With research my dialogue will get better, this is my first story. However even then, I am a minimalist, so do not expect me to put a lot of dialogue between characters that will have little to do with each other through out the entire story. I write what needs to be said. I could have had Claire defend herself in the dialogue, but as that would have been pointless (she would have lost anyway), I just referenced it instead. Scenes with a lot of dialogue are good for showing off a character's personality, and I will do that, as we go. I will write everyday, as practice makes perfect.
Part 2 Chap one Present (the story continues)
Going over what happened two nights ago in her mind, she knew she was not even at the break room during the alleged incident. She had went to her favorite restaurant around 6pm. The incident happened at 6:15 according to the camera footage, catching her double walking into the office at 6:10. With little to go on, Claire decided to call the office for any info she could get.
"Hello, may I speak to Larry please?" she said.
"What is your call regarding?" replied the cold office lady's voice. "It's me Claire, it's about a confidential matter; is he around?" "Ohh....yes, wait just a moment.", she replied.
Larry takes the call from his office with his door shut, "Hi Claire, how are you? I hope your OK...."
"I am, I wanted to know.....I know it sounds crazy but whoever you saw on camera was not me, I'm sure of it---"
"Claire? Have you sought out help? With your problem?”
“As I have said---it was not me.”
“OK... let's say it wasn't you, do you you have a twin, and if so---why would she do that to you?”
“Look....I have no twin, I just need some information so I can get to the bottom of this. Did she say anything to anyone?”