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PROLOGUE Part 1 Year 2166, Milky Way Galaxy, Zur-En-Arrh system

A human Alliance armada enters the system via the Mass Relays, the 36 ships approach the home world of the Vidothians, they are greeted by hundreds of destroyed ships blocking their way to the planet. On the leading spacecraft, the Arcturus, commander of the 5th fleet, admiral Steven Hackett stands at the command center of the ship, preparing himself and his men for the coming slaughter.

The old man standing tall in his blue Alliance uniform with a small blue cap on his head, despite him being nearly 90 years old, his physical appearance is that of a man in his early 40s, with a white haired goatee, a scar running below his left eye and another stretching through the entire left side of his face.

"How long before can get through all this debris? " Says Hackett while keeping his hands behind his back, his eyes closely examining all the ships, hoping to find survivors. The nearby deck officer pulls up his holoscreen, he looks at it for a moment and responds to the admiral once the calculation is completed.

"We should be able to reach Zur-En-Arrh within 15 to 20 minutes admiral, should I sound the alarm so the men can get ready for battle deployment? " Hackett slightly turned his head and nodded in the officers direction, within the next few moments all of the ships lit up with alarms ringing through their entire hulls.

Thousends of soldiers are seen running through their respective ships, gathering weapons, ammunition and meeting up with their commanding officers.

"Soldier, get me Liutenant David Anderson, Sargeant Kahlee Sanders and medical officer Thomas Wayne on the double! "

"Y-yes sir! " The deck officer is startled at how quickly Hacketts doom changed from emotionless to down right angry in an instant, he quickly picks himself up and sends the calls.

In the soldier quarters, a black communication ear piece begins glowing. A soldier stops cleaning his gun, gets up and picks up the ear piece. The man is in his early 30s, brown skinned with a neatly shaved head in black N7 armor.

"This is Liutenant Anderson speaking, what are your orders admiral? " He says it in a automative yet disciplined and respectful tone, his accent strongly hinting at a african american heritage.

"I need you to get you and your two fellow soldiers up here now, you will be deployed on a special mission, get here on the double for further details, Hackett out. "

"Hackett sounds like he's in a pretty bad mood, things must be bad down there. " Says a female voice, Anderson turns around to see his fellow soldier Kahlee Sanders sharpening her knife not even turning her gaze away from it while talking to Anderson.

"Well we are trying to stop the Batarians from whipping out an entire species, I still can't believe those sons of bitches would try to do something like this even after the Skyllian Blitz. " His anger clearly apparent as he clenches his fist.

"We wouldn't want things to be too easy, your words I believe? " The door opens, the two of them see Thomas Wayne keeping his back to the left side of the door with his arms crossed and a big smile on his face.

"Yeah I said that when I was just a punk kid who could shoot a target if it was two inches from my face. " Anderson quickly calmed down and even let out a small chuckle at his friend.

"If you two boys are done talking about the good old days, Hacketts gonna have our asses if we don't meet him soon. " Kahlee cuts in on the conversation as she places her knife in her belt and takes her sniper rifle and places it around her shoulder.

"Man, Kahlee, are you ever gonna lighten up? " Thomas says to her teasingly as she exits through the door, she ignores him for a minute then responds.

"Oh im sorry your majesty, Il make sure to be a good girl from now on. " She responds with heavy sarcasm in her voice. Thomas and Anderson just laughed silently as they followed her to the elevator and up to the command center.

Thomas wasnt really royalty, but his extremely wealthy family and social status almost made him as such in everything but name, that didn't stop the guys and girls from his training unit to make fun of him that way. Kahlee was the one who started it, Thomas didn't mind because she perfectly balanced out is laid back attitude with her all business one.

He looked at her as the big sister he never had, always bailing him out of trouble in the academy, giving him advice and saving his ass during many fights, heck without her Thomas would have never met Martha.

The three entered the command center of the Arcturus and slowly approached admiral Hackett.

" Reporting for duty admiral Hackttet sir! " They stopped in their tracks and saluted their commanding officer, he quickly turned around to face them.

"At ease soldiers. " He gave them a small hand gesture to lower their arms from their heads.

"You three are some of the best in your respective fields and all three of you have accomplished many incredible tasks in your years of service, but this is the most crucial mission of your careers, this will be your defining moment, weather or not you succeed it will not only affect you, but also the balance of power in the galaxies, speak up if you want to continue, there's no turning back though. " His voice both inspiring and nerve wracking, so much so that the three of them started to sweet. They don't say anything for a moment, a clear sign that none of them are backing down.

"Very well then. " He turns around and actives holo screens, all of them showing news footage from Zur-En-Arrh. It shows everything from an entire city being blown up to Batarians executing women and children.

"Some of this footage is whats going on the Vidothian home world, however after finally establishing communication with us, they have revealed that this battle has been going on for 5 years. " The three soldiers appear shocked from this discover. They don't say anything but Thomas is the first to speak up.

"How did the Batarians manage to wage a war of this scale without any of us knowing about it?! "

"We don't know, not yet at least, but this discovery along with the large scale destruction has given not only the Council pause but also the Republic, so much so that we are working together on this one. "

"Us and the Jedi? Working together?! " Kahlee commenting on the admirals claim in disbelief.

"Despite our past issues, we have both determined that the Batarians are a threat to us all, there is no peace this time, there is no negotiation, we will hit them hard and we will break them. " Hacketts voice rose with fierce anger and determination in it.

"This is why this mission is so important, you three are being sent down to the biggest hotspot, the capital city itself and make sure that this family makes it back safely to Earth. " He turns the dozen holoscreen into 3 large ones, one with male, one with a female and one with a small child on the screen.

"This is the most influential family of the Vidothian species, they have been stoping wars and keeping the peace for generations, not just for our galaxy, but for the Republic as well, theyre survival is imperative, if you fail... well lets just hope things don't ever get this bad. " Hacketts voice lowered and his head slowly fell, looking at the floor but it quickly rose up when the officer snapped him out of it.

"Admiral, weve cleared the debris field and the Republic fleet will be arriving shortly. " All of them started looking onto Zur-En-Arrh, the planet was completely on fire, the water seemingly evaporated and some parts of the planet completely consumed in lava.

Just ahead of them were hundreds upon hundreds of Batarian war ships all turning their attention to the newly arrived fleet. Just at that moment hundreds more Alliance, Council and Republic ships all exited hyper and slip space.

"You three better get down to the launch bay, this fight wont take long. " Hackett made a small smirk on that last part.

"Sir, yes, sir! " The three of them entered back into the lift and slowly made their way to the launch bay. Outside the newly formed Republic/Council alliance armada completely surrounded the vastly outgunned and outnumbered Batarian ships. Thats when Hackett gave the order.

"Fire! " The entire area lit up with hundreds of blue lights as the cannons fired everything from lasers to rockets, all of the crews patiently waited for their barrage to make impact with the enemy vessels, shortly after they hit the Batarian ships utterly decimating the enemy forces, but now the enemy ships lined themselves up for their barrage, the battle has only just begun......

To be continued.

Human Alliance – A future version of the UN, the join government that represents the entire species with all of the individual nations of Earth all having members in the Grand Human Council.

Batarians – A race of four-eyed bipeds native to the world of Khar'shan, the batarians are a disreputable species that chose to isolate itself from the rest of the galaxy. The Terminus Systems are infested with batarian pirate gangs and slaving rings, fueling the stereotype of the batarian thug, most batarians prefer profitable pursuits such as drug running and slave grabs to out-and-out warfare.

Terminus Systems – A independent part of space at the northern part of the Milky Way Galaxy, its independence is at a severe cost as the entire sector is a breeding ground for massive criminal, slave trading and mercenary activity.

Omega – A former mining station, turned gang hide out, Omega is the exact opposite of the Citadel, a completely lawless station where murder, rape and even genocide are done to the population that lives there.

Citadel – A large space station thought to be made from the extinct races of old, it is the seat of power in the Milky Way Galaxy and it is home to the Council, an organization of species all working for cooperation and military aid.

The Republic – The policial organization of the Force Galaxy, it has existed for over a 100 000 years and has faced many enemies in the form of Sith or alien invasions. Now at odds with the Milky Way Galaxy.

Vidothians – A advance race with a near identical resemblance to humanity, however with many attributes like super human strength, dexterity, mental capabilities, Force potential and even rumors of being able to bend the elements, spiritual world interaction and reincarnation.

Zur-En-Arrh – The Vidothian home world, it has been the primary negotiation ground for Republic/Council disputes and agreements, its in between position for both galaxies makes travel to it a long and tedious task but also allowed virtually no resistance to nearby colonization in the dark space reaches.

Dark Space – The area between galaxies, it is a cold and nearly inhabitable place, but species like the Vidothians have been able to survive here and have colonized dozens of planets without any resistance and have developed special abilities because of their millenia of living there.

N7 - A special program of the Alliance, only a few ever manage to complete the program, but those who do become the most feared and respected soldiers in both galaxies. Only 5 have completed it thus far. Anderson is one of them.

What do you guys think? Should I keep going with this, should I change the story or the tittle? Give me your thoughts down below.

#1 Edited by feebadger (1445 posts) - - Show Bio

Great story Ekrolo. Love the mix of different elements, you make htem work together really nicely. Look forward to more.

#2 Posted by batkevin74 (10615 posts) - - Show Bio

@ekrolo: Interesting. There's a few typos @ekrolo said:

PROLOGUE Part 1

Year 2166, Milky Way Galaxy, Zur-En-Arrh System

A human Alliance armada enters the system via the Mass Relays. The thirty six ships approach the home world of the Vidothians, they are greeted by hundreds of destroyed ships blocking their way to the planet. On the leading spacecraft, the Arcturus, was Admiral Steven Hackett, Commander of the 5th fleet. He stands at the command center of the ship, preparing himself and his men for the coming slaughter.

The old man standing tall in his blue Alliance uniform with a small blue cap on his head, despite him being nearly 90 years old, his physical appearance is that of a man in his early 40s, with a white haired goatee, a scar running below his left eye and another stretching through the entire left side of his face.

"How long before can get through all this debris?” Says Hackett while keeping his hands behind his back, his eyes closely examining all the ships, hoping to find survivors. The nearby deck officer pulls up his holoscreen; he looks at it for a moment and responds to the admiral once the calculation is completed.

"We should be able to reach Zur-En-Arrh within 15 to 20 minutes admiral, should I sound the alarm so the men can get ready for battle deployment?” Hackett slightly turned his head and nodded in the officer’s direction, within the next few moments all of the ships lit up with alarms ringing through their entire hulls.

Thousands of soldiers are seen running through their respective ships, gathering weapons, ammunition and meeting up with their commanding officers.

"Soldier, get me Lieutenant David Anderson, Sergeant Kahlee Sanders and medical officer Thomas Wayne on the double!”

"Y-yes sir!” The deck officer is startled at how quickly Hackett’s doom changed from emotionless to downright angry in an instant; he quickly picks himself up and sends the calls.

In the soldier quarters, a black communication ear piece begins glowing. A soldier stops cleaning his gun, gets up and picks up the ear piece. The man is in his early 30s, brown skinned with a neatly shaved head in black N7 armor.

"This is Lieutenant Anderson speaking, what are your orders admiral?” He says it in a automative yet disciplined and respectful tone, his accent strongly hinting at a African American heritage.

"I need you to get you and your two fellow soldiers up here now, you will be deployed on a special mission, get here on the double for further details, Hackett out. "

"Hackett sounds like he's in a pretty bad mood, things must be bad down there. " Says a female voice, Anderson turns around to see his fellow soldier Kahlee Sanders sharpening her knife not even turning her gaze away from it while talking to Anderson.

"Well we are trying to stop the Batarians from whipping out an entire species; I still can't believe those sons of bitches would try to do something like this even after the Skyllian Blitz. " His anger clearly apparent as he clenches his fist.

"We wouldn't want things to be too easy, your words I believe? " The door opens, the two of them see Thomas Wayne keeping his back to the left side of the door with his arms crossed and a big smile on his face.

"Yeah I said that when I was just a punk kid who could shoot a target if it was two inches from my face.” Anderson quickly calmed down and even let out a small chuckle at his friend.

"If you two boys are done talking about the good old days, Hackett’s gonna have our asses if we don't meet him soon.” Kahlee cuts in on the conversation as she places her knife in her belt and takes her sniper rifle and places it around her shoulder.

"Man, Kahlee, are you ever gonna lighten up? " Thomas says to her teasingly as she exits through the door, she ignores him for a minute then responds.

"Oh I’m sorry your majesty, I'll make sure to be a good girl from now on.” She responds with heavy sarcasm in her voice. Thomas and Anderson just laughed silently as they followed her to the elevator and up to the command center.

Thomas wasn’t really royalty, but his extremely wealthy family and social status almost made him as such in everything but name, that didn't stop the guys and girls from his training unit to make fun of him that way. Kahlee was the one who started it, Thomas didn't mind because she perfectly balanced out is laid back attitude with her all business one.

He looked at her as the big sister he never had, always bailing him out of trouble in the academy, giving him advice and saving his ass during many fights, heck without her Thomas would have never met Martha.

The three entered the command center of the Arcturus and slowly approached admiral Hackett.

"Reporting for duty admiral Hackett sir!” They stopped in their tracks and saluted their commanding officer, he quickly turned around to face them.

"At ease soldiers.” He gave them a small hand gesture to lower their arms from their heads.

"You three are some of the best in your respective fields and all three of you have accomplished many incredible tasks in your years of service, but this is the most crucial mission of your careers, this will be your defining moment, whether or not you succeed it will not only affect you, but also the balance of power in the galaxies, speak up if you want to continue, there's no turning back though. " His voice both inspiring and nerve wracking, so much so that the three of them started to sweet. They don't say anything for a moment, a clear sign that none of them are backing down.

"Very well then.” He turns around and actives holo screens, all of them showing news footage from Zur-En-Arrh. It shows everything from an entire city being blown up to Batarians executing women and children.

"Some of this footage is what’s going on the Vidothian home world, however after finally establishing communication with us, they have revealed that this battle has been going on for 5 years.” The three soldiers appear shocked from this discover. They don't say anything but Thomas is the first to speak up.

"How did the Batarians manage to wage a war of this scale without any of us knowing about it?! "

"We don't know, not yet at least, but this discovery along with the large scale destruction has given not only the Council pause but also the Republic, so much so that we are working together on this one. "

"Us and the Jedi? Working together?! " Kahlee commenting on the admirals claim in disbelief.

"Despite our past issues, we have both determined that the Batarians are a threat to us all, there is no peace this time, there is no negotiation, we will hit them hard and we will break them. " Hackett’s voice rose with fierce anger and determination in it.

"This is why this mission is so important, you three are being sent down to the biggest hotspot, the capital city itself and make sure that this family makes it back safely to Earth. " He turns the dozen holoscreen into 3 large ones, one with male, one with a female and one with a small child on the screen.

"This is the most influential family of the Vidothian species, they have been stoping wars and keeping the peace for generations, not just for our galaxy, but for the Republic as well, they’re survival is imperative, if you fail... well let’s just hope things don't ever get this bad. " Hackett’s voice lowered and his head slowly fell, looking at the floor but it quickly rose up when the officer snapped him out of it.

"Admiral, we’ve cleared the debris field and the Republic fleet will be arriving shortly.” All of them started looking onto Zur-En-Arrh, the planet was completely on fire, the water seemingly evaporated and some parts of the planet completely consumed in lava.

Just ahead of them were hundreds upon hundreds of Batarian war ships all turning their attention to the newly arrived fleet. Just at that moment hundreds more Alliance, Council and Republic ships all exited hyper and slip space.

"You three better get down to the launch bay, this fight won’t take long.” Hackett made a small smirk on that last part.

"Sir, yes, sir!” The three of them entered back into the lift and slowly made their way to the launch bay. Outside the newly formed Republic/Council alliance armada completely surrounded the vastly outgunned and outnumbered Batarian ships. That’s when Hackett gave the order.

"Fire!" The entire area lit up with hundreds of blue lights as the cannons fired everything from lasers to rockets, all of the crews patiently waited for their barrage to make impact with the enemy vessels, shortly after they hit the Batarian ships utterly decimating the enemy forces, but now the enemy ships lined themselves up for their barrage, the battle has only just begun......

To be continued.

Okay the stuff in bold are spelling mistakes I corrected or bad grammar changed for you.

#4 Posted by sentryssj4 (433 posts) - - Show Bio

@LadyLigeia said:

A lot of thought went into this and it flowed nicely. I like your attention to detail and descriptive action. Well done.

My thought's EXACTLY