Butterguy: The First Monarch

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Tobias Butters was a young Monarchian, a type of being which lived on the planet Monarch, a planet a few times smaller than earth and not that far away. The anatomy of a Monarchian is the same of a human, male or female, except they grow a pair of "butterfly" wings when a Monarchian child hits puberty around eleven. When a Monarchian child goes through puberty, they go into a cocoon like shelter for at least a month and then come out with thier new pair of wings. Tobias Butters lived on a farm with his father and sister, working the fields, tending to the animals and just living a farmers life, when saw something fall from the sky, landing right into a field nearby. Confused, he went to his father (who seemingly did not like his son for belieivng he caused their mothers death) but realized that he must go alone in defiance to his father. There, he saw a meteor, but the meteor was made of pure metal. When Tobias touched it, his mind clouded over and he fell unconcious. When he awoke, he was in bed in his home and realized that it was all a dream. However, when he was tending the fields, he made the ground shake in anger as his father hit his sister. Tobias soon realized that he could control an element, rock. Excited by the idea, he went in search of the comet but could not find it, but had an epiphany... He could use his powers to help the Monarchian army and become the worlds first war hero. So, Tobias went to the King and Queen (and Princess) and showed them his powers by lifting the castle out of its roots. Frightened, the royal family banished the twenty-two year old from the planet and exiled him to earth, a planet made up of mostly water, the Monarchians weakness. However, the calculations were a miss and Butters landed in a city called Metropolis, where Superman, a Man of Steel, found the scared Monarchian and took him in. The Justice League of America debated whether they should let the alien stay on the planet and eventually everyone agreed, except for Batman, who believed there were enough aliens to go around. There, Tobias was trained under the best of the best, learning to control his powers by Geo-Force and learning how to fight hand to hand by Princess Diana/Wonder Woman. Finally, it was time to unveil himself to the public, however Barry Allen claimed that he could not go into public without a name, but Superman told him let the civilians decide. And as the Monarchian defeated his first villain, the people shouted for him...

"Butterguy! Butterguy! Butterguy!"

(Replace the "fly" in "butterfly" with guy because it rhymes :D)

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Tobias Butters was a young Monarchian, a type of being which lived on the planet Monarch, a planet a few times smaller than earth and not that far away.

The anatomy of a Monarchian is the same of a human, male or female, except they grow a pair of "butterfly" wings when a Monarchian child hits puberty around eleven. When a Monarchian child goes through puberty, they go into a cocoon like shelter for at least a month and then come out with their new pair of wings.

Tobias Butters lived on a farm with his father and sister, working the fields, tending to the animals and just living a farmers life, when saw something fall from the sky, landing right into a field nearby. Confused, he went to his father (who seemingly did not like his son for believing he caused their mothers death) but realized that he must go alone in defiance to his father. There, he saw a meteor, but the meteor was made of pure metal. When Tobias touched it, his mind clouded over and he fell unconscious.

When he awoke, he was in bed in his home and realized that it was all a dream. However, when he was tending the fields, he made the ground shake in anger as his father hit his sister. Tobias soon realized that he could control an element, rock. Excited by the idea, he went in search of the comet but could not find it, but had an epiphany... He could use his powers to help the Monarchian army and become the worlds first war hero.

So, Tobias went to the King and Queen (and Princess) and showed them his powers by lifting the castle out of its roots. Frightened, the royal family banished the twenty-two year old from the planet and exiled him to earth, a planet made up of mostly water, the Monarchians weakness.

However, the calculations were a miss and Butters landed in a city called Metropolis, where Superman, a Man of Steel, found the scared Monarchian and took him in. The Justice League of America debated whether they should let the alien stay on the planet and eventually everyone agreed, except for Batman, who believed there were enough aliens to go around.

There, Tobias was trained under the best of the best, learning to control his powers by Geo-Force and learning how to fight hand to hand by Princess Diana/Wonder Woman. Finally, it was time to unveil himself to the public, however Barry Allen claimed that he could not go into public without a name, but Superman told him let the civilians decide. And as the Monarchian defeated his first villain, the people shouted for him...

"Butterguy! Butterguy! Butterguy!"

(Replace the "fly" in "butterfly" with guy because it rhymes :D)

Okay. this is an intro, and Its meant to be taken lightly. But you won't get any comments or readers posting in a block. You have to break it up like I did. I would also point out this has a few typos. Other wise this could be an interesting read.

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@butterguy: Wildvine is right, this could be great with a little TLC.

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#4  Edited By 4donkeyjohnson

@butterguy: Wildvine is right, this could be great with a little TLC.

Nothing I can really add that the others haven't already covered. Though very clever with the monarch moniker. Good work but poorly formatted my friend