#1 Edited by Joygirl (19390 posts) - - Show Bio

((Short teaser for a SW fic I thought up. Positive reaction my yield further installments.))

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Nothing had been saved. Both of her masters had been lost. She had been driven from the planet she had rightfully taken for her own. Even the dark side no longer wanted her.

Maris Brood was truly alone, and she knew who to blame. There was Vader – Darth Vader, the “lord of the sith”. There was Palpatine, the dark Emperor, the ruler of this twisted world. And then there was him – the boy. The apprentice, the assassin. Killed by the Emperor not long ago.

This was his fault. He had taken Shaak Ti from her, taken the senator from her, taken away her pride and driven her from Felucia. Now, even he was gone. Vengeance could not be had. She was without a goal, without guidance, without a master, without a home.

Multiple heavy stones dropped from their positions – floating in a ring around the zabrak – as Maris's train of thought ended. It was pointless even contemplating it – her connection to the force was scattered, with both light and dark sides vying for her tainted affection. She had promised him, that dark apprentice, that she would turn her back on the dark side. Vowed to him when he had spared her life.

But despite her efforts, the Dark Side of the Force had not turned its back on her.

Now, all she had was this place, this new hell. The system was damn near uncharted, as far as she knew – utterly empty of any intelligent life. Maybe it was better that way. Maris could concentrate on her connection with the animal and plant life, could train herself among them. Maybe she didn't need a master, or a mistress. What was the point, anyway? Being a jedi was of no use, anyway – all it did was make you a target. She had no authority, no rightful place in civilization. Perhaps this miserable, wet, stinking hole... this 'Degobah'... was where she belonged.

The zabrak girl twitched at the sound of a sudden bursting gas-bubble from a nearby, fetid pond. She let out a quiet groan and flopped back down onto the sticky, mossy rock she had been crouching on, her elbows resting on her thighs. Then again, maybe this wasn't where she belonged, and maybe nobody belonged here at all.

“I hate this place...” she growled, using her unstable connection with the Force to lift a small rock and toss it aimlessly at the pond, causing a dull, thick-sounding splash and an awkward burbling sound.

“Hate it, do you? My home this is – perhaps, hate you, it does, mmrh? Ooughrhhurhurhurhourgh."

Maris Brood
#2 Posted by Ravager4 (1627 posts) - - Show Bio

@Joygirl: I am greatly intrigued

#3 Posted by wildvine (8941 posts) - - Show Bio

I am tots be on board for more of this.

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#4 Posted by Joygirl (19390 posts) - - Show Bio

:D?

#5 Posted by Joygirl (19390 posts) - - Show Bio

srsly u gaiz

#6 Posted by Nordok (1181 posts) - - Show Bio

Fantastic work!

#7 Posted by Project_Worm (3388 posts) - - Show Bio

Nuff said...

#8 Edited by Joygirl (19390 posts) - - Show Bio

Tiny edit at the end. Made Yoda's dialogue a little crazier.

For those wondering what kind of sound that is supposed to be, it is this:

#9 Posted by batkevin74 (10587 posts) - - Show Bio

@Joygirl said:

And then there was him – the boy. The apprentice, the assassin. Killed by the Emperor not long ago.

Is that Galen what's his face from that game??

@Joygirl said:

“I hate this place...” she growled, using her unstable connection with the Force to lift a small rock and toss it aimlessly at the pond, causing a dull, thick-sounding splash and an awkward burbling sound.

“Hate it, do you? My home this is – perhaps, hate you, it does, mmrh? Ooughrhhurhurhurhourgh."

Oooo Yoda got a new apprentice

#10 Posted by Pyrogram (36388 posts) - - Show Bio

@Joygirl: You said you are not sure what direction to take this, this is pretty good so far :)

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#11 Posted by Guardiandevil83 (5515 posts) - - Show Bio

Your stuff is always good so I am not surprised. lol

#12 Posted by Joygirl (19390 posts) - - Show Bio

Thanks everyone. ^_^

#13 Posted by SupBatz (1729 posts) - - Show Bio

@Joygirl: Pretty great start. I really like the way you established Maris as lost and torn in nearly every regard. Makes me feel bad for her - well, worse than I already had. And bringing her to Dagobah is an interesting twist. If you continue this I'm very interested in seeing the direction you go in. Awesome work :P

#14 Posted by The Poet (8335 posts) - - Show Bio

@Joygirl: cool.

look forward to seeing Yoda and Maris interact...

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#15 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (1649 posts) - - Show Bio

Is Maris your own creation? I liked Star Wars, but the extra universe where Luke has kids etc never really got into, even the clone wars tv series annoyed me...which is no reflection on you it's just how I feel about the clone wars

#16 Posted by Joygirl (19390 posts) - - Show Bio

Maris was a minor character in The Force Unleashed video game that I took a shine to. ^_^ So this takes place a few years before Episode IV.

#17 Posted by 4donkeyjohnson (1649 posts) - - Show Bio

Asides from being unable to count, George Lucas back-expanded his universe so that when Luke & Obi-Wan are suppiosedly the last of the Jedi the books, video games etc have 100,000 Jedi hiding in a cave going about their day, fighting for truth justice and force. Or maybe I'm mad at him for selling episodes 7-99 to Disney for $4 BILLION DOLLARS. As I said before, this has nothing to do with your nice, well written story....damn you LUCAS!!!!!

#18 Posted by Joygirl (19390 posts) - - Show Bio

http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=r9fxf6VcBCM&desktop;_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3Dr9fxf6VcBCM

#20 Posted by batkevin74 (10587 posts) - - Show Bio

@Joygirl: This thing got a next chapter?

#21 Posted by wildvine (8941 posts) - - Show Bio

Bump

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#22 Posted by Pyrogram (36388 posts) - - Show Bio
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#24 Posted by Time_Phantom (522 posts) - - Show Bio

So glad this has more chapters. I plan on reading them. Maris Brood is a character that could have had been used more in the Force Unleashed.

#25 Posted by Rouflex (17231 posts) - - Show Bio

Hummmyeah

#26 Edited by ImpurestCheese (4883 posts) - - Show Bio

Part One Read. Back Story Researched onto part six.

#27 Posted by dngn4774 (3011 posts) - - Show Bio

Reading this on ff. Came for the pretty pictures. BUMP!