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Ivory_Oasis

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#1 Edited By Ivory_Oasis

Hiya, I was pointed here by an art friend. Lately I decided to go ahead and give making a comic a try (sounds like fun) and have tried a couple of styles before coming to the one I am at now (the name of the comic is going to be "Bloom" btw). I would love it if anyone had some feedback for it so far! (only a couple pages). Right now the tone is darker and the characters are more shillouette, but it will brighten up after this sequence and the story moves on (so the entire thing won't be so gloomy).

14 years ago

Agent Buttons

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#2 Edited By Agent Buttons

It's visually appealing. My favorite parts are the backgrounds. Even though they don't have color it' is very captivating. Awesome job! :-)

14 years ago

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#3 Edited By frischdvh

I dig the style, its one I'm not very good at. The only feedback I'd give is a little more definite lines than are present. Its reminiscent of early Texeria. Can you elaborate on the story? Superb job great detail.

14 years ago

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#4 Edited By sora_thekey

@Ivory_Oasis: I think I'm in love with your art, I most definetly agree with Agent Buttons on the backgrounds... I can't stop starring at them...
Also Frisch is right more define lines will make it stand out more....

One more thing on the second page on the panel with the lips... it took me a while to figure out they were lips... maybe a little more lighting on them

14 years ago

Ivory_Oasis

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#5 Edited By Ivory_Oasis

Thanks a bunch :)  I'm really happy you like them! :D

The story is going to be pretty long (hopefully! it's always a good idea to leave room for more things to happen P:) right now it is just setting the stage for the main character and where she comes from.

Oh, when you say to add more defined lines... do you mean cleaner edges? I don't really draw with lines like you would a pencil or something like that, it's more just painting (so much more relaxing! :D). Unless you are talking about the lines between panels?

Thanks again for the feedback and help (ill try to fix the face panel at the bottom haha, my sister thought it was a lion o.O )

14 years ago

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#6 Edited By InnerVenom123

LOVE the artwork!!

14 years ago

Emperor Gonzo Noir

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#7 Edited By Emperor Gonzo Noir

I'm intrigued...

14 years ago

Ivory_Oasis

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#8 Edited By Ivory_Oasis

Here are a couple more pages :) I think I need to go back and brighten up a few panels / areas.... guurrr.

14 years ago

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#9 Edited By Ivory_Oasis

Here a few more pages :D I been busy! grraaaa

14 years ago

Agent Buttons

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#10 Edited By Agent Buttons

Nice

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Donovan Montgomery

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#11 Edited By Donovan Montgomery

This is all done with paint? Very nice. I, to, would like to have a bit of discription of what's happening and why, but I would hate to see it in the pannels. I'm thinking dialog and story on a facing page to correspond with the pannels.

14 years ago

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#12 Edited By EdwardWindsor

i think the artwork is very well done, great job man

14 years ago

Ivory_Oasis

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#13 Edited By Ivory_Oasis

@Donovan Montgomery said:

" This is all done with paint? Very nice. I, to, would like to have a bit of discription of what's happening and why, but I would hate to see it in the pannels. I'm thinking dialog and story on a facing page to correspond with the pannels. "

oh no no, it's all digital (digital painting :D). I been thinking about what I should do about the dialogue too... didn't really plan out too well on the panels where I would put things, was just gonna try to fit them in somewhere heh.

here are a few more :)

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Agent Buttons

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#14 Edited By Agent Buttons

wow you're pretty awesome at this whole digital painting thing. is it hard to learn?

14 years ago

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#15 Edited By Ivory_Oasis

@Agent Buttons:
humm, it's as hard to learn as normal drawing. Just instead of shading with a marker or something like that, I use a digital brush. I think digital gives a lot more freedom and lot less mess though (so it's a lot more relaxing! unless you keep drawing something wrong... for 5 hours... and then you kind of go crazy....which also happens to be the reason I'm short of my 2 page a day goal! gaaaaah! lol)

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#16 Edited By Agent Buttons