Chronicles of Brood -- Chapter One

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

#1  Edited By Joygirl

((Short teaser for a SW fic I thought up. Positive reaction my yield further installments.))

------------------------

Nothing had been saved. Both of her masters had been lost. She had been driven from the planet she had rightfully taken for her own. Even the dark side no longer wanted her.

Maris Brood was truly alone, and she knew who to blame. There was Vader – Darth Vader, the “lord of the sith”. There was Palpatine, the dark Emperor, the ruler of this twisted world. And then there was him – the boy. The apprentice, the assassin. Killed by the Emperor not long ago.

This was his fault. He had taken Shaak Ti from her, taken the senator from her, taken away her pride and driven her from Felucia. Now, even he was gone. Vengeance could not be had. She was without a goal, without guidance, without a master, without a home.

Multiple heavy stones dropped from their positions – floating in a ring around the zabrak – as Maris's train of thought ended. It was pointless even contemplating it – her connection to the force was scattered, with both light and dark sides vying for her tainted affection. She had promised him, that dark apprentice, that she would turn her back on the dark side. Vowed to him when he had spared her life.

But despite her efforts, the Dark Side of the Force had not turned its back on her.

Now, all she had was this place, this new hell. The system was damn near uncharted, as far as she knew – utterly empty of any intelligent life. Maybe it was better that way. Maris could concentrate on her connection with the animal and plant life, could train herself among them. Maybe she didn't need a master, or a mistress. What was the point, anyway? Being a jedi was of no use, anyway – all it did was make you a target. She had no authority, no rightful place in civilization. Perhaps this miserable, wet, stinking hole... this 'Degobah'... was where she belonged.

The zabrak girl twitched at the sound of a sudden bursting gas-bubble from a nearby, fetid pond. She let out a quiet groan and flopped back down onto the sticky, mossy rock she had been crouching on, her elbows resting on her thighs. Then again, maybe this wasn't where she belonged, and maybe nobody belonged here at all.

“I hate this place...” she growled, using her unstable connection with the Force to lift a small rock and toss it aimlessly at the pond, causing a dull, thick-sounding splash and an awkward burbling sound.

“Hate it, do you? My home this is – perhaps, hate you, it does, mmrh? Ooughrhhurhurhurhourgh."

Maris Brood
Maris Brood
Avatar image for rav4
rav4

1689

Forum Posts

3306

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 7

#2  Edited By rav4

@Joygirl: I am greatly intrigued

Avatar image for wildvine
wildvine

15336

Forum Posts

2609

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 3

User Lists: 50

#3  Edited By wildvine

I am tots be on board for more of this.

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

#4  Edited By Joygirl

:D?

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

#5  Edited By Joygirl

srsly u gaiz

Avatar image for nordok
Nordok

2828

Forum Posts

5

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

#6  Edited By Nordok  Moderator

Fantastic work!

Avatar image for project_worm
Project_Worm

4362

Forum Posts

16

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 6

User Lists: 0

#7  Edited By Project_Worm
No Caption Provided

Nuff said...

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

#8  Edited By Joygirl

Tiny edit at the end. Made Yoda's dialogue a little crazier.

For those wondering what kind of sound that is supposed to be, it is this:

Avatar image for batkevin74
batkevin74

16831

Forum Posts

1712

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 2

User Lists: 13

#9  Edited By batkevin74

@Joygirl said:

And then there was him – the boy. The apprentice, the assassin. Killed by the Emperor not long ago.

Is that Galen what's his face from that game??

@Joygirl said:

“I hate this place...” she growled, using her unstable connection with the Force to lift a small rock and toss it aimlessly at the pond, causing a dull, thick-sounding splash and an awkward burbling sound.

“Hate it, do you? My home this is – perhaps, hate you, it does, mmrh? Ooughrhhurhurhurhourgh."

Oooo Yoda got a new apprentice

Avatar image for pyrogram
Pyrogram

46168

Forum Posts

13113

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 10

User Lists: 1

#10  Edited By Pyrogram

@Joygirl: You said you are not sure what direction to take this, this is pretty good so far :)

Avatar image for guardiandevil83
Guardiandevil83

9481

Forum Posts

0

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

#11  Edited By Guardiandevil83

Your stuff is always good so I am not surprised. lol

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

#12  Edited By Joygirl

Thanks everyone. ^_^

Avatar image for supbatz
SupBatz

2186

Forum Posts

0

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 5

User Lists: 1

#13  Edited By SupBatz

@Joygirl: Pretty great start. I really like the way you established Maris as lost and torn in nearly every regard. Makes me feel bad for her - well, worse than I already had. And bringing her to Dagobah is an interesting twist. If you continue this I'm very interested in seeing the direction you go in. Awesome work :P

Avatar image for the_poet
The Poet

8646

Forum Posts

116846

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 84

User Lists: 99

#14  Edited By The Poet  Moderator

@Joygirl: cool.

look forward to seeing Yoda and Maris interact...

Avatar image for 4donkeyjohnson
4donkeyjohnson

2063

Forum Posts

0

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

#15  Edited By 4donkeyjohnson

Is Maris your own creation? I liked Star Wars, but the extra universe where Luke has kids etc never really got into, even the clone wars tv series annoyed me...which is no reflection on you it's just how I feel about the clone wars

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

#16  Edited By Joygirl

Maris was a minor character in The Force Unleashed video game that I took a shine to. ^_^ So this takes place a few years before Episode IV.

Avatar image for 4donkeyjohnson
4donkeyjohnson

2063

Forum Posts

0

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

#17  Edited By 4donkeyjohnson

Asides from being unable to count, George Lucas back-expanded his universe so that when Luke & Obi-Wan are suppiosedly the last of the Jedi the books, video games etc have 100,000 Jedi hiding in a cave going about their day, fighting for truth justice and force. Or maybe I'm mad at him for selling episodes 7-99 to Disney for $4 BILLION DOLLARS. As I said before, this has nothing to do with your nice, well written story....damn you LUCAS!!!!!

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

#18  Edited By Joygirl

http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=r9fxf6VcBCM&desktop;_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3Dr9fxf6VcBCM

Avatar image for batkevin74
batkevin74

16831

Forum Posts

1712

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 2

User Lists: 13

#20  Edited By batkevin74

@Joygirl: This thing got a next chapter?

Avatar image for wildvine
wildvine

15336

Forum Posts

2609

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 3

User Lists: 50

Bump

Avatar image for pyrogram
Pyrogram

46168

Forum Posts

13113

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 10

User Lists: 1

Avatar image for joygirl
Joygirl

21037

Forum Posts

482

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 43

Avatar image for time_phantom
Time_Phantom

834

Forum Posts

0

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

So glad this has more chapters. I plan on reading them. Maris Brood is a character that could have had been used more in the Force Unleashed.

Avatar image for rouflex
Rouflex

35970

Forum Posts

16652

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 3

Hummmyeah

Avatar image for impurestcheese
ImpurestCheese

12542

Forum Posts

2824

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 14

#26  Edited By ImpurestCheese

Part One Read. Back Story Researched onto part six.

Avatar image for dngn4774
dngn4774

5622

Forum Posts

41

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 22

Reading this on ff. Came for the pretty pictures. BUMP!