King Leonidas, holding his child in his arms, but there was an air of sadness that befell upon the crowd as their king turned tear stained eyes on them, “The child has been born, her name will be Antoinette. But I am afraid that Queen Zaphira has passed during her birth.” The crowd below the King went silent as they all digested the news he gave them. The King watched over his people and then carefully lifted the bundle he had in his arms to reveal a beautiful baby girl with ebony hair, Sapphire blue eyes, Snow white skin, and blood red lips. The crowd gasped and then clapped as tears of both joy and happiness fell upon all of their cheeks.

In the back of the crowd a old hunched women stood with a slightly sinister grin upon her face. Beside her a teenager stood in shabby clothes and dirt stains upon her cheeks. The young girl looked up at the withered old women and gave her a hopeful grin, “You told me that Zaphira would die. Does this mean the rest will be true as well, Grandmother?”

“I always speak the truth Madeline. You will marry the King in 3 years time. We must prepare you for that day. You can not go to the King’s bed like this. Then in due time you will kill the girl and her father so you will be Queen.”

“And if our plans fail?”

“They will not. Have faith in me Madeline. I have not been wrong yet.”

That night as Madeline and her grandmother settled into their nightly routine a loud bang shook the weathered old shack. Madeline looked at her grandmother as the old women motioned her into a hidden panel below the floor. The Old witch opened the door and spoke out into the night, ‘’I know your out there, come out you hooligans.”

“Old witch! Stay where you are.”

“Who are you? Get off my land!”

‘By the order of King Leonidas, we are to take you, Alandra Etyl, into custody for your dealings in witchcraft.”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about.”

“That’s what they all say lady. Come on.”

Madeline could hear the scrapes and muffled curses of the men as her grandmother fought. Finally it stopped and one man cursed loudly, ‘Stupid btch. I’ll be glad to watch her turn to ashes at the stake.”

For a moment Madeline thought to follow the soldiers, but the entered the small hut and began searching. Pans were tossed around, bed covers were thrown to the ground, and feathers flew as they ripped apart everything. Madeline lay very still where she was and cried silently in her musty hiding place. Finally the men were gone and she appeared cautiously from her hiding place. Tears made rivulets along her cheeks as she stared down at a small puddle of blood. It was at that moment that Madeline swore her revenge against Leonidas and his precious baby girl.

#30 Posted by lady_redhead (9592 posts) - - Show Bio

OOOH me likey!!! and the character Madeleine.. so familiar... ;-P

#31 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio
Mistress Redhead said:
"OOOH me likey!!! and the character Madeleine.. so familiar... ;-P"

Hmm.. I wonder why :P
#32 Posted by lady_redhead (9592 posts) - - Show Bio
Kiara_Sullivan said:
"Mistress Redhead said:
"OOOH me likey!!! and the character Madeleine.. so familiar... ;-P"

Hmm.. I wonder why :P"
hee hee
#33 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

:P I got other people coming in just cause its fun to incorporate peeps.. Anyone know who the witch was :P

#34 Posted by lady_redhead (9592 posts) - - Show Bio

hmmm.. no..

#35 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

he he.. lets just say.. she's the wrong sex.. But i got some ideas for her from someone else :P

#36 Posted by lady_redhead (9592 posts) - - Show Bio
Kiara_Sullivan said:
"he he.. lets just say.. she's the wrong sex.. But i got some ideas for her from someone else :P"
LMAO now i know who!
#37 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

he he ^_^

#38 Posted by Jack the Ripper (2225 posts) - - Show Bio

<--------------has no idea who the witch is


but it was a nice post Kiara, I always enjoy a good revenge story filled with baby slaughtering and witch burning :D

#39 Posted by ~The Wanderer~ (34406 posts) - - Show Bio
Kiara_Sullivan said:
":P I got other people coming in just cause its fun to incorporate peeps.."
Wants to be incorporated xP

But anyways Kiara, this is great:D
#40 Posted by Jack the Ripper (2225 posts) - - Show Bio
~The Wanderer~ said:
"Kiara_Sullivan said:
":P I got other people coming in just cause its fun to incorporate peeps.."
Wants to be incorporated xP

But anyways Kiara, this is great:D"
I think I'm going to be :D

hopes he's not the witch o_O
#41 Posted by ~The Wanderer~ (34406 posts) - - Show Bio

Btw...

Directs Jack to my digital art thread

#42 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

I do need seven dwarves xP

Lets see...

Acer, obi, Az, Light, TCG, Paragon, & Cryo

o_O

#43 Posted by aztek_the_lost (28224 posts) - - Show Bio
Kiara_Sullivan said:
"I do need seven dwarves xP

Lets see...

Acer, obi, Az, Light, TCG, Paragon, & Cryo

o_O"
a schizophrenic, a...well, nuthouse might be the best word, a loser, a feline, a...well I have no idea who TCG is, a drunk and a bitter guy?

wow, we'd be the perfect dwarves xD
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#44 Posted by Jack Rabbit (202 posts) - - Show Bio

Any room for a drunk rabbit in there somewhere, love?

Bloody brilliant!  Lovin' in!  Lovin' it!  Me and Stone, we want more!

#45 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

OMG! JACK! OMG!

I might be able to work you in.

I'm making another post tomorrow :D

#46 Posted by Cryo-Wolf (12662 posts) - - Show Bio

Oooooh, I'm a dwarf!?  SWEEET!

Which one am I? ^.^

<------------------is amped to be a dwarf

#47 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

I dont know yet xP

I think Cham is going to be a Lizard xP I have someone else for the Prince :P But I wont be telling him about it :D HE has to read and find out xP

#48 Posted by Desilation (14585 posts) - - Show Bio

any users that play the animals that clean the house lol

#49 Posted by Kiara_Sullivan (30075 posts) - - Show Bio

I'm thinking of Incorporating Jack up there for that xP

And Cham xP

#50 Posted by Desilation (14585 posts) - - Show Bio
Kiara_Sullivan said:
"I'm thinking of Incorporating Jack up there for that xP

And Cham xP"
i can imagine cham being the goofy turtle no offense